My Friend's a Jack-O'-Lantern
rhyming quatrains in 7/6/7/6102 total reviews
Comment from Drew Delaney
Such cute pictures of Sawyer. I love it when you put a picture of him on. I think I will share my babies too, once I get settled. This moving is still going on and my back is killing me. This week and next week will be tough, and once that is done, I should be getting closer to normal, I HOPE.
Very nice poem, Brooke. You are such a great writer and I can tell you enjoy the season.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Such cute pictures of Sawyer. I love it when you put a picture of him on. I think I will share my babies too, once I get settled. This moving is still going on and my back is killing me. This week and next week will be tough, and once that is done, I should be getting closer to normal, I HOPE.
Very nice poem, Brooke. You are such a great writer and I can tell you enjoy the season.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Drew, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from mermaids
I can see this poem as an animated movie. I like the theme of the Jack o Lantern protecting the little boy. I also like how you mention all the Halloween characters such as ghosts and werewolves that may scare the child. Your verses are smooth and a sense of fun comes through.
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I can see this poem as an animated movie. I like the theme of the Jack o Lantern protecting the little boy. I also like how you mention all the Halloween characters such as ghosts and werewolves that may scare the child. Your verses are smooth and a sense of fun comes through.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Elaine, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Aussie
A Jack-O'-Lantern is a pumpkin cut for Halloween, is it not? Your quatrains are simply superb. Good for you Miranda - excellent photos of that handsome young man. I loved your poem and wish I had six stars - I don't! Grrr. So today, six virtual ****** will have to do.
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A Jack-O'-Lantern is a pumpkin cut for Halloween, is it not? Your quatrains are simply superb. Good for you Miranda - excellent photos of that handsome young man. I loved your poem and wish I had six stars - I don't! Grrr. So today, six virtual ****** will have to do.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Kay, thank you so much, my friend :-) Yep, you're right. You should be able to see pictures of them by Googling. Some people carve very elaborate ones :-) Brooke
Comment from Melspoems
I loved this poem. It's well written with great rhythm and rhymes, but mainly Iove that it gives kids a sense of someone watching over them during the season that can be scary for some.
Nice pictures of Sawyer over his last 3 halloweens.
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I loved this poem. It's well written with great rhythm and rhymes, but mainly Iove that it gives kids a sense of someone watching over them during the season that can be scary for some.
Nice pictures of Sawyer over his last 3 halloweens.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Melspoems, thank you so much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from krys123
Brooke;
basically I found out that the purpose of this poem, for me anyway, was for me to enjoy it completely and that's what I have done. A marvelously written poem with an interesting and enjoyable thesis and plot.
The main character, being the jack-o'-lantern, turned out to be a well and virtually a do-gooder on this all hollows eve: "he tames the Venus fly trap to make a rose's bud, and pulls the fangs from vampires, so they can draw no blood."
The imagery was very figurative and emblematic with also a very descriptive and excitingly expressive imagery throughout the writing: "the werewolves start their howling and sprout the monster's hair, Jack banishes the Wolf pack till only we are there." Jack-o'-lantern seems to be the Superman of Halloween.
I just love your structure of the writing, for its 7/6/7/6 metering which makes the rhythm flow so smoothly throughout the writing. And even the rhyming helps with the rhythmic flow. I have noticed Rich, Scarce, Ceasural and Crossed rhymes that were used. Individual rhyming's were rhymes of assonant, feminine, light line, and rich rhymes just to name a few.
All in all I enjoyed this really new perspective on the Superman of Halloween basically name the jack-o'-lantern.
Thank you so much for sharing and posting this for everyone to read and may the good Lord will be always with you Brooke.
Alex
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Brooke;
basically I found out that the purpose of this poem, for me anyway, was for me to enjoy it completely and that's what I have done. A marvelously written poem with an interesting and enjoyable thesis and plot.
The main character, being the jack-o'-lantern, turned out to be a well and virtually a do-gooder on this all hollows eve: "he tames the Venus fly trap to make a rose's bud, and pulls the fangs from vampires, so they can draw no blood."
The imagery was very figurative and emblematic with also a very descriptive and excitingly expressive imagery throughout the writing: "the werewolves start their howling and sprout the monster's hair, Jack banishes the Wolf pack till only we are there." Jack-o'-lantern seems to be the Superman of Halloween.
I just love your structure of the writing, for its 7/6/7/6 metering which makes the rhythm flow so smoothly throughout the writing. And even the rhyming helps with the rhythmic flow. I have noticed Rich, Scarce, Ceasural and Crossed rhymes that were used. Individual rhyming's were rhymes of assonant, feminine, light line, and rich rhymes just to name a few.
All in all I enjoyed this really new perspective on the Superman of Halloween basically name the jack-o'-lantern.
Thank you so much for sharing and posting this for everyone to read and may the good Lord will be always with you Brooke.
Alex
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much, Alex - I'm thrilled you enjoyed yourself :-) Brooke
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You are so sincerely welcome my friend.
Alex
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
I do love your Halloween poetry frenzy. This is too cute by half. I love the scaries you stymie but when the Venus Fly Trap arose . . .well done and easily scanned. Do you know what Sawyer is wearing this year?
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I do love your Halloween poetry frenzy. This is too cute by half. I love the scaries you stymie but when the Venus Fly Trap arose . . .well done and easily scanned. Do you know what Sawyer is wearing this year?
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much, my friend. He is going to be Buzz Lightyear from Toy Story. His mom is making a Woody costume for his dad and a Jessie cowgirl costume for herself so they are a set :-) Brooke
Comment from Diny
WOW you did to the jack o lanturn what I think was expertly crafted- You made him ah ero!
Wonderful premise dear one as always
you are the master of the craft-
Write on Diny
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WOW you did to the jack o lanturn what I think was expertly crafted- You made him ah ero!
Wonderful premise dear one as always
you are the master of the craft-
Write on Diny
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Di, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, brooke. I like the line Jack always has my back and about warning the witches to let him pass. I like the pictures but the first one is my favorite.
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this is an excellent write, brooke. I like the line Jack always has my back and about warning the witches to let him pass. I like the pictures but the first one is my favorite.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
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sweetwoodjax, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from The Death
Hi Brooke,
Finally got some to review today. What a fun, whimsical poem! I like the idea of Jack-O'-Lantern being a friend.
The first stanza sounds really lovely:
My friend's a Jack-O'-Lantern,
who goes by name of Jack,
and everywhere I travel
I know he has my back.
Excellent use of A assonance here.
You've included effective imagery so as to make it more interesting.
These stanzas made me chuckle:
When crows are congregating
and bats are swooping low,
he stares with eyes aglowing
till off in space they go.
Nice use of C alliteration in line one, and N consonance throughout.
He tames the Venus fly trap
to make a rose's bud,
and pulls the fangs from vampires,
so they can draw no blood.
LOL! Nice inventive rhymes here.
The ending is very fine:
My friend's a Jack-O'-Lantern,
so if you should attack,
prepare for what befalls you --
Jack always has my back.
It was a very enjoyable read. Excellent meter and fine flow, too.
Love n Light,
Anupam
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Hi Brooke,
Finally got some to review today. What a fun, whimsical poem! I like the idea of Jack-O'-Lantern being a friend.
The first stanza sounds really lovely:
My friend's a Jack-O'-Lantern,
who goes by name of Jack,
and everywhere I travel
I know he has my back.
Excellent use of A assonance here.
You've included effective imagery so as to make it more interesting.
These stanzas made me chuckle:
When crows are congregating
and bats are swooping low,
he stares with eyes aglowing
till off in space they go.
Nice use of C alliteration in line one, and N consonance throughout.
He tames the Venus fly trap
to make a rose's bud,
and pulls the fangs from vampires,
so they can draw no blood.
LOL! Nice inventive rhymes here.
The ending is very fine:
My friend's a Jack-O'-Lantern,
so if you should attack,
prepare for what befalls you --
Jack always has my back.
It was a very enjoyable read. Excellent meter and fine flow, too.
Love n Light,
Anupam
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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it's good to hear from you, Anumpam - thank you for your detailed, thoughtful comments :-) Brooke
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Thanks for such a lovely reply, though you have got my name wrong again. LOL!
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I swear I have a mental block - I am so sorry. Chalk it up to how OLD I am :-) Brooke
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Well, you're not that old. :)
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Hey, if being old gets me out of trouble, I go with it ;-)
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Haha, if that's the case, then being young(not so much!) will offer me a lot of relaxations. ;)
Comment from jmdg1954
Aiden and Sawyer must be about the same age. It's her third Halloween and our photos show them about the same size doing the same thing, playing. I find it amazing its been three years already? They are getting older, we've stopped.
Another fine Halloween poem, perfect for children. Thanks for sharing. V John
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Aiden and Sawyer must be about the same age. It's her third Halloween and our photos show them about the same size doing the same thing, playing. I find it amazing its been three years already? They are getting older, we've stopped.
Another fine Halloween poem, perfect for children. Thanks for sharing. V John
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much, John - he is 29 months old :-) Brooke
