Torrents of Tears
Halloween-inspired poem120 total reviews
Comment from kiwijenny
What a fascinating picture . Little children draw what is important to them. His tears are prominent...and the grown up feet..and his hands. I remember knees as one of my first memories and a skirt and feet.this is a fascinating picture. I love the poem too but especially that you have a little creative artist in Sawyer
God bless
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What a fascinating picture . Little children draw what is important to them. His tears are prominent...and the grown up feet..and his hands. I remember knees as one of my first memories and a skirt and feet.this is a fascinating picture. I love the poem too but especially that you have a little creative artist in Sawyer
God bless
Comment Written 08-Oct-2014
Comment from CR Delport
Ah, poor little Cute One. It is so sad when they get hurt, but you can't protect them to such an extent that you don't allow them to live. This is very well written.
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Ah, poor little Cute One. It is so sad when they get hurt, but you can't protect them to such an extent that you don't allow them to live. This is very well written.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2014
Comment from rod007
This poem made the sense of hearing and sight ignite with the sounds and images of the horror of Halloween. Well done, Brooke, in capturing that dark and sinister event so well.
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This poem made the sense of hearing and sight ignite with the sounds and images of the horror of Halloween. Well done, Brooke, in capturing that dark and sinister event so well.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2014
Comment from Gargantuan2
Funny how the drawing is in red. Remember the movie 'sixth sence', anything of importance was in red too. Meanwhile, thanks for the Halloween poem entry :)
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Funny how the drawing is in red. Remember the movie 'sixth sence', anything of importance was in red too. Meanwhile, thanks for the Halloween poem entry :)
Comment Written 08-Oct-2014
Comment from Trybuck
Awesome alliteration
The finest fixings
Deafening declaration
Of mayhems mixings
Another well written one in the books
Of Halloween's different looks
Well done as always, Buck
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Awesome alliteration
The finest fixings
Deafening declaration
Of mayhems mixings
Another well written one in the books
Of Halloween's different looks
Well done as always, Buck
Comment Written 08-Oct-2014
Comment from Joe_P
Yes, this is the one. Six stars for your creativity and clear expression of thought! This piece is deceptively childlike because to compose it, the writer requires artistry forged in the furnace of training and experience. I think you did a marvelous job.
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Yes, this is the one. Six stars for your creativity and clear expression of thought! This piece is deceptively childlike because to compose it, the writer requires artistry forged in the furnace of training and experience. I think you did a marvelous job.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2014
Comment from humpwhistle
Ah, Sawyer went bump in the night!
I always look forward to your October aberrations, Brooke.
Kids will love the alliteration and the familiarity
of the Halloween cast. This could be an annual family read. Much like 'Twas the night...' is read at Christmas.
Peace, Lee
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Ah, Sawyer went bump in the night!
I always look forward to your October aberrations, Brooke.
Kids will love the alliteration and the familiarity
of the Halloween cast. This could be an annual family read. Much like 'Twas the night...' is read at Christmas.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 08-Oct-2014
Comment from Melspoems
It's that time of year again!
Nice abcb rhymes throughout.
Great use of alliteration and assonance and lots of scary imagery in this Halloween poem.
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It's that time of year again!
Nice abcb rhymes throughout.
Great use of alliteration and assonance and lots of scary imagery in this Halloween poem.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2014
Comment from kiwisteveh
Rapid-fire lines full of attractive alliteration scatter/screams, dashing dreams etc.
A plethora of halloween images too, too many to mention.
Steve
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Rapid-fire lines full of attractive alliteration scatter/screams, dashing dreams etc.
A plethora of halloween images too, too many to mention.
Steve
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Comment Written 08-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much, Steve :-) Brooke
Comment from Domino 2
LOL at Nora's drawing of Sawyer's 'terrible' accident, Brooke. :-)
I guess this is about Halloween, and NOT Sawyer's over-dramatic reaction. LOL
Very dramatic and punchy lines in trochaic meter.
Excellent and fun alliteration throughout.
Thanks for the smiles, Ray xx
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LOL at Nora's drawing of Sawyer's 'terrible' accident, Brooke. :-)
I guess this is about Halloween, and NOT Sawyer's over-dramatic reaction. LOL
Very dramatic and punchy lines in trochaic meter.
Excellent and fun alliteration throughout.
Thanks for the smiles, Ray xx
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Comment Written 08-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2014
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Ray, thanks so much :-) Nora and Sawyer were horsing around on her bed. The incident was over in one minute, but I just love those tears streaming down his cheeks in her artistic rendition that will memorialize the "tragedy" forever :-) Brooke
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:-) xx
