Comment from CHIGYSISKI

Exceptional

Rating of Chapter 2 - Suzy
This is an excellently written free verse poem with a good dose of humor in it. I liked it very much. I have often wondered the benefit of some of the things we were made to learn in school. Great job!!

 Comment Written 06-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014

Thanks for the warm review.

Steve

Comment from Christine B.

Excellent

Rating of Chapter 2 - Suzy
Shouldn't every new mother be made to read this?
Your biting wit has me laughing and basically nodding yes. Too many parents are obnoxious, overcomplicating everything. No wonder kids are.... Ha-ha, I won't finish that thought. Great humor, Steve!

 Comment Written 06-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Oct-2014

Thanks, Christine.

Yes, this is a little poke at pushy mothers, but really just a bit of fun.

Steve

Comment from Oatmeal

Excellent

Rating of Chapter 2 - Suzy
kiwisteveh,


Well chosen words are expressive. The theme is strong. Your feelings are expressed well. Your arrangement looks very nice. The flow is smooth.

There was no SPAG. No room for improvement.

I look forward to seeing you again.

Love you,

Oatmeal

 Comment Written 06-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Oct-2014

Thanks for the great review.

Steve

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

Rating of Chapter 2 - Suzy
A most entertaining write from beginning to end. I especially enjoyed:

With information overloaded,
Her brain quite suddenly exploded,
Making such a dreadful mess
On Cousin Margot's brand new dress,
And splattering some awful goo

But it was very entertaining from start to end~Debbie

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014

Thanks, Debbie.

I wonder what a shrink would say about your choice of the best bit!! :O)

Steve

Comment from acerisestory

Exceptional

Rating of Chapter 2 - Suzy
Ha ha ha! This is very funny, Steve and so very well written. The rhyming is wonderful, the cadence perfect, and you've made great use of alliteration. Mum was the ultimate "tiger mom," don't you think?

Your poem is great fun to read aloud. I can find absolutely nothing wrong with it -- only right!

Thanks for sharing a great write! I must give you one of my coveted sixes! Take care. Alana

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014

Alana, thanks so much for the enthusiastic review and for parting with one of those precious sixers.

Yep, she was so tigerish she probably wore stripes!

Steve

Comment from seaglass

Exceptional

Rating of Chapter 2 - Suzy
This is a very, very, funny nonsense poem. The rhyme and meter is perfect and it all skips along at a fast playful speed. Who of us hasn't tried to be the perfect mum. This pokes good fun at overdoing it.

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014

Thank you for the great review and the six stars - much appreciated.

Steve

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Exceptional

Rating of Chapter 2 - Suzy
This is wonderful. I just love the jolliness in the reading, the wacko 'lyrics' make it so much fun. This is one for me to read to Pete because he'll love it too. Thanks for giving us great entertainment, Steve, Giddy

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2014

Thanks, Giddy

It was a lot of fun to write, too.

Glad you enjoyed.

Steve