Haiku (Storm of snow)
Contest entry62 total reviews
Comment from drivenbackward
I like the way you matched the poem with the picture. On the other had, I think haikus are supposed to use as few words as possible. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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I like the way you matched the poem with the picture. On the other had, I think haikus are supposed to use as few words as possible. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Thank you drivenbackward for the excellent review and stars. I am fairly new with Haiku's among many other forms of poetry, so I sit back and wait for the help to come LOL. God Bless!
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Comment from kiwijenny
Storm of snow ...oh this is amazing...
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The snow flying.....and it is captured in a haiku....frozen moment in time
Well done
God bless
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Storm of snow ...oh this is amazing...
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The snow flying.....and it is captured in a haiku....frozen moment in time
Well done
God bless
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
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Thank you again Kiwi for another excellent review and stars. God bless!
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Comment from RGstar
Good image which suits your thesis well. I love the depicted action of the two bears.
These short poems are so difficult to judge but I wish you the best of luck.
Best wishes,
RGstar
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Good image which suits your thesis well. I love the depicted action of the two bears.
These short poems are so difficult to judge but I wish you the best of luck.
Best wishes,
RGstar
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Thank you RGstar for the excellent review and stars. I am new at this style of writing and certainly unable to judge them myself LOL! God Bless!
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This has my vote without question.
Comment from acerisestory
This is a well written haiku, mystery writer! The picture of the polar bears "dancing" is a perfect fit for your words.
Great use of alliteration. This is a strong entry for the contest. Best of luck! Alana
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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This is a well written haiku, mystery writer! The picture of the polar bears "dancing" is a perfect fit for your words.
Great use of alliteration. This is a strong entry for the contest. Best of luck! Alana
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Thank you Alana for the excellent review and stars once again. I do enjoy your reviews, they give me hope that I may someday be good at this LOL. God Bless!
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You are welcome!
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Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I like:
the picture (I will say it is cute)
the alliteration: storm/snow/skies
the playfulness with "Polar Bears dance" when we know they could send a person many feet in the air with a swipe of their massive paws
Your syllable count is good
No changes needed.
Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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I like:
the picture (I will say it is cute)
the alliteration: storm/snow/skies
the playfulness with "Polar Bears dance" when we know they could send a person many feet in the air with a swipe of their massive paws
Your syllable count is good
No changes needed.
Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Thank you Jannypan for another excellent review and stars. Your feedback is precious to me and I look forward to reading it every time. God Bless!
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I will.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
A very good haiku - perfect interconnecting lines 1 and 2 followed by a very good satori - an all round good haiku with the perfect picture. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy
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A very good haiku - perfect interconnecting lines 1 and 2 followed by a very good satori - an all round good haiku with the perfect picture. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
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Thank you Dorothy for the inspiring and thoughtful review and stars. I always enjoy what you have to offer in the form of feedback. God Bless!
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Comment from TAB_that's me
They probably are dancing in the snow. Great imagery:) Perfect haiku form. Great entry - good luck to you.
~~~teresa~~~
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They probably are dancing in the snow. Great imagery:) Perfect haiku form. Great entry - good luck to you.
~~~teresa~~~
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
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Thank you Teresa for another excellent review and stars. God bless!
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Comment from Domino 2
I love the powerful use of, 'blinding fury'. 'Ravages' is a great word, too.
Great pic of the Polar bears that could be doing various things. :-)
Good luck and best wishes, Ray.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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I love the powerful use of, 'blinding fury'. 'Ravages' is a great word, too.
Great pic of the Polar bears that could be doing various things. :-)
Good luck and best wishes, Ray.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
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Thank you Ray for the excellent review and stars. God Bless!
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Comment from adewpearl
stunning presentation of your poem
good alliteration in your opening line
vivid concrete imagery that makes for a dramatic scene with strong sensory and emotional appeal
love the strong verb choice of ravage to intensify the dramatic impact
love the contrast between the ravaging storm and the dancing bears :-) Brooke
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stunning presentation of your poem
good alliteration in your opening line
vivid concrete imagery that makes for a dramatic scene with strong sensory and emotional appeal
love the strong verb choice of ravage to intensify the dramatic impact
love the contrast between the ravaging storm and the dancing bears :-) Brooke
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
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Thank you Brooke, you never fail to impress me with your amazing review and stars. I appreciate it dearly and look forward to reading more of you work as well. God Bless!
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Comment from rjpurdy
Marvelous! A complete story in so few words, or syllables. Haiku is the most difficult form of poetry I believe and you have nailed it. Vivid imagery and great descriptors. A strong contender for sure and I wish you good fortune in the voting.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Marvelous! A complete story in so few words, or syllables. Haiku is the most difficult form of poetry I believe and you have nailed it. Vivid imagery and great descriptors. A strong contender for sure and I wish you good fortune in the voting.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
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Thank you rypurdy for another excellent review and stars from you. I found the picture online as I was looking for inspiration. God Bless!
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