Comment from Oatmeal

Excellent

adewpearl,

Your theme was well defined. Perfect for the holiday coming up. Very well reflected thoughts and expressions. The art- work complements your poem.

There was no SPAG. No room for improvement.

Your feelings are very understandable and expressed through the poem. I look forward to seeing you again.

Love you,

Oatmeal

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2014

Oatmeal, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

Scratching of claws,feasting of fangs,your use of words here has this strong beat that makes this a poem to be read out loud. You have vivid Halloween images that are scary and give the reader chills.

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2014

Thank you, Elaine, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke

Comment from DSMalott

Excellent

Very good.
The collection of Halloween descriptives is classic fright night stuff. The short and pithy lines brought the goblin night into clear focus. And your rhyme scheme ... well shall we say ... you nailed the coffin down beautifully!
Thanks for writing.

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Oct-2014

Thank you, DS, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke

Comment from skye

Excellent

Great descriptive poem about this holiday.
Who knew that it would become one of the most lucrative of times, with all the candy, costumes, and parties to enjoy.
Your words describe the underlying dark side....
LOve the artwork. They really can show through art how they feel, these small ones.
Well done.

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Oct-2014

Thanks so much, Skye - when I was little we had the five and dime costumes and a jack-o-lantern on the patio. Now people have yards filled with decorations and costumes that cost as much as fancy party clothes. Brooke

Comment from thee-name

Excellent

Nice rhyming poem. Lots of good strong action words.
TORRENTS OF TEARS
SCATTERS OF SCREAMS
CLATTERS OF CHAINS
DASHING OF DREAMS

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Oct-2014

thee-name, thank you so much :-) Brooke

reply by thee-name on 11-Oct-2014

THANK YOU!

Comment from Rmocruz

Excellent

Appears to be abundance of alliterations as well.
I find this verse to be a solidly rhymed
descriptive Halloween theme.
Very appropriate for the holiday.

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014

Rmocruz, thank you so much :-) Brooke

reply by Rmocruz on 19-Oct-2014

You're welcome Brooke, my pleasure.
Rich.

Comment from mikemagine

Excellent

You NEVER let me down! And here you continue with your outstanding talent and skills! Sixteen lines that are dang near perfect, if not perfect. I really don't know what else to say...WOW! That's about it.

Mike

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2014

Comment from honeytree

Excellent

I love the art work and words written very much.

I guess tears and having pain would be a concern for Sawyer

The pain would not be great to know of at all.

honey tree

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Oct-2014

Annie, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Delahay

Excellent

This does not seem to be completely about Halloween. The descriptions of rattling chains, screams, ghosts, etc. are certainly fitting. I'm not sure about the first part with the torrent of tears and dashing of dreams though.

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Oct-2014

Ward, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Jackarrie

Excellent

Well it certainly is a Halloween poem, I don't believe you left out any words that are associated with it. I am sorry to hear that Sawyer bumped his head. But kids do this all the time and get over it so quickly.

very well written
Mary

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014

Mary, thank you so much :-) Brooke