Fog
Halloween-inspired poem NOT for children130 total reviews
Comment from jaeladarling
I love the foggy theme! It supports your message so well. This is like a classic parable. It can be read for the deeper meaning, or it can be read as a basic poem. Either way, stellar work! :)
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I love the foggy theme! It supports your message so well. This is like a classic parable. It can be read for the deeper meaning, or it can be read as a basic poem. Either way, stellar work! :)
Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
Comment from James Dooney
Oh yes, you have said this well here Brooke. Jut because everything goes right, it doesnt mean we are going to get a golden ticket. Well done.
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Oh yes, you have said this well here Brooke. Jut because everything goes right, it doesnt mean we are going to get a golden ticket. Well done.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
Comment from jmdg1954
Be kind, be faithful, and be fair,
but even then you must beware
that fog is never ours to spurn,
nor can a pass from fate be earned.
We need to live and comport ourselves to the best standards that we can. That does not guarantee a person anything except self satisfaction. That's all we can do, be good and believe.
Enjoyed the read and the message. John
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Be kind, be faithful, and be fair,
but even then you must beware
that fog is never ours to spurn,
nor can a pass from fate be earned.
We need to live and comport ourselves to the best standards that we can. That does not guarantee a person anything except self satisfaction. That's all we can do, be good and believe.
Enjoyed the read and the message. John
Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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John, thank you for your most thoughtful reading of this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from flamingstar
So true. And the power of positive thinking only goes so far. It's karma, I tell ya...the things we chose to tackle this time around combined with the need for "balancing" the deficits from the last time around!
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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So true. And the power of positive thinking only goes so far. It's karma, I tell ya...the things we chose to tackle this time around combined with the need for "balancing" the deficits from the last time around!
Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much, flamingstar - it's my own personal belief system that we do not live multiple lives on earth, but I appreciate your take on this :-) Brooke
Comment from kiwijenny
Be kind, be faithful, and be fair,
but even then you must beware
that fog is never ours to spurn,
nor can a pass from fate be earned.
I agree with you. The best person I know ,,,my boss at preschool got aggressive breast cancer. After 20 weeks of chemo every week and radiation and a double mastectomy she is back at work,,,always laughing smiling and helping people . She is one of the kindest most faithful and fair.
God bless. We all to rant oooo we should ask Tom ....Fan-rant-story might have its place:o)
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Be kind, be faithful, and be fair,
but even then you must beware
that fog is never ours to spurn,
nor can a pass from fate be earned.
I agree with you. The best person I know ,,,my boss at preschool got aggressive breast cancer. After 20 weeks of chemo every week and radiation and a double mastectomy she is back at work,,,always laughing smiling and helping people . She is one of the kindest most faithful and fair.
God bless. We all to rant oooo we should ask Tom ....Fan-rant-story might have its place:o)
Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much, Jenny, for your review and for sharing that perfect example. Brooke
Comment from Dean Kuch
Nope, no passes from fate, that's for sure.
Supposedly, according to Christianity, our fates and lives have all been mapped out, even before we are born. And, while I do believe in the existence of God, I don't particularly care for that analogy of life.
We are given the power and freedom of choice, and what loving, caring God would blindly allow us to make bad choices that would result in our eternal damnation? A father speaks up if he feels his son is headed down a dark path, then why not God? Is He not our father, and the father of us all?
Job was a good, God-fearing man, and looked what was allowed to be put on his narrow shoulders. No more than we can bear? Job didn't back down, however, and he was rewarded ten-fold for his loyalty and devotion. God knows I've had my fair share of woe.
And do not even get me started on televangelists. A bunch of charlatans lusting for the monies of the gullible masses, for the most part. Preying on the sick, and the elderly. It's just sinful...
Your poem, while not religious in any way, shape or form, does speak to our fate, and what becomes of us based upon the choices we make in our lives. It has a well rhymed and metered flow to it, employs excellent enjambment to carry your thoughts briskly along.
Well done, Brooke.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Nope, no passes from fate, that's for sure.
Supposedly, according to Christianity, our fates and lives have all been mapped out, even before we are born. And, while I do believe in the existence of God, I don't particularly care for that analogy of life.
We are given the power and freedom of choice, and what loving, caring God would blindly allow us to make bad choices that would result in our eternal damnation? A father speaks up if he feels his son is headed down a dark path, then why not God? Is He not our father, and the father of us all?
Job was a good, God-fearing man, and looked what was allowed to be put on his narrow shoulders. No more than we can bear? Job didn't back down, however, and he was rewarded ten-fold for his loyalty and devotion. God knows I've had my fair share of woe.
And do not even get me started on televangelists. A bunch of charlatans lusting for the monies of the gullible masses, for the most part. Preying on the sick, and the elderly. It's just sinful...
Your poem, while not religious in any way, shape or form, does speak to our fate, and what becomes of us based upon the choices we make in our lives. It has a well rhymed and metered flow to it, employs excellent enjambment to carry your thoughts briskly along.
Well done, Brooke.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much, Dean - yep, televangelists are among the lowest of the low, and also give Christians a bad name by those who assume we're all like them! Brooke
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I agree, one-hundred percent, Brooke.
Comment from drivenbackward
Great poem. Your notes confirmed what I thought it was about. It's a great point, and it's very well written, as expected. I also dislike evangelists. I think they're crooks. I once quit an editing job working for one because he was telling blind people they would be able to see again. What a prick.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Great poem. Your notes confirmed what I thought it was about. It's a great point, and it's very well written, as expected. I also dislike evangelists. I think they're crooks. I once quit an editing job working for one because he was telling blind people they would be able to see again. What a prick.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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drivenbackward, thanks so much :-) Yep, send my church money and I'll arrange a cure... Brooke
Comment from Nosha17
You are right, too many people get misled by fake promises as it is easy to go along with it and they are deluded by it. Life is partly what we make of it, but have to accept our lot in the end. Good clear message, with good use of imagery and descriptive language. Excellent rhyming and a smooth flow. Most enjoyable as always and a super pic. Faye
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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You are right, too many people get misled by fake promises as it is easy to go along with it and they are deluded by it. Life is partly what we make of it, but have to accept our lot in the end. Good clear message, with good use of imagery and descriptive language. Excellent rhyming and a smooth flow. Most enjoyable as always and a super pic. Faye
Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Faye, thank you. I agree that much of life is what we make of it, but nobody can avoid being part of a huge company lay off, or getting blindsided by a drunk driver, or having one's spouse fade away to Alzheimer's. Brooke :-)
Comment from TAB_that's me
i agree totally with you brooke with what is in your poem and author notes. i think the poem was quite clear without notes but it will probably help some:)
teresa
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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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i agree totally with you brooke with what is in your poem and author notes. i think the poem was quite clear without notes but it will probably help some:)
teresa
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Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much, Teresa. I wanted to avoid having certain religious readers remind me that God will take care of us all in the end. This is just about what happens in the here and now. :-) Brooke
Comment from robina1978
The photo complements your poem very well. Thanks for your elaborate foot note. I needed that here. As you started I thought it was about Halloween.
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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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The photo complements your poem very well. Thanks for your elaborate foot note. I needed that here. As you started I thought it was about Halloween.
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Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Ine, thank you, my friend :-) Brooke
