Cautionary Tales
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Comment from Leineco
For all the fun and frolic here
there's a warning tolled, that is quite clear -
when it's time to procreate
be wary of your Type-A trait.
Just like a microwaved bratwurst
an overstuffed young mind might burst
and shower all your kith and kin
with sediment you've jam-packed in!
Very funny poem :-)
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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For all the fun and frolic here
there's a warning tolled, that is quite clear -
when it's time to procreate
be wary of your Type-A trait.
Just like a microwaved bratwurst
an overstuffed young mind might burst
and shower all your kith and kin
with sediment you've jam-packed in!
Very funny poem :-)
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Love the poetic response, esp. the microwaved bratwurst!
Steve
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
I just love your closing lines on these pieces. You quite humorously express the lengths some folks go to in order for their child to be the best. Sadly, though they all mean well their kids end up in a living hell. Nicely done and I thank you so much for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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I just love your closing lines on these pieces. You quite humorously express the lengths some folks go to in order for their child to be the best. Sadly, though they all mean well their kids end up in a living hell. Nicely done and I thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Thank you - glad you enjoyed this piece of fun.
Steve
Comment from jlsavell
kiwisteveh, what a tour de force!. This is exceptional and certainly worthy of all the stars it can garner. I enjoyed this wonderful and witty tale. Yes, sometimes, we have great ambitions for our children and live vicariously through them. WELL DONE.. JLSAVELL
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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kiwisteveh, what a tour de force!. This is exceptional and certainly worthy of all the stars it can garner. I enjoyed this wonderful and witty tale. Yes, sometimes, we have great ambitions for our children and live vicariously through them. WELL DONE.. JLSAVELL
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Thanks for the great review.
Steve
Comment from Eric1
Hi Steve, this is a brilliantly funny ditty my friend, I must have missed this the first time round, the stanzas look simply written, but I'll bet you struggled in a few places, this is my type of humor my friend and it cheered me up!
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Hi Steve, this is a brilliantly funny ditty my friend, I must have missed this the first time round, the stanzas look simply written, but I'll bet you struggled in a few places, this is my type of humor my friend and it cheered me up!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Thanks, Eric.
Actually, when one of these starts flowing, it just rolls on out!
Steve
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You are very welcome Steve, still laughing!
Comment from Neonewman
Crazy awesome fun with this remarkable piece you have so well-crafted. Super fun to read and the flow was incredibly addictive. God Bless!
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Crazy awesome fun with this remarkable piece you have so well-crafted. Super fun to read and the flow was incredibly addictive. God Bless!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Thanks for the very kind words.
Steve
Comment from Linda England Bonam
What a fun thing to read! I bet you had fun writing it, too. It just told a very cool story in poem form and I thoroughly enjoyed it! Your couplets were quite entertaining!
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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What a fun thing to read! I bet you had fun writing it, too. It just told a very cool story in poem form and I thoroughly enjoyed it! Your couplets were quite entertaining!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Yep, I certainly had fun with this.
Thanks for reviewing.
Steve
Comment from thee-name
A excellent poem. Had a good laugh.
THE MOMENT SUZY PLUMLEY-WILDE
DISCOVERED SHE MIGHT BE WITH CHILD
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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A excellent poem. Had a good laugh.
THE MOMENT SUZY PLUMLEY-WILDE
DISCOVERED SHE MIGHT BE WITH CHILD
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Thank you!
Steve
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THANK YOU!
Comment from Halfree
Absolute nonsense that every new or expectant parent should read. Got lots of chuckles from this one. May not be the best of your work but I enjoyed and that is the measure of good writing...did the reader enjoy.
Great way to start my day...thanks
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Absolute nonsense that every new or expectant parent should read. Got lots of chuckles from this one. May not be the best of your work but I enjoyed and that is the measure of good writing...did the reader enjoy.
Great way to start my day...thanks
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Thanks for the warm review.
Steve
Comment from LadyCosgrove
LOLOL - Some people never learn ...or perhaps they do (after a fashion). I laughed out loud as I recognised so many young mums on their quest to produce their own personal genius. :-)
LC
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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LOLOL - Some people never learn ...or perhaps they do (after a fashion). I laughed out loud as I recognised so many young mums on their quest to produce their own personal genius. :-)
LC
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Thanks, LC
I think we all know people like this.
Steve
Comment from BLACKDYKE
My God kiwi, where did all that come from?
It certainly kept me going from start to
certain finish. Such a clever child, who,
with Mother's help showed us how children
are able to take in all those well intended
lessons of modernity. Ooops too late, too
much too soon. Well dare I say it; I take
it all back. Ooops too late. Great entertaining
poetry. Eric
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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My God kiwi, where did all that come from?
It certainly kept me going from start to
certain finish. Such a clever child, who,
with Mother's help showed us how children
are able to take in all those well intended
lessons of modernity. Ooops too late, too
much too soon. Well dare I say it; I take
it all back. Ooops too late. Great entertaining
poetry. Eric
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Where did it come from? Inside a rather dark and perverted brain I suspect. Better not to go poking around in there.
Thanks for reviewing.
Steve
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My pleasure
