Fog
Halloween-inspired poem NOT for children130 total reviews
Comment from GracieAnn
Brooke, I applaud this write full of amazing truths. I agree about whom I would call charlatans that use the Gospel for financial gain. There are too many and Scriptures warn about these false teachers and preachers. It says they have the form of godliness but lack its power. In fact, Christians will have many trials, and that's a given. No passes on those. Very interesting format and philosophy. Well penned. :0 GracieAnn
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Brooke, I applaud this write full of amazing truths. I agree about whom I would call charlatans that use the Gospel for financial gain. There are too many and Scriptures warn about these false teachers and preachers. It says they have the form of godliness but lack its power. In fact, Christians will have many trials, and that's a given. No passes on those. Very interesting format and philosophy. Well penned. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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GracieAnn, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from humpwhistle
Again, we're of a similar mind here, Brooke. I detest 'panacea promise preaching'. And I abhor the inevitable fallback answer: God works in mysterious ways.
It's so pat.
Do your best, folks. But there are no promises.
I'd make a lousy preacher, wouldn't I?
I understand the 'free pass', Brooke. I suspect the 'fog'
represents our inability to discern the reasoning that governs the hard knocks that befall good people.
Peace, Lee
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Again, we're of a similar mind here, Brooke. I detest 'panacea promise preaching'. And I abhor the inevitable fallback answer: God works in mysterious ways.
It's so pat.
Do your best, folks. But there are no promises.
I'd make a lousy preacher, wouldn't I?
I understand the 'free pass', Brooke. I suspect the 'fog'
represents our inability to discern the reasoning that governs the hard knocks that befall good people.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Lee, thank you so very much, my friend :-) You might make a lousy preacher, but I bet you make one helluva neighbor and friend and relative :-) Brooke
Comment from rama devi
Excellent message and theme. Indeed, sometimes fate seems cruel in 'inaccurate'--giving immense suffering to good people (like our friend Maureen) and giving wealth and fame to people of poor character as well (sometimes). God's ways are inscrutable, but I do have faith they make sense eventually... :)
Especially loved this part:
Be kind, be faithful, and be good --
but do not think it's understood
that this will earn a golden pass
from clouds of fog that fates amass.
Excellent rhymes and rhythm throughout, as well as fine poetic devices, as usual. Love the closing rhyme with spurn and earn. Good one!
Very meaningful write, dear. Bravo.
Love,
rd
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Excellent message and theme. Indeed, sometimes fate seems cruel in 'inaccurate'--giving immense suffering to good people (like our friend Maureen) and giving wealth and fame to people of poor character as well (sometimes). God's ways are inscrutable, but I do have faith they make sense eventually... :)
Especially loved this part:
Be kind, be faithful, and be good --
but do not think it's understood
that this will earn a golden pass
from clouds of fog that fates amass.
Excellent rhymes and rhythm throughout, as well as fine poetic devices, as usual. Love the closing rhyme with spurn and earn. Good one!
Very meaningful write, dear. Bravo.
Love,
rd
Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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rama devi, thank you for your insights - yes, Maureen is a perfect case in point, and I could fill a book with others, all from my personal experience. I'm sure I could fill volumes from news articles and asking others to share. Brooke
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Ah, yes. Me too. :)
Comment from PatVallesMangan
This poem immediately transports us to a very scary place that we know so well. Descriptive language and a great picture choice come together in an almost surrealistic place, yet we know from the author's note that this is in our lives. It can be filled with very difficult and sometimes horrendous situations. There can also be great happiness. I think the point made by the author on doing the right ting every day and how it is the right way to live. Living positively, I believe many times brings the Brightest of Blessings. A very thoughtful piece.
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This poem immediately transports us to a very scary place that we know so well. Descriptive language and a great picture choice come together in an almost surrealistic place, yet we know from the author's note that this is in our lives. It can be filled with very difficult and sometimes horrendous situations. There can also be great happiness. I think the point made by the author on doing the right ting every day and how it is the right way to live. Living positively, I believe many times brings the Brightest of Blessings. A very thoughtful piece.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Absolutely a wonderful little piece that can be taken many ways with many reasons. A little bit off for you but the poem is the best. off by meaning adifferent subject. The rhyme and meter, flow and subject if great.
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Absolutely a wonderful little piece that can be taken many ways with many reasons. A little bit off for you but the poem is the best. off by meaning adifferent subject. The rhyme and meter, flow and subject if great.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
Comment from Honeysuckle1876
What an excellent read. The only thing I had a problem with was in stanza 3rd line first word - of if your swallowed - might read better to use - for if your swallowed- ---
I'm not sure that might not be the right word either it just seemed awkward.
Other than that, the poem was written in perfect form and your message was loud and clear and so true. I read the authors notes and sometimes you just need to vent and let it out. I agree wholeheartedly.
Blessings to you, Angie
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What an excellent read. The only thing I had a problem with was in stanza 3rd line first word - of if your swallowed - might read better to use - for if your swallowed- ---
I'm not sure that might not be the right word either it just seemed awkward.
Other than that, the poem was written in perfect form and your message was loud and clear and so true. I read the authors notes and sometimes you just need to vent and let it out. I agree wholeheartedly.
Blessings to you, Angie
Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much - control for if you're swallowed doesn't work for me - people have control or lack control of a matter
I appreciate your thoughtful feedback, Angie :-) Brooke
Comment from ravenblack
We cannot control fate. It effects saint and sinner alike. That fog on the horizon waits for everyone, often randomly. Disease, disaster - the fog has no agenda and selects both the wicked and the divine. Kind, faithful and fair or love thy neighbor as you would love yourself. It is all you can do and it should be done just for the sake of doing it. Thanks fir the author notes. There is no cause and effect. All the prosperity churches and whacko preachers who claim things like 9-11 -I think it was Robertson- is God's judgement on homosexuality, have clearly got it wrong.
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We cannot control fate. It effects saint and sinner alike. That fog on the horizon waits for everyone, often randomly. Disease, disaster - the fog has no agenda and selects both the wicked and the divine. Kind, faithful and fair or love thy neighbor as you would love yourself. It is all you can do and it should be done just for the sake of doing it. Thanks fir the author notes. There is no cause and effect. All the prosperity churches and whacko preachers who claim things like 9-11 -I think it was Robertson- is God's judgement on homosexuality, have clearly got it wrong.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much for your insightful response to this poem, ravenblack - yep, whack jobs they are. Brooke
Comment from Janet Foor
So sorry to be out of sixes as I read this heartfelt poem. Thank you for your "rant" to give more perspective to your words. I hear what you're saying. I have relatives suffering from horrible diseases and friends who have had terrible debilitating accidents through no fault of their own. I am reminded of Job who was a godly man and yet was not spared from suffering. Excellent message.
Janet
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So sorry to be out of sixes as I read this heartfelt poem. Thank you for your "rant" to give more perspective to your words. I hear what you're saying. I have relatives suffering from horrible diseases and friends who have had terrible debilitating accidents through no fault of their own. I am reminded of Job who was a godly man and yet was not spared from suffering. Excellent message.
Janet
Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you so very much, Janet, for your insightful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Tonulak
Dear Brooke,
I seem to be out of sixes at the moment. I'm blown away by the elegance and power of this poem. I know what you mean.We are probably both of an age and life that has seen much. I agree with the thoughts expressed in your notes. Case in point, our dear friend...I don't believe she ever understood the "why", but simply accepted the "is". Her personal gift to me was to accept and value my blindness for the strength it gives me, the lessons it teaches and the savor of my small victories and grace in defeat. This was inspiring work, my friend--Ted
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Dear Brooke,
I seem to be out of sixes at the moment. I'm blown away by the elegance and power of this poem. I know what you mean.We are probably both of an age and life that has seen much. I agree with the thoughts expressed in your notes. Case in point, our dear friend...I don't believe she ever understood the "why", but simply accepted the "is". Her personal gift to me was to accept and value my blindness for the strength it gives me, the lessons it teaches and the savor of my small victories and grace in defeat. This was inspiring work, my friend--Ted
Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you so very much, Ted. Maureen is the perfect example, indeed. I am so touched by your comments. Brooke
Comment from gypsycaravan
Thank you for your little rant. I am in total agreement with your feelings on that. The book title "Bad Things Happen to Good People." That is true and I like to think God gives different souls different trials to earn grace and heavenly rewards. I don't believe any of it is punishment. I believe in a good and loving God.
Hi cutie pie, Sawyer. Love his sweet face in the photo.
Now, for your poem....Ha
As always, it reads beautifully with understanding and a melodic feel to it. My little response to your rant pretty much sums up the message I garnered from the versers.
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Thank you for your little rant. I am in total agreement with your feelings on that. The book title "Bad Things Happen to Good People." That is true and I like to think God gives different souls different trials to earn grace and heavenly rewards. I don't believe any of it is punishment. I believe in a good and loving God.
Hi cutie pie, Sawyer. Love his sweet face in the photo.
Now, for your poem....Ha
As always, it reads beautifully with understanding and a melodic feel to it. My little response to your rant pretty much sums up the message I garnered from the versers.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
