Pickles and Ketchup
a love poem for Sawyer151 total reviews
Comment from Eric1
Hi Brooke, what a wonderful enlightening entry for this particular competition, your words are a complete delight to read, I would wish you luck but somehow I don't think you'll need it.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2014
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Hi Brooke, what a wonderful enlightening entry for this particular competition, your words are a complete delight to read, I would wish you luck but somehow I don't think you'll need it.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2014
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Eric, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You are so Welcome Brooke, lovely poem.
Comment from donaldww
Indulging in gooey food cannot be denied, especially when chocolate is involved. "Syrup on waffles" and "berries in jam" will do just fine.
And then a more arcane combination: pickles, ketchup, and ice cream. A Master-chef creation!
A delightful poem, pointing out the truth of what kids love.
In parlance of poetry essayists, the poem is descriptive, not proscriptive. And that's what love is all about.
Good luck with the judges!
Cheers,
DW
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Indulging in gooey food cannot be denied, especially when chocolate is involved. "Syrup on waffles" and "berries in jam" will do just fine.
And then a more arcane combination: pickles, ketchup, and ice cream. A Master-chef creation!
A delightful poem, pointing out the truth of what kids love.
In parlance of poetry essayists, the poem is descriptive, not proscriptive. And that's what love is all about.
Good luck with the judges!
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much, DW :-) I always love hearing from you! Brooke
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is yet another interesting and beautiful story that the author has created with this piece of work. Sawyer is teaching us another pearl of wisdom to help us through life.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2014
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This is yet another interesting and beautiful story that the author has created with this piece of work. Sawyer is teaching us another pearl of wisdom to help us through life.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2014
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Tomes, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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My pleasure
Comment from nancyjam
Delightful match-ups to express
togetherness.
Fun images and rhymes.
Great meter and lovely sentiment.
Love the picture! Nancy
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Delightful match-ups to express
togetherness.
Fun images and rhymes.
Great meter and lovely sentiment.
Love the picture! Nancy
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Nancy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was a fun poem. The imagery was great. I could see the images with a crystal clear view and the fun in each line was outstanding. Great rhythm and the picture as always made me smile. Greta job. Good lucjk with the contest. Gretchen
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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This was a fun poem. The imagery was great. I could see the images with a crystal clear view and the fun in each line was outstanding. Great rhythm and the picture as always made me smile. Greta job. Good lucjk with the contest. Gretchen
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Gretchen, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Joan E.
You brought up one of my pet peeves--women's pants without pockets--I always think they must be created by male designers as a fashion statement and not for practical use! I enjoyed your love poem for Sawyer highlighting a few of his favorite things (stealing a line from Mary Poppins!). I enjoyed your rhymes and repeats plus simple, but touching message. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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You brought up one of my pet peeves--women's pants without pockets--I always think they must be created by male designers as a fashion statement and not for practical use! I enjoyed your love poem for Sawyer highlighting a few of his favorite things (stealing a line from Mary Poppins!). I enjoyed your rhymes and repeats plus simple, but touching message. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much, Joan :-) Sawyer refuses to wear pants without pockets - where the heck is he supposed to keep his keys and other treasures? LOL I'm glad you two share a pet peeve ;-) Brooke
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Yes, he and I agree on more than one life's wrinkles! Smiles- Joan
Comment from LIJ Red
Nothing complicated and nothing wrong with that. Nor pickles and ketchup, or fries and mayo, or sweets with pinto or navy beans. Excellent.
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Nothing complicated and nothing wrong with that. Nor pickles and ketchup, or fries and mayo, or sweets with pinto or navy beans. Excellent.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
Comment from Curly Girly
The images which go with this poem are so cute! This is fun to read and enjoy. Written simply with a smooth flow of words, it's a wonderful kids' story told in rhyme - perfect.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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The images which go with this poem are so cute! This is fun to read and enjoy. Written simply with a smooth flow of words, it's a wonderful kids' story told in rhyme - perfect.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much, Curly Girly, for your generous and thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Trybuck
A little man's got to have
what a man has to have
Pants with pockets please
I've got to carry my keys
very well done with your entry, Buck
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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A little man's got to have
what a man has to have
Pants with pockets please
I've got to carry my keys
very well done with your entry, Buck
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Buck, thank you so much for your fun poetic response to Sawyer's poem :-) I appreciate your generous six stars :-) Brooke
Comment from Domino 2
When my daughter was young, she had ketchup with everything, including Sunday roast, so at least it was a way for her to eat up her green vegies. :-)
This reminds me of 'roses are red, violets are blue' in meter.
Not a fave meter style of mine, as I find it rather abrupt, but extremely well executed by your talented pen, Brooke, and the content is great fun to read.
Best wishes, Ray xx
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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When my daughter was young, she had ketchup with everything, including Sunday roast, so at least it was a way for her to eat up her green vegies. :-)
This reminds me of 'roses are red, violets are blue' in meter.
Not a fave meter style of mine, as I find it rather abrupt, but extremely well executed by your talented pen, Brooke, and the content is great fun to read.
Best wishes, Ray xx
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much, Ray - amazing how tastes differ - Mikey wishes all poetry were written in trochaic - you two can have a duel! LOL Brooke :-)
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OK, water-pistols at ten meters. :-)
It would be wonderful if 'all poetry' - that's rhymed and structured were written IN ANY TYPE OF METER on here, Brooke. :-) xx
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LOL - yep, on that I agree!!
