Cautionary Tales
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Comment from barkingdog
Oh my! There are plenty of these over zealous parents. You've written the monster well. It's a fine parody. Most enjoyable rhyme and meter with interesting alliteration and good use of enjambment.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Oh my! There are plenty of these over zealous parents. You've written the monster well. It's a fine parody. Most enjoyable rhyme and meter with interesting alliteration and good use of enjambment.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Thanks, bd!
Steve
Comment from CHIGYSISKI
This is an excellently written free verse poem with a good dose of humor in it. I liked it very much. I have often wondered the benefit of some of the things we were made to learn in school. Great job!!
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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This is an excellently written free verse poem with a good dose of humor in it. I liked it very much. I have often wondered the benefit of some of the things we were made to learn in school. Great job!!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Thanks for the warm review.
Steve
Comment from Christine B.
Shouldn't every new mother be made to read this?
Your biting wit has me laughing and basically nodding yes. Too many parents are obnoxious, overcomplicating everything. No wonder kids are.... Ha-ha, I won't finish that thought. Great humor, Steve!
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2014
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Shouldn't every new mother be made to read this?
Your biting wit has me laughing and basically nodding yes. Too many parents are obnoxious, overcomplicating everything. No wonder kids are.... Ha-ha, I won't finish that thought. Great humor, Steve!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2014
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Thanks, Christine.
Yes, this is a little poke at pushy mothers, but really just a bit of fun.
Steve
Comment from Oatmeal
kiwisteveh,
Well chosen words are expressive. The theme is strong. Your feelings are expressed well. Your arrangement looks very nice. The flow is smooth.
There was no SPAG. No room for improvement.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2014
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kiwisteveh,
Well chosen words are expressive. The theme is strong. Your feelings are expressed well. Your arrangement looks very nice. The flow is smooth.
There was no SPAG. No room for improvement.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2014
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Thanks for the great review.
Steve
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A most entertaining write from beginning to end. I especially enjoyed:
With information overloaded,
Her brain quite suddenly exploded,
Making such a dreadful mess
On Cousin Margot's brand new dress,
And splattering some awful goo
But it was very entertaining from start to end~Debbie
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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A most entertaining write from beginning to end. I especially enjoyed:
With information overloaded,
Her brain quite suddenly exploded,
Making such a dreadful mess
On Cousin Margot's brand new dress,
And splattering some awful goo
But it was very entertaining from start to end~Debbie
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Thanks, Debbie.
I wonder what a shrink would say about your choice of the best bit!! :O)
Steve
Comment from acerisestory
Ha ha ha! This is very funny, Steve and so very well written. The rhyming is wonderful, the cadence perfect, and you've made great use of alliteration. Mum was the ultimate "tiger mom," don't you think?
Your poem is great fun to read aloud. I can find absolutely nothing wrong with it -- only right!
Thanks for sharing a great write! I must give you one of my coveted sixes! Take care. Alana
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Ha ha ha! This is very funny, Steve and so very well written. The rhyming is wonderful, the cadence perfect, and you've made great use of alliteration. Mum was the ultimate "tiger mom," don't you think?
Your poem is great fun to read aloud. I can find absolutely nothing wrong with it -- only right!
Thanks for sharing a great write! I must give you one of my coveted sixes! Take care. Alana
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Alana, thanks so much for the enthusiastic review and for parting with one of those precious sixers.
Yep, she was so tigerish she probably wore stripes!
Steve
Comment from seaglass
This is a very, very, funny nonsense poem. The rhyme and meter is perfect and it all skips along at a fast playful speed. Who of us hasn't tried to be the perfect mum. This pokes good fun at overdoing it.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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This is a very, very, funny nonsense poem. The rhyme and meter is perfect and it all skips along at a fast playful speed. Who of us hasn't tried to be the perfect mum. This pokes good fun at overdoing it.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Thank you for the great review and the six stars - much appreciated.
Steve
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
This is wonderful. I just love the jolliness in the reading, the wacko 'lyrics' make it so much fun. This is one for me to read to Pete because he'll love it too. Thanks for giving us great entertainment, Steve, Giddy
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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This is wonderful. I just love the jolliness in the reading, the wacko 'lyrics' make it so much fun. This is one for me to read to Pete because he'll love it too. Thanks for giving us great entertainment, Steve, Giddy
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Thanks, Giddy
It was a lot of fun to write, too.
Glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from DR DIP
still laughing as I review..that was so well written a bit of poetic licence with some of your rhyming words but I am not the anal poet Nazi that worries about shit like that.
I am one of those rare breed that look at the overall picture not fine tooth comb for every grammar or rhyming phophar(spelling)
thanks for sharing this fun little ditty
boost/proust?..yeah right! lol
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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still laughing as I review..that was so well written a bit of poetic licence with some of your rhyming words but I am not the anal poet Nazi that worries about shit like that.
I am one of those rare breed that look at the overall picture not fine tooth comb for every grammar or rhyming phophar(spelling)
thanks for sharing this fun little ditty
boost/proust?..yeah right! lol
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Dip, thanks for the great review and the six stars.
I give Monsieur Proust his proper French pronunciation so I am happy with that rhyme...
Steve
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Ok, I had to laugh. Your poem is funny and points out how many parents do overdo the doctors and book learning things. I have heard many of the same things you wrote mentioned on tv news and such. I am a little bit leery of including ''blown to bits." However, I know it is history and is true. But, I think with the many people from all countries who read these posts, some may be upset. I am not suggesting you change, though. That comment is just my opinion. Anyway, I liked your poem. Perfect picture. Good job.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Ok, I had to laugh. Your poem is funny and points out how many parents do overdo the doctors and book learning things. I have heard many of the same things you wrote mentioned on tv news and such. I am a little bit leery of including ''blown to bits." However, I know it is history and is true. But, I think with the many people from all countries who read these posts, some may be upset. I am not suggesting you change, though. That comment is just my opinion. Anyway, I liked your poem. Perfect picture. Good job.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014
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Thank you! The laugh is really what it's all about here.
Steve
