Torrents of Tears
Halloween-inspired poem120 total reviews
Comment from seaglass
This is great rhyme describing the brief period that America is over-run with goofiness and all in harmless fun. And amidst all those sounds or little voices calling "trick-or-treat" followed by "thank-you"
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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This is great rhyme describing the brief period that America is over-run with goofiness and all in harmless fun. And amidst all those sounds or little voices calling "trick-or-treat" followed by "thank-you"
Comment Written 09-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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seaglass, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from GracieAnn
Brooke, this is a concisely worded write not as easy to write as one might think and still make sense. LOL. Great job with word groupings, alliteration, and b b rhymes. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Brooke, this is a concisely worded write not as easy to write as one might think and still make sense. LOL. Great job with word groupings, alliteration, and b b rhymes. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 09-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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GracieAnn, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from tfawcus
Great fun, enhanced by some lovely pairings! Just the right mixture to bring back a little boy's smile after a nasty bump on the head! Lovely picture with poor glum Sawyer surrounded by the smiling faces and hearts of family!
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Great fun, enhanced by some lovely pairings! Just the right mixture to bring back a little boy's smile after a nasty bump on the head! Lovely picture with poor glum Sawyer surrounded by the smiling faces and hearts of family!
Comment Written 09-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Tony, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from flylikeaneagle
adewpearl: Congrats on the award for the interesting Halloween poem. I like the alliteration and images with youthful fun. Great artwork too...talent runs in your family.
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adewpearl: Congrats on the award for the interesting Halloween poem. I like the alliteration and images with youthful fun. Great artwork too...talent runs in your family.
flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 09-Oct-2014
Comment from Sasha
The poem is great but lets get to the real point...okay? Did Sawyer draw this???? If he did you guys have a REAL artist on your hands. Okay, yes, it is a terrific Halloween poem but it is the drawing that really captured my attention.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014
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The poem is great but lets get to the real point...okay? Did Sawyer draw this???? If he did you guys have a REAL artist on your hands. Okay, yes, it is a terrific Halloween poem but it is the drawing that really captured my attention.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014
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Valerie, thank you, my friend. As the author note states, the drawing is by Nora, who will soon by six. I know Sawyer is a gifted child, but for a toddler not yet two and a half to draw like that would be somewhat of a miracle. LOL I love the drawing. I love Nora :-) Even if she is the one who made Sawyer cry in the first place. LOL :-) Brooke
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Thanks for clarifying that. You are right, I misread Miranda for Nora. I bet poor Nora felt terrible.
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She has called herself Sawyer's big sister since months before he was born. He goes to her house every Friday, and he gets SO excited to see her, and should there be a bonus day during the week when they get to see each other, the two of them are delighted. I just love the two of them together :-)
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Brooke
I guess growing up always has its bumps. Poor little Sawyer! I am waiting for our Alyssa to clunk her noggin. She's standing up, holding on to anything with one hand. I know before long she'll stand without holding on, and suddenly realize it. Then we'll be after her all the time. No stopping her. In the crawling stage, at least we get a little rest.
Love you Halloween poem of 4-syllable lines. It starts out slow, but soon there's "buckets of blood" and "ghouls on the loose"!
Your poem is filled with great alliteration. I especially liked
"galleons of ghosts"
We have a ghost ship in the Northumberland Strait, a body of water that separates Prince Edward Island from New Brunswick and Nova Scotia. It's described as a beautiful schooner that has three masts (sometimes four) with pure white sails, all of which become completely engulfed in flames as onlookers watch. Sightings seem to be more prevalent from September to November. Sometimes upon seeing the burning ship, mariners have attempted to rescue the crew aboard. One of the more famous rescue attempts took place in Charlottetown Harbour around 1900. A group of sailors boarded a small row boat and raced toward the flaming ship to rescue the troubled crew, but during their struggle to reach the distressed vessel, the phantom ship vanished. A search was immediately carried out by divers, but no wreck was ever found. That's how real this apparition seems to be. Talk about your "weird or what"!
I'm amazed how well Nora's painting goes with your poem.
Loved this one!
your fan,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014
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Hi Brooke
I guess growing up always has its bumps. Poor little Sawyer! I am waiting for our Alyssa to clunk her noggin. She's standing up, holding on to anything with one hand. I know before long she'll stand without holding on, and suddenly realize it. Then we'll be after her all the time. No stopping her. In the crawling stage, at least we get a little rest.
Love you Halloween poem of 4-syllable lines. It starts out slow, but soon there's "buckets of blood" and "ghouls on the loose"!
Your poem is filled with great alliteration. I especially liked
"galleons of ghosts"
We have a ghost ship in the Northumberland Strait, a body of water that separates Prince Edward Island from New Brunswick and Nova Scotia. It's described as a beautiful schooner that has three masts (sometimes four) with pure white sails, all of which become completely engulfed in flames as onlookers watch. Sightings seem to be more prevalent from September to November. Sometimes upon seeing the burning ship, mariners have attempted to rescue the crew aboard. One of the more famous rescue attempts took place in Charlottetown Harbour around 1900. A group of sailors boarded a small row boat and raced toward the flaming ship to rescue the troubled crew, but during their struggle to reach the distressed vessel, the phantom ship vanished. A search was immediately carried out by divers, but no wreck was ever found. That's how real this apparition seems to be. Talk about your "weird or what"!
I'm amazed how well Nora's painting goes with your poem.
Loved this one!
your fan,
Kimbob
Comment Written 09-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much, Kimbob. This was a very minor bump. Sawyer has had a couple of blood gushing head bumps, but this one only merited a minute of screaming, no blood. LOL He cried long enough to guilt Nora into feeling remorseful, and then he went back to playing with her. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from acerisestory
Amazing, Brooke! This is the perfect Halloween poem. Makes me want to stay home on Halloween night.
scratching of claws,
feasting of fangs,
buckets of blood,
panicking pangs.
Yikes!
Wonderful alliteration. Your meter and rhyme are very well done. Oh yes, Sawyers artwork is a great enhancement. This poem definitely deserves one of my sixes! Alana
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014
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Amazing, Brooke! This is the perfect Halloween poem. Makes me want to stay home on Halloween night.
scratching of claws,
feasting of fangs,
buckets of blood,
panicking pangs.
Yikes!
Wonderful alliteration. Your meter and rhyme are very well done. Oh yes, Sawyers artwork is a great enhancement. This poem definitely deserves one of my sixes! Alana
Comment Written 09-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much, Alana, for the generous sixth star :-) As the author note acknowledges, the artwork is by almost-six-year old Nora, not Sawyer who is not yet two and a half. Had he drawn this, I would be declaring him the most miraculously gifted toddler ever. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from Eternal Muse
You describe the physical pain a child experiences so well in this write. The visuals are astounding. I like the picture too, it compliments the verse nicely.
Torrents of tears,
scatters of screams,
clatters of chains,
dashing of dreams,
And this is so Halloweenish:
scratching of claws,
feasting of fangs,
buckets of blood,
panicking pangs,
A very entertaining write, Brooke.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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You describe the physical pain a child experiences so well in this write. The visuals are astounding. I like the picture too, it compliments the verse nicely.
Torrents of tears,
scatters of screams,
clatters of chains,
dashing of dreams,
And this is so Halloweenish:
scratching of claws,
feasting of fangs,
buckets of blood,
panicking pangs,
A very entertaining write, Brooke.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Yelena, thank you so very much, my friend - sorry for the delay in responding - it has been a chaotic couple of weeks :-) Brooke
Comment from Loren (7)
The title intrigued me and admittedly it seemed so out of character for your works ... and then I read it :) Yes, this was a Brooke poem. Halloween written in the subtle Agatha Christie way of writing about murder. Great job! Loren
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014
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The title intrigued me and admittedly it seemed so out of character for your works ... and then I read it :) Yes, this was a Brooke poem. Halloween written in the subtle Agatha Christie way of writing about murder. Great job! Loren
Comment Written 09-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much, Loren :-) Brooke
Comment from Curly Girly
Brilliant, Brooke! And a great image as a bonus with this vivid, blazing red, scary (but fun) kids' verse regarding Halloween... Yikes, it'll make them want to scream.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014
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Brilliant, Brooke! And a great image as a bonus with this vivid, blazing red, scary (but fun) kids' verse regarding Halloween... Yikes, it'll make them want to scream.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much, Curly Girly - I appreciate your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
