Texas Dream Catcher
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "CHAPTER SIETE; PART TRES"Drug & human trafficking, can romance win?
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Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Barbara:)
This is a short post, but it certainly ends with a powerful cliffhanger. Maybe this conflict will bring Jim out of his own secrecy and reveal who he really is.
Just a couple of suggestions:
1. I know Grandfather wonders where [we're at ==> we are]." (Change suggested for simplicity and better flow. {'we're at' is a common colloquium, but I'm not sure it is bad grammar.}
2. I wonder if this is part of the warning the letter talked about.' {I know from the italics that this is in Soni's thoughts. Wouldn't this be a good time for Soni to stop being so coy about the warning letter? Jim needs to be aware of possible danger, especially after his own ambush.}
I will certainly be waiting to find out who hhas stopped Soni and Jim. In the meantime you still have my love and Irish Hugs,
Roger
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2014
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Hi Barbara:)
This is a short post, but it certainly ends with a powerful cliffhanger. Maybe this conflict will bring Jim out of his own secrecy and reveal who he really is.
Just a couple of suggestions:
1. I know Grandfather wonders where [we're at ==> we are]." (Change suggested for simplicity and better flow. {'we're at' is a common colloquium, but I'm not sure it is bad grammar.}
2. I wonder if this is part of the warning the letter talked about.' {I know from the italics that this is in Soni's thoughts. Wouldn't this be a good time for Soni to stop being so coy about the warning letter? Jim needs to be aware of possible danger, especially after his own ambush.}
I will certainly be waiting to find out who hhas stopped Soni and Jim. In the meantime you still have my love and Irish Hugs,
Roger
Comment Written 12-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2014
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It will all come to a head soon enough. Soni doesn't trust Jim, yet. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Neonewman
Wow Barbara, I certainly can see why you are awarded these wonderful ribbons. I am not normally into romance but after reading this I will have to cover the other chapters. God Bless!
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2014
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Wow Barbara, I certainly can see why you are awarded these wonderful ribbons. I am not normally into romance but after reading this I will have to cover the other chapters. God Bless!
Comment Written 09-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2014
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Comment from Loren (7)
Sorry, out of six stars:( But this is deserving, the building of the suspense is well done, especially by the casual way you lead up to it with the conversation, etc., yet at the same time leaving little bread crumbs of clues that may or may not mean anything. I'm reading backwards, as I'm catching up from work and chores, so hope to read the previous chapter soon. Loren
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2014
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Sorry, out of six stars:( But this is deserving, the building of the suspense is well done, especially by the casual way you lead up to it with the conversation, etc., yet at the same time leaving little bread crumbs of clues that may or may not mean anything. I'm reading backwards, as I'm catching up from work and chores, so hope to read the previous chapter soon. Loren
Comment Written 09-Oct-2014
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Comment from Selina Stambi
It's nice to see the two settling into a comfortable relationship.
Drama with some romance thrown in is always a good mix!
Enjoyed the chapter, Barbara. :)
Sonali
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2014
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It's nice to see the two settling into a comfortable relationship.
Drama with some romance thrown in is always a good mix!
Enjoyed the chapter, Barbara. :)
Sonali
Comment Written 08-Oct-2014
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Comment from jaeladarling
Uh-oh - a strange light, and now strange men. Wonder what's going on? Looking forward to the next chapter to find out! :)
Just one little thing:
She glanced at Jim. Ready?" (Open the quote)
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2014
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Uh-oh - a strange light, and now strange men. Wonder what's going on? Looking forward to the next chapter to find out! :)
Just one little thing:
She glanced at Jim. Ready?" (Open the quote)
Comment Written 08-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review. I have fixed the error.
Comment from James Dooney
Its interesting how your story develops here. Yes romance can occur between such people believe it or not!! Good work with this !
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2014
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Its interesting how your story develops here. Yes romance can occur between such people believe it or not!! Good work with this !
Comment Written 08-Oct-2014
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Comment from pbroussard209
This was a great suspenseful chapter, you left off at a great place leaving me wanting more. Your dialogue was realistic as was the situation they found themselves in. Great chapter.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2014
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This was a great suspenseful chapter, you left off at a great place leaving me wanting more. Your dialogue was realistic as was the situation they found themselves in. Great chapter.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2014
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Comment from Cumbrianlass
Jim and Soni are forming a connection. I like it. I wonder what that light was, and now they're faced with these armed men. As usual you leave us with a hook!
Good post, Barbara. Only noticed one little nit:
She glanced at Jim. (")Ready?" - insert quotation mark.
Av
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2014
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Jim and Soni are forming a connection. I like it. I wonder what that light was, and now they're faced with these armed men. As usual you leave us with a hook!
Good post, Barbara. Only noticed one little nit:
She glanced at Jim. (")Ready?" - insert quotation mark.
Av
Comment Written 07-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review. I have fixed the error.
Comment from Sasha
You certainly ended this at a tense moment. I fear that the four men mean no good and hope that it doesn't come to violence. Great work with this one, you kept my full attention from beginning to end.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2014
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You certainly ended this at a tense moment. I fear that the four men mean no good and hope that it doesn't come to violence. Great work with this one, you kept my full attention from beginning to end.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2014
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Comment from irishauthorme
Good, fast chapter with a lot of tension. Surprised that Soni would tell Alex not to come back, without knowing the reason for the suspicious light. You ended on a tense note, with four men waiting in center-blocking?-the road. A sawed-off shotgun is a formidable weapon, but only for a short distance.
Neat to have Soni and Jim exchange family information, the best way to start finding out who someone really is.
But hey, did I see a white line down the center of that gravel road?:)
irish
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2014
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Good, fast chapter with a lot of tension. Surprised that Soni would tell Alex not to come back, without knowing the reason for the suspicious light. You ended on a tense note, with four men waiting in center-blocking?-the road. A sawed-off shotgun is a formidable weapon, but only for a short distance.
Neat to have Soni and Jim exchange family information, the best way to start finding out who someone really is.
But hey, did I see a white line down the center of that gravel road?:)
irish
Comment Written 07-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
