Cautionary Tales
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Comment from livelylinda
kiwisteveh: I have met a couple of mother's like that during my lifetime and I admire, to a small extent, encouraging their children to learn a variety of things beyond their years. The problem with that, is not that their head might explode (although feasible) but that they won't have time to have a real childhood, be a kid and skip rope and ride a bike and feel the breeze in their face when they swing really high. You can't go back and get that. It has to happen when you are a child. Socialization is so important. Watch "The Big Bang" and listen to Dr. Sheldon Cooper. A fun poem to read. livelylinda
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kiwisteveh: I have met a couple of mother's like that during my lifetime and I admire, to a small extent, encouraging their children to learn a variety of things beyond their years. The problem with that, is not that their head might explode (although feasible) but that they won't have time to have a real childhood, be a kid and skip rope and ride a bike and feel the breeze in their face when they swing really high. You can't go back and get that. It has to happen when you are a child. Socialization is so important. Watch "The Big Bang" and listen to Dr. Sheldon Cooper. A fun poem to read. livelylinda
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Linda,thanks for the thoughtful review and the six stars - much appreciated.
Yes, if this poem has any serious message, it is not to overdo things. I take it you put Sheldon forward as an example of someone who is not well-rounded or socialised, although I seem to remember it all stemmed from his own personality and an't foisted upon him by his mother...
Glsd you enjoyed this bit of fun.
Steve
Comment from PatVallesMangan
This is a delightful poem in every way! We parents who want are children to do all of these things, trying to vicariously live through them and also be sure that they get EVERYTHING we think they must have which is indeed EVERYTHING! ... I loved the fun rhyme scheme and rhythm! Simply delightful as a parent and teacher, I really enjoyed it.
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This is a delightful poem in every way! We parents who want are children to do all of these things, trying to vicariously live through them and also be sure that they get EVERYTHING we think they must have which is indeed EVERYTHING! ... I loved the fun rhyme scheme and rhythm! Simply delightful as a parent and teacher, I really enjoyed it.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
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Thanks, again, Pat - so glad you enjoyed this bit of fun.
Steve
Comment from donaldww
This was a super fun read. Endlessly amusing couplets, I like the idea of a tot becoming a polyglot. Whenever I think polyglot, I think glutton for punishment.
Excellent end-line rhymes.
Exceptionally charming and witty!
Cheers,
DW
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This was a super fun read. Endlessly amusing couplets, I like the idea of a tot becoming a polyglot. Whenever I think polyglot, I think glutton for punishment.
Excellent end-line rhymes.
Exceptionally charming and witty!
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
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DW, thanks for the kind words and the six stars.
Yes, polyglot is just one of those lovely words to thro into conversation or a poem...
Steve
Comment from nancyjam
This is hilarious Steve. You are truly gifted when it
comes to writing humorous commentary.
Well paced, rhymed and metered. Good use of
enjambment and vivid images. Nancy
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This is hilarious Steve. You are truly gifted when it
comes to writing humorous commentary.
Well paced, rhymed and metered. Good use of
enjambment and vivid images. Nancy
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
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Nancy, thanks a lot for the warm words and the generous six stars. This is the second of these cautionary tales I have written - if I have the stamina, I will end up with a series.
Steve
Comment from Emily George
A good point here the experts if only mums realized they no best for their child. And the pressure all those activities. Your poem is so funny and we'll rhymed loved the picture, just perfect
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A good point here the experts if only mums realized they no best for their child. And the pressure all those activities. Your poem is so funny and we'll rhymed loved the picture, just perfect
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
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Thanks, Emily.
For me the fun element is everything in this...
Steve
Comment from mommerry
This is a hilarious ditty that cries to be put to music. Oh how much we want our kids - or at least some of us - to excel in everything. the problem comes with that genius finding others of the same ilk. Terrific job.
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This is a hilarious ditty that cries to be put to music. Oh how much we want our kids - or at least some of us - to excel in everything. the problem comes with that genius finding others of the same ilk. Terrific job.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
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Thanks for the kind words!
Steve
Comment from adewpearl
great rhyming couplets and cadence and enjambment, which make this great to read aloud
I like the cultural references
great character development of this organizer/planner extraordinaire
good alliteration in phrases like budding brain a boost
I love the birthing part/fart passage
great listing of ways to train a super kid
great visual of the brain goo exploding into bits from the poor child's overstuffed brain
fantastic closing - this one is screaming for a six :-) Brooke
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great rhyming couplets and cadence and enjambment, which make this great to read aloud
I like the cultural references
great character development of this organizer/planner extraordinaire
good alliteration in phrases like budding brain a boost
I love the birthing part/fart passage
great listing of ways to train a super kid
great visual of the brain goo exploding into bits from the poor child's overstuffed brain
fantastic closing - this one is screaming for a six :-) Brooke
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
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Brooke, thanks so much for the great review as usual.
I especially enjoy wringing a six out of you!
Steve
Comment from Nosha17
There is certainly a good lesson to be learned there, don't overstuff your kid with knowledge. My kids were taught at a steady pace-luckily my daughter is an Aerospace Engineer who works for NASA and my son is a writer/journalist. I loved the humour and colourfully descriptive language of the characters and their escapades. Great rhyming and most enjoyable. Faye
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There is certainly a good lesson to be learned there, don't overstuff your kid with knowledge. My kids were taught at a steady pace-luckily my daughter is an Aerospace Engineer who works for NASA and my son is a writer/journalist. I loved the humour and colourfully descriptive language of the characters and their escapades. Great rhyming and most enjoyable. Faye
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
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Thanks, Faye.
Just for fun, really, with just a hint not to overdo things with your kids.
Sounds like you didn't need to!!
Steve
Comment from Wendyanne
Wow what a wonderful piece of humorous poetry Steve. Excellent flow and good rhymes and witty imagery. I enjoyed this very much!!
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Wow what a wonderful piece of humorous poetry Steve. Excellent flow and good rhymes and witty imagery. I enjoyed this very much!!
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
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Wendyanne, thanks so much for the kind words and the six stars.
Steve
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Well it's for sure Grandma wasn't impressed and thought Fleur should detonate some other place and all that Suzy can think of is teaching the next babe survival skills. LOL Very different Steve. Nancy
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Well it's for sure Grandma wasn't impressed and thought Fleur should detonate some other place and all that Suzy can think of is teaching the next babe survival skills. LOL Very different Steve. Nancy
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
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It takes a bit to impress grandma, or to flummox her - she's seen it all before!
Thanks for the warm words.
Steve
