Fog
Halloween-inspired poem NOT for children130 total reviews
Comment from rod007
Brooke, you are absolutely right. Fate is fate. The fog will always be there. I suppose I think of it in this way. Being good .., etc may not lead to any particular wonderful result but the doing of good is in the doing the reward if that makes sense.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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Brooke, you are absolutely right. Fate is fate. The fog will always be there. I suppose I think of it in this way. Being good .., etc may not lead to any particular wonderful result but the doing of good is in the doing the reward if that makes sense.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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Thank you, Rod :-) I couldn't agree more - that is why the poem urges people to be good, kind, fair despite the fact it won't guarantee them safe passage. Brooke
Comment from ronnie k
Amen, what a powerful poem; all I could think was the Fathers word "all are liken to rag cloth" He love us all but He hates SIN.
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Amen, what a powerful poem; all I could think was the Fathers word "all are liken to rag cloth" He love us all but He hates SIN.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2014
Comment from INtity
Not bad, this is a good conventional Halloween poem. It isn't very scary but it is dark and well written. It reminds me of Stephen King's book The Fog. Good job.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Not bad, this is a good conventional Halloween poem. It isn't very scary but it is dark and well written. It reminds me of Stephen King's book The Fog. Good job.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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INtity, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Craigitar
A bit of a departure from your usual, Brooke, but thoroughly enjoyable. Of equal enjoyment is your "little rant". I love a good philosophical discussion as long as it's grounded with actual thought, and here you've put the emphasis on the thought. A good "thinker" in this well-crafted poem.
Craig
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A bit of a departure from your usual, Brooke, but thoroughly enjoyable. Of equal enjoyment is your "little rant". I love a good philosophical discussion as long as it's grounded with actual thought, and here you've put the emphasis on the thought. A good "thinker" in this well-crafted poem.
Craig
Comment Written 04-Oct-2014
Comment from Jackarrie
Great sentiments written in this poem, Brooke. I do like the second stanza, none of us know what fate awaits us.
I agree with everything you said in your authors notes.
I wish I had a six for this one.
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Great sentiments written in this poem, Brooke. I do like the second stanza, none of us know what fate awaits us.
I agree with everything you said in your authors notes.
I wish I had a six for this one.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2014
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Doing what is right is what we should all strive to do every day, but that does not in any way guarantee we won't be felled by awful circumstances. I know I am supposed to review your poem, but this caught my eye and my thoughts, along with your poem. I have known people who quit believing in God because they felt He deserted them because bad things happened to good people. It's so sad.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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Doing what is right is what we should all strive to do every day, but that does not in any way guarantee we won't be felled by awful circumstances. I know I am supposed to review your poem, but this caught my eye and my thoughts, along with your poem. I have known people who quit believing in God because they felt He deserted them because bad things happened to good people. It's so sad.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much, Barbara - yes, I've known people who felt that way too. What a sad reason to give up on God. I feel for them.
Brooke
Comment from rjuselius
Strive for perfection, never get lost where you can't escape...never forget yourself. This is a brilliant and philosophical piece of poetic art!
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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Strive for perfection, never get lost where you can't escape...never forget yourself. This is a brilliant and philosophical piece of poetic art!
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
Comment Written 04-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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thank you so much, rebekka :-) Brooke
Comment from nomi338
Thanks to you I am never going outside again. LOL. Just kidding. I agree with your little rant and you are certainly entitled to it. Ministers who offere gaurantees of prosperity if you come to their church don't tell people that they have to foirst pay through the nose to the pastor. If after having done so, they still do not prosper then the problem must be trhat they either didn't pay the pastor enough or they did not try hard enough to please god. Ha!
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Thanks to you I am never going outside again. LOL. Just kidding. I agree with your little rant and you are certainly entitled to it. Ministers who offere gaurantees of prosperity if you come to their church don't tell people that they have to foirst pay through the nose to the pastor. If after having done so, they still do not prosper then the problem must be trhat they either didn't pay the pastor enough or they did not try hard enough to please god. Ha!
Comment Written 04-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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nomi, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Rmocruz
You have certainly mastered this rhymed format.
I find this to be exceptional in every aspect.
Whether given to chance
or be it so planned
perhaps in the end
we shall understand.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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You have certainly mastered this rhymed format.
I find this to be exceptional in every aspect.
Whether given to chance
or be it so planned
perhaps in the end
we shall understand.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Rmocruz, thank you so much for your generous and gracious response to this poem
Brooke
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It was a pleasure to read and comment.
You're welcome Brooke.
Rich
Comment from pipersfancy
Well done, Brooke! We had this very discussion in the Bible study group I'm currently attending... Tuesday night. Of course, in the time of Jesus, it was an understood that 'sin' equated directly to the woes one might expect to befall them in this life. The scripture reading was of the blind man being healed, and the disciples asking our Lord if it had been the man's sin, or his parent's sin, which had resulted in the blindness... of course, Jesus explains that it's not about 'sin' at all... the reasons the man was blind had nothing to do with sin, but everything to do with how others chose to show compassion to those less fortunate, and allow God's works to be shown through him.
Great message in this one!
Christina
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Well done, Brooke! We had this very discussion in the Bible study group I'm currently attending... Tuesday night. Of course, in the time of Jesus, it was an understood that 'sin' equated directly to the woes one might expect to befall them in this life. The scripture reading was of the blind man being healed, and the disciples asking our Lord if it had been the man's sin, or his parent's sin, which had resulted in the blindness... of course, Jesus explains that it's not about 'sin' at all... the reasons the man was blind had nothing to do with sin, but everything to do with how others chose to show compassion to those less fortunate, and allow God's works to be shown through him.
Great message in this one!
Christina
Comment Written 04-Oct-2014
