My Friend's a Jack-O'-Lantern
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Comment from angelface2
Sawyer sure has a good friend in Jack. The pictures are so cute. Such a nicely written poem, as always in good form and rhythm. :>D Miss Sally
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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Sawyer sure has a good friend in Jack. The pictures are so cute. Such a nicely written poem, as always in good form and rhythm. :>D Miss Sally
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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Miss Sally, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Honeysuckle1876
Excellent writing. This was a very enjoyable and fun read. The rhythm was smooth in the cadence of your words. Rhyming abcb was perfect. I loved the lines " Jack always has my back". Those are adorable pictures.
Great Halloween poem.
Blessings Angie
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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Excellent writing. This was a very enjoyable and fun read. The rhythm was smooth in the cadence of your words. Rhyming abcb was perfect. I loved the lines " Jack always has my back". Those are adorable pictures.
Great Halloween poem.
Blessings Angie
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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Angie, thank you so very much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from donaldww
Halloween wouldn't be the same without a Jack-O-Lantern, welcoming the kids to friendly doors, but scary enough to keep them on their toes.
Once the kids have arrived in certain yards, expecting candy, etc., some people have decorations, music, or even actors ready to scare the kids. I'm thinking of a guy who hides in a coffin by his walkway, and rises up with a howl as the kids pass. I wonder if his wife has ever had to give out any candy, given the screams and kids running in every direction other than towards their door.
Good alliteration: rattle rusty, set stairs, crows congregating.
A great halloween treat, replete with vampires and werewolves.
Cheers,
DW
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Halloween wouldn't be the same without a Jack-O-Lantern, welcoming the kids to friendly doors, but scary enough to keep them on their toes.
Once the kids have arrived in certain yards, expecting candy, etc., some people have decorations, music, or even actors ready to scare the kids. I'm thinking of a guy who hides in a coffin by his walkway, and rises up with a howl as the kids pass. I wonder if his wife has ever had to give out any candy, given the screams and kids running in every direction other than towards their door.
Good alliteration: rattle rusty, set stairs, crows congregating.
A great halloween treat, replete with vampires and werewolves.
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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thanks so much, DW :-) Brooke
Comment from amahra
Wow in just three years Sawyer has grown so quickly. Loved the positive Halloween poem. It's meant to give kids power over the ghouls instead of being frightened by them. Only you would think of that.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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Wow in just three years Sawyer has grown so quickly. Loved the positive Halloween poem. It's meant to give kids power over the ghouls instead of being frightened by them. Only you would think of that.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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amahra, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from INtity
Nicely done! I love the imagery and descriptions in this poem! The poem is well designed with excellent choice of words. I like the story in this poem as well and all the things that Jack does like taming the Venus Flytrap and pulling the fangs from vampires.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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Nicely done! I love the imagery and descriptions in this poem! The poem is well designed with excellent choice of words. I like the story in this poem as well and all the things that Jack does like taming the Venus Flytrap and pulling the fangs from vampires.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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INtity, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Glasstruth
Jack sounds like an awesome friend. Funny, how kids can make objects come alive in their minds. I guess that's the great thing about being a kid. Awesome rhyming. Love the internal rhyme at the end: "Jack always has my back." Well crafted! Les
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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Jack sounds like an awesome friend. Funny, how kids can make objects come alive in their minds. I guess that's the great thing about being a kid. Awesome rhyming. Love the internal rhyme at the end: "Jack always has my back." Well crafted! Les
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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Les, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from DSMalott
Good read.
Strong rhyming and precisely measured patterns of rhythmic accent.
Jack, or Jack-o-lantern, came alive in each stanza with your careful and humorous portrayal of his menacing presence.
Well done.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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Good read.
Strong rhyming and precisely measured patterns of rhythmic accent.
Jack, or Jack-o-lantern, came alive in each stanza with your careful and humorous portrayal of his menacing presence.
Well done.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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DS, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from LIJ Red
I never thought of the dark history of the jack-o-lantern
but it seems likely that they originally were put out to
scare away evil. Excellent poem.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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I never thought of the dark history of the jack-o-lantern
but it seems likely that they originally were put out to
scare away evil. Excellent poem.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much, LIJ :-) Brooke
Comment from rjuselius
haha. lol. although extremely entertaining, the poem has an eerie atmosphere. not really for young kids to read. that's how you know it's a success in horror and thriller writing.
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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haha. lol. although extremely entertaining, the poem has an eerie atmosphere. not really for young kids to read. that's how you know it's a success in horror and thriller writing.
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much, rebekka :-) Brooke
Comment from Val Crisson
"Jack always has my back" - that is too funny. I always love your Halloween poetry, and if you haven't published a book to them you should. This is packed with October imagery at it's best. From werewolves to ghouls this one has it all. Awesome!
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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"Jack always has my back" - that is too funny. I always love your Halloween poetry, and if you haven't published a book to them you should. This is packed with October imagery at it's best. From werewolves to ghouls this one has it all. Awesome!
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much, Val, for your generous and encouraging response to this poem :-) Brooke
