Pickles and Ketchup
a love poem for Sawyer151 total reviews
Comment from Louise Michelle
Oh, Brooke, this is so charming. It just makes me feel warm and fuzzy ... When I read the title, I knew I would like this one, but it's so much more than I expected. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Oh, Brooke, this is so charming. It just makes me feel warm and fuzzy ... When I read the title, I knew I would like this one, but it's so much more than I expected. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Lou, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Bobby Jo
The perfect combination when you know it is going down the right spot. I have to laugh, for this really fits the core of childhood. Cute.
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The perfect combination when you know it is going down the right spot. I have to laugh, for this really fits the core of childhood. Cute.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much, Bobby Jo :-) Brooke
Comment from Charlene0513
To adewpearl,
It's nice to experiment and have fun tasting different concoctions.
Very good cadence and proximate rhyming: please/ seas; goo/you
Charlene
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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To adewpearl,
It's nice to experiment and have fun tasting different concoctions.
Very good cadence and proximate rhyming: please/ seas; goo/you
Charlene
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Charlene, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Jewell McChesney
Pickles and ketchup...wow that's a new combo but I can see a kid lovin' it. I'd want to throw a flame broiled burger along with it and I'd be happy.
All I can truly comment about this poem, since yours never really need critique, is that Sawyer is a lucky boy to have your gift of writing poetry as part of his life. One day these poems will mean the world to him and his Mama.
Made me smile...
Jewell
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Pickles and ketchup...wow that's a new combo but I can see a kid lovin' it. I'd want to throw a flame broiled burger along with it and I'd be happy.
All I can truly comment about this poem, since yours never really need critique, is that Sawyer is a lucky boy to have your gift of writing poetry as part of his life. One day these poems will mean the world to him and his Mama.
Made me smile...
Jewell
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Jewell, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from MM lives on :)
Oh my goodness indeed I needed some cheering up and your poems of your darling grandson always cheer me up..Thank you ever much for sharing always a pleasure to read and review
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Oh my goodness indeed I needed some cheering up and your poems of your darling grandson always cheer me up..Thank you ever much for sharing always a pleasure to read and review
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
Comment from evilynne
Of course, pickles go with ketchup and pants without pockets are a no-no! Your love for your grandchild shines through your poetry. Best of luck in the contest! Evi
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Of course, pickles go with ketchup and pants without pockets are a no-no! Your love for your grandchild shines through your poetry. Best of luck in the contest! Evi
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Evi, thank you so much for your generous and gracious review :-) Brooke
Comment from Sarah Butterfly
Lovely rhyming poem. It reads very easily and incorporates clearly the love you have for your grandson. A worthy contest entry!
Kind regards
Sarah
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Lovely rhyming poem. It reads very easily and incorporates clearly the love you have for your grandson. A worthy contest entry!
Kind regards
Sarah
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Sarah, thank you so much for your generous and thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Caressa_08
A love poem which Sawyer's preferences, besides smiling & his giggles, which I agree, he seems so happy, along with some of his favorite foods comprised in your poem. And Yes, those pockets for his pants, being a really good way to hold his keys....Best Wishes for your entry.
Caressa
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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A love poem which Sawyer's preferences, besides smiling & his giggles, which I agree, he seems so happy, along with some of his favorite foods comprised in your poem. And Yes, those pockets for his pants, being a really good way to hold his keys....Best Wishes for your entry.
Caressa
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Caressa, thank you :-) Brooke
Comment from flamingstar
A sweet and sour entry for sure! Loved the unlimitedness of "as waves in the sea." You can never have too much laughter, unless it's after bedtime...
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A sweet and sour entry for sure! Loved the unlimitedness of "as waves in the sea." You can never have too much laughter, unless it's after bedtime...
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
Comment from RodG
Children will enjoy this little ditty, Brooke, as it reminds them of how things we love come in pairs. I especially like the pairs chosen in stanza 3, kids, of course, will giggle over stanza 4. Another fun poem toread. Rod
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Children will enjoy this little ditty, Brooke, as it reminds them of how things we love come in pairs. I especially like the pairs chosen in stanza 3, kids, of course, will giggle over stanza 4. Another fun poem toread. Rod
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Rod, thanks so much :-) Brooke
