My Friend's a Jack-O'-Lantern
rhyming quatrains in 7/6/7/6102 total reviews
Comment from rama devi
Fun and unique. Timely for the Halloween season. Good flow and rhyming, as usual, as well as fine phonetics in poetic devices, like the alliteration in these stanzas, especially
When crows are congregating
and bats are swooping low,
he stares with eyes aglowing
till off in space they go.
and
When ghosts set stairs to creaking
and rattle rusty chains,
he scolds them into silence
till only peace remains.
and
No ghoul gets past the boundaries
my bodyguard has built -
and those who try are sorry,
but cannot flee their guilt.
Hair and there is a good rhyme pair
Good job and fine presentation.
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
Fun and unique. Timely for the Halloween season. Good flow and rhyming, as usual, as well as fine phonetics in poetic devices, like the alliteration in these stanzas, especially
When crows are congregating
and bats are swooping low,
he stares with eyes aglowing
till off in space they go.
and
When ghosts set stairs to creaking
and rattle rusty chains,
he scolds them into silence
till only peace remains.
and
No ghoul gets past the boundaries
my bodyguard has built -
and those who try are sorry,
but cannot flee their guilt.
Hair and there is a good rhyme pair
Good job and fine presentation.
Love,
rd
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Thank you, rd, for your thoughtful comments :-) Brooke
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:-)
Comment from Just2Write
Awww. This is just so darned cute. Another Halloween poem that is rated G - for 'good' and 'great'
Loved the warmth and comradery of this Halloween treat.
Loved the Jack-o-latern sweater that Sawyer is wearing in photo 1. So darlin'
Rose.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
Awww. This is just so darned cute. Another Halloween poem that is rated G - for 'good' and 'great'
Loved the warmth and comradery of this Halloween treat.
Loved the Jack-o-latern sweater that Sawyer is wearing in photo 1. So darlin'
Rose.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Rose, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from acerisestory
Now, I'd like to have a Jack-O'-Lantern friend like that! And what a perfect name -- Jack! This is a great poem, and I can only imagine what Sawyer thinks of it, Brooke.
Your rhyming is perfect as always, and your alliteration makes the words flow wonderfully. I love the progression of Sawyer's growth in your artwork. So cute.
Thanks for another truly fun poem, Brooke. Alana
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
Now, I'd like to have a Jack-O'-Lantern friend like that! And what a perfect name -- Jack! This is a great poem, and I can only imagine what Sawyer thinks of it, Brooke.
Your rhyming is perfect as always, and your alliteration makes the words flow wonderfully. I love the progression of Sawyer's growth in your artwork. So cute.
Thanks for another truly fun poem, Brooke. Alana
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Alana, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Brooke,
I hope you don't mind that I'm cracking up. I know it's not classified as humor, but it sure gave me a few laughs. I need to get me my own Jack-O-Lantern - I had no idea they were so useful. 'Jack always has my back' I just love that!
Hugs,
Lou
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
Hi Brooke,
I hope you don't mind that I'm cracking up. I know it's not classified as humor, but it sure gave me a few laughs. I need to get me my own Jack-O-Lantern - I had no idea they were so useful. 'Jack always has my back' I just love that!
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Lou, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Sasha
I just love this one. Beautifully written, marvelous rhyme and rhythm too. Love the photos of Sawyer...my he is growing so fast. I do love this time of year, it brings out the fun in all of us. Keep up the great work.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
I just love this one. Beautifully written, marvelous rhyme and rhythm too. Love the photos of Sawyer...my he is growing so fast. I do love this time of year, it brings out the fun in all of us. Keep up the great work.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Valerie, thank you so much :-) Last week his dad told him he remembered when he was just a baby and now he's a little kid, and Sawyer objected that he is a BIG kid LOL :-) Brooke
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How cute. 'Little' kids do not like any words that describe them as 'small'.
Comment from Ben Colder
Now he has blossomed into a handsome little dude. I know he is not spoiled. Grandmother would never do that. She did it again , Sawyer.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
Now he has blossomed into a handsome little dude. I know he is not spoiled. Grandmother would never do that. She did it again , Sawyer.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Ben, thank you so very much :-) Actually, I am not a spoiler, at least with things. He has a house full of stuff, a hoard of stuff, so Grandma doesn't add to it. LOL :-) Brooke
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My Mary can not admit to that. We love them just the same.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
This is a delightful poem Brooke in good abcb rhyme and a nice change from all the 'ghoul' poems. Such a lovely triplet of pictures of Sawyer and Oh the change that has taken place in 2 years. How quickly they grow - it's frightening! Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
This is a delightful poem Brooke in good abcb rhyme and a nice change from all the 'ghoul' poems. Such a lovely triplet of pictures of Sawyer and Oh the change that has taken place in 2 years. How quickly they grow - it's frightening! Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Dorothy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A wonderful children's poem. Delightful to read. I love the pictures of Sawyer. My, how he has grown. Thanks for sharing this. Have a blessed day, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
A wonderful children's poem. Delightful to read. I love the pictures of Sawyer. My, how he has grown. Thanks for sharing this. Have a blessed day, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Debbie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Curly Girly
I really enjoyed reading this fun poem regarding Halloween. Sawyer must be old enough to start appreciating your poems by now. I reckon he is going to love this one -- it's such fun!
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
I really enjoyed reading this fun poem regarding Halloween. Sawyer must be old enough to start appreciating your poems by now. I reckon he is going to love this one -- it's such fun!
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Curly Girly, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from kiwijenny
Thanks Brooke but this guy Jack that has your back has given me inspiration...thank you ..I had an impasse in my mind about my novel...I needed this poem..it's adorable as is the triptych of Sawyer
God bless
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
Thanks Brooke but this guy Jack that has your back has given me inspiration...thank you ..I had an impasse in my mind about my novel...I needed this poem..it's adorable as is the triptych of Sawyer
God bless
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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kiwijenny, thank you so much :-) Brooke