Torrents of Tears
Halloween-inspired poem120 total reviews
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Brooke, What terrific alliteration throughout. I'm wondering if this was read to Sawyer. I'm thinking it might be a little too graphic for kids under seven. However, I was easily frightened when I was young. Nicely written. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014
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Hi Brooke, What terrific alliteration throughout. I'm wondering if this was read to Sawyer. I'm thinking it might be a little too graphic for kids under seven. However, I was easily frightened when I was young. Nicely written. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 09-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014
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Lou, thanks so much. Not everything I write is meant for Sawyer's immediate consumption. I would think something is seriously wrong with Miranda if she chose to read this to Sawyer, who is not yet two and a half. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Brooke, I love your Halloween poems. This is very entertaining one and thanks so much for sharing the drawing-delightful. Take care, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Brooke, I love your Halloween poems. This is very entertaining one and thanks so much for sharing the drawing-delightful. Take care, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 09-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Debbie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Adri7enne
Lots of scary things, all associated with Haloween. What's a child to make of all this? Adults are out to scare him? Must be confusing. Or is it a lesson about laughing at our fears?
"galleons of ghosts" "grewsome the groans," Lots of wonderful alliterations too. I enjoyed it, Brooks. Very creative.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Lots of scary things, all associated with Haloween. What's a child to make of all this? Adults are out to scare him? Must be confusing. Or is it a lesson about laughing at our fears?
"galleons of ghosts" "grewsome the groans," Lots of wonderful alliterations too. I enjoyed it, Brooks. Very creative.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Adrienne, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from N.K. Wagner
A fun Halloween poem with scads alliteration and assonance. You can almost dance to it. I'll bet Sawyer and Nora can!
Beautifully done, Brooke. I know you love Halloween. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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A fun Halloween poem with scads alliteration and assonance. You can almost dance to it. I'll bet Sawyer and Nora can!
Beautifully done, Brooke. I know you love Halloween. :) Nancy
Comment Written 09-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Nancy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from heyjude
Brooke, A great one for halloween. Lots of
alliteration in this one ... gruesome groans...plaintive plea..torrents tears scatters screams clatters chains.
Wow!
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Brooke, A great one for halloween. Lots of
alliteration in this one ... gruesome groans...plaintive plea..torrents tears scatters screams clatters chains.
Wow!
Comment Written 09-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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heyjude, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from mfowler
I like the short lines with their intensity and simple beat. The use of onomatopoeia is very effective in creating a cacophony of dissonance (scatters of screams, scratching of claws, wailings of fright), a soundscape somewhat suited to Halloween, I suspect. Your alliterative descriptions within the lines, read smoothly and add to the appeal (feasting of fangs,buckets of blood,panicking pangs). Good fun here for all on Halloween.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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I like the short lines with their intensity and simple beat. The use of onomatopoeia is very effective in creating a cacophony of dissonance (scatters of screams, scratching of claws, wailings of fright), a soundscape somewhat suited to Halloween, I suspect. Your alliterative descriptions within the lines, read smoothly and add to the appeal (feasting of fangs,buckets of blood,panicking pangs). Good fun here for all on Halloween.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Mark, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Green Lake Girl
I love the Halloween season and your poem doesn't disappoint. Time after time, your rhyming is so fresh and original. Super alliteration, wonderfully scary imagery. What kid wouldn't love this?
(Curious; is Nora a baby sitter or a little kid? And, did Sawyer draw the picture? Love all the red--perfect color to depict an injury.)
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014
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I love the Halloween season and your poem doesn't disappoint. Time after time, your rhyming is so fresh and original. Super alliteration, wonderfully scary imagery. What kid wouldn't love this?
(Curious; is Nora a baby sitter or a little kid? And, did Sawyer draw the picture? Love all the red--perfect color to depict an injury.)
Comment Written 09-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014
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Thanks, Green Lake Girl. Nora is the little girl my daughter is a nanny for. She is almost six and has been Sawyer's honorary big sister since he was born. My daughter has been her nanny since she was born. She drew the picture. It would be somewhat miraculous if a toddler not yet two and a half had drawn the picture. LOL :-) Brooke
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Ah, now I get it. I didn't realize Sawyer was only 2.5. He "seems" older to me. I like Nora's artistic rendition of injury. :)
Comment from Aussie
Oh, dear, poor little man - bad bed! Potato is purring, wait...no, he's laughing loudly! Great little poem, enough to scare any kid under the bed, this time it bit him - the bed I mean. Liked your musings. Well done Mrs Fang.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014
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Oh, dear, poor little man - bad bed! Potato is purring, wait...no, he's laughing loudly! Great little poem, enough to scare any kid under the bed, this time it bit him - the bed I mean. Liked your musings. Well done Mrs Fang.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much, Kay :-) He screamed for one minute and then moved onto playing again. LOL Potato was not there to witness the mini-tragedy since this happened at Nora's house :-) Brooke
Comment from artisart4u
This is a good exciting poem about Halloween.
It sounds like one of interest.
Sorry about Sawyer's accident.
Good luck with your poem.
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This is a good exciting poem about Halloween.
It sounds like one of interest.
Sorry about Sawyer's accident.
Good luck with your poem.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much, artisart4u. I appreciate your generous six stars. Like most childhood accidents, this one produced screams for one minute. Then he got bored with that and went back to playing LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from jmdg1954
Other then Sawyer and my dreaded dandelion, Halloween is one of your favorite topics to write about. With this one, you certainly did not disappoint anyone. Good cadence, smooth flow and alliteration throughout.
Enjoyed the haunting! John
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014
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Other then Sawyer and my dreaded dandelion, Halloween is one of your favorite topics to write about. With this one, you certainly did not disappoint anyone. Good cadence, smooth flow and alliteration throughout.
Enjoyed the haunting! John
Comment Written 09-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much, John :-) Brooke
