Fog
Halloween-inspired poem NOT for children130 total reviews
Comment from mfowler
You are right to be bothered by such claims of good=good fortune. There is no doubt that if you treat people well as you suggest we should, that people will generally return kind with kind. But, there are no guarantees in this life. And the fog that you so powerfully portray, will indeed claim the good along with the bad in no discernable pattern:
fog is never ours to spurn,
nor can a pass from fate be earned
terrific poem, but there's no happy, silliness that Halloween poems are renowned for. Thank goodness. I like this philosophical approach to storytelling.
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You are right to be bothered by such claims of good=good fortune. There is no doubt that if you treat people well as you suggest we should, that people will generally return kind with kind. But, there are no guarantees in this life. And the fog that you so powerfully portray, will indeed claim the good along with the bad in no discernable pattern:
fog is never ours to spurn,
nor can a pass from fate be earned
terrific poem, but there's no happy, silliness that Halloween poems are renowned for. Thank goodness. I like this philosophical approach to storytelling.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
This one is very deep, Brooke, and I had to concentrate hard while reading. I guess it pays to keep in mind that God can see right into our hearts despite our apparent 'good deeds'. I liked the poem very much, and the author notes were helpful in letting us see your true aim. Giddy
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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This one is very deep, Brooke, and I had to concentrate hard while reading. I guess it pays to keep in mind that God can see right into our hearts despite our apparent 'good deeds'. I liked the poem very much, and the author notes were helpful in letting us see your true aim. Giddy
Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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Giddy, thank you so much :-) I wasn't really trying to criticize anyone for apparent good deeds. I was referring to good people who actually do good deeds and then still lose their home to a fire, their child to cancer, their family to a car accident with a drunk. Brooke :-)
Comment from l.raven
HI Brooke, very interesting thought...I have prayed many times when I thought what I prayed for should've been...and instead something bad happened....truly there are no guarantees...I don't know how God judges whose prayers will come true...only that some do ...and some don't...it used to make me wonder...did things just happen because... I do know I believe...and love God...but I do have my moments...a poem for thought...very well written...Luff Linda xxoo
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HI Brooke, very interesting thought...I have prayed many times when I thought what I prayed for should've been...and instead something bad happened....truly there are no guarantees...I don't know how God judges whose prayers will come true...only that some do ...and some don't...it used to make me wonder...did things just happen because... I do know I believe...and love God...but I do have my moments...a poem for thought...very well written...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
Comment from kiwisteveh
A little deeper in message perhaps, than your usual pieces. The message is one I can completely agree with too. The opposite side of the coin, of course, is that 'sinners' quite often do very well for themselves and many murderers live happily ever after, despite how unfair it seems.
Steve
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A little deeper in message perhaps, than your usual pieces. The message is one I can completely agree with too. The opposite side of the coin, of course, is that 'sinners' quite often do very well for themselves and many murderers live happily ever after, despite how unfair it seems.
Steve
Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
Comment from boxergirl
A great job, Brooke, with your AABB rhyme-schemed poem. I really like the use of fog as an analogy of fate impacting a person's life. I agree totally with your author's notes. God doesn't promise us a perfect life; only that He will be with us in our times of need.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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A great job, Brooke, with your AABB rhyme-schemed poem. I really like the use of fog as an analogy of fate impacting a person's life. I agree totally with your author's notes. God doesn't promise us a perfect life; only that He will be with us in our times of need.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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boxergirl, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from donaldww
The Germans have a phrase: Nebel des Krieges, which means "fog of war," the uncertainty experienced by participants in military campaigns.
In this persuasive set of couplets, the word "fog" (the poem is titled "Fog") means something similar: that place where hides the unpredictability of life.
Individual destinies are not determined by actions, be they good or bad--
Within the fog the screams are hid
no care for what the screamers did
or didn't do, for fate's not earned.
But even under this grim reality, the poet suggests--
Be kind, be faithful, and be fair,
--still under strict proviso that there are no guarantees. Proponents that exhort their congregants to pay for life changing results are false prophets. Their true agenda is control and extortion by guilt. "Indulgences" were demonized by Martin Luther in 1517. Current peddlers of karma and pie in the sky are, to me, examples of history repeating itself.
Our preferred behaviours, then, must be based on love and morality at the instinctual level. And that's something that every man, woman or religious zealot should be able to agree upon.
Excellent poem!
Cheers,
DW
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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The Germans have a phrase: Nebel des Krieges, which means "fog of war," the uncertainty experienced by participants in military campaigns.
In this persuasive set of couplets, the word "fog" (the poem is titled "Fog") means something similar: that place where hides the unpredictability of life.
Individual destinies are not determined by actions, be they good or bad--
Within the fog the screams are hid
no care for what the screamers did
or didn't do, for fate's not earned.
But even under this grim reality, the poet suggests--
Be kind, be faithful, and be fair,
--still under strict proviso that there are no guarantees. Proponents that exhort their congregants to pay for life changing results are false prophets. Their true agenda is control and extortion by guilt. "Indulgences" were demonized by Martin Luther in 1517. Current peddlers of karma and pie in the sky are, to me, examples of history repeating itself.
Our preferred behaviours, then, must be based on love and morality at the instinctual level. And that's something that every man, woman or religious zealot should be able to agree upon.
Excellent poem!
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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DW, I am truly honored by your exceptional rating, and I very much appreciate your insightful comments. Brooke
Comment from Leigh Ann
Excellent and I agree 100%. We can't predict what will happen in the future, not even the next second. Life is filled with ups and downs, for all who are on earth. God is not some ecclesiastical Santa Clause.
Okay that's my rant. LOL Great poem.
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Excellent and I agree 100%. We can't predict what will happen in the future, not even the next second. Life is filled with ups and downs, for all who are on earth. God is not some ecclesiastical Santa Clause.
Okay that's my rant. LOL Great poem.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
Comment from royowen
The way I understand prosperity is that you can't give to receive, rather you give because you are generous and have no thought for reward, which is the true form of giving, the principle of sowing and reaping, common sense should always remain! Galatians 6:7 "Do not be deceived, God is not mocked, whatever a man sows, that he will also reap." NKJV. It's always about one's motives! Your usual great R and R, the near perfection you render is always a pleasure, although I haven't seen proffer too many opinions! Well done, passionate one! Blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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The way I understand prosperity is that you can't give to receive, rather you give because you are generous and have no thought for reward, which is the true form of giving, the principle of sowing and reaping, common sense should always remain! Galatians 6:7 "Do not be deceived, God is not mocked, whatever a man sows, that he will also reap." NKJV. It's always about one's motives! Your usual great R and R, the near perfection you render is always a pleasure, although I haven't seen proffer too many opinions! Well done, passionate one! Blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much, Roy - you are always so thoughtful in your comments. Brooke
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You're welcome Brooke,
Comment from words
Love your poetic take on fate.
I do agree . Decency is no guarantee of a loss- free life. Some of the best people do seem to be the most sorely tested.
Wonderfully done.
d
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Love your poetic take on fate.
I do agree . Decency is no guarantee of a loss- free life. Some of the best people do seem to be the most sorely tested.
Wonderfully done.
d
Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Diane, thank you so much. I appreciate your generous sixth star. Sadly, some people do not see the wisdom of this observation.
Brooke
Comment from His Grayness
Dear Brooke: I detect a bit of (understandable) frustration with the philosophy that a God-fearing or GOD-loving person should expect that all things that happen in their life were direct consequences of GOD's exclusive choices. I believe we are either blessed or defeated by our own free will and the choices we make or the consequences of being at the wrong place at the wrong time such as dealing with Mother Nature's fickle moods. Thanks for the excellent work here and congratulations on the measured rant! All the best, Vance
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Dear Brooke: I detect a bit of (understandable) frustration with the philosophy that a God-fearing or GOD-loving person should expect that all things that happen in their life were direct consequences of GOD's exclusive choices. I believe we are either blessed or defeated by our own free will and the choices we make or the consequences of being at the wrong place at the wrong time such as dealing with Mother Nature's fickle moods. Thanks for the excellent work here and congratulations on the measured rant! All the best, Vance
Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
