Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

You've chosen a classic style for your entry and have done it well. The examples are classics as well, with a few new ones added. I like the repetition... very effective. :)

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014

Thanks, Phyllis.

I don't really think classic will do the trick here, but then I thought my ABAB would go close and it didn't even get a mention :O(

Steve

Comment from Honeysuckle1876

Exceptional

This is an exceptional love poem and perfect for the love poem contest. My favorite part is the repeating words"I love you more than...."

Repeating words or lines always bring emphasis. Your words emphasize that no matter how much you love something, the recipient in your poem will always be loved more.

Your poems rhyme and rhythm was perfect. I like the script writing, always good to use in love poems.

Great job. 6 star worthy.
Good luck in the contest
Angie

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014

Thanks, Angie, for the warm words and the six stars. Much appreciated

Steve

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Redolent...nice adjective, Steve.

This harkens back to the age old phrase, "I loved you more today than yesterday, when come the morrow, I'll love you even more."

Nicely done, with a very smooth flow and well metered tempo.

Best of luck to you in the contest.

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014

Thanks, Dean.

Steve

Comment from Dawny53

Excellent

Your poem is very beautiful, it almost has a childlike charm that I wish I could put into words. I really enjoyed reading it, and wanted to ask you about the last line.. what do you think of "I'll love you forever more" That way it doesn't sound like you are telling the seas you will always love them more. I may sound crazy and I may be totally wrong, what do you think? Nice work

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014

Thanks, Dawn.
Childlike charm is good - perhaps some reviewers just see that as simplicity.
Never worry about making suggestions - it just means you have read the poem carefully and are being constructive.

Steve

Comment from mauial

Excellent

Sorts of remind me of, Let me count the ways. This poem could have gone on and on and on, but of course that would be impractical. Your last line gives us that impression.

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014

Thank you.

Yep, I had a few more lines I could have put in
I love you more than carrot cake...
I love you more than fireworks...

Steve

Comment from Acquired Taste

Excellent

Beautiful poem. Emotional and filled with heartfelt words and phrases of love. I am almost drawn back to the love songs of the fifties and sixties, Aaron Neville, Classic IV. Very nice poetry...AT=/

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014

Thank you.

Yep, maybe a nod to the past here...

Steve

Comment from Ronni

Excellent

A delightfully impassioned and love revelry captivated
in this romantic musing, with loves affirmations aglow
in all the hues and powers of nature and human loving.
Love the sea picture, flows well with theme and tone.

Thanks for sharing...best of luck in Contest!

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014

Thank you, Ronni!

Steve

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

I love your poem. I can 'feel' the emotion as someone speaks this. I see no changes. You expressed the love one has for another person very well. Thank you for sharing. Good job and good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014

Thank you, jannypan!

Steve

Comment from INtity

Exceptional

Perfect! I love this poem more than a fan story review could ever express! Every line and image is wonderfully written. Through fireflies, moonbeams, roses, monuments and oceans I can see the love. Masterpiece of love this is! Well done!

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014

Thank you so much for the enthusiastic review and the six stars - I appreciate it.

Steve

Comment from emrpoems

Excellent

Solid abcb rhymes and excellent rhythm
good enjambment allowing the words to flow smoothly from one line to another.
strong message of love and a great contender for the contest

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve