My Backyard
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Comment from Leigh Ann
Great meter, form and rhyme. Such a beautiful picture to compliment the poem. Yes, we can go around the world and still our most fun times are the simple things done at home. Great work.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Great meter, form and rhyme. Such a beautiful picture to compliment the poem. Yes, we can go around the world and still our most fun times are the simple things done at home. Great work.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you Leigh Ann for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Janet
Comment from Charlene0513
To Jmf4119,
Good expression and imagery as your g-nephew enjoys the lasting and fun-filled days of summer.
Good proximate rhyming- blue/view; shore/roar
Alliteration- perfect place
Charlene
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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To Jmf4119,
Good expression and imagery as your g-nephew enjoys the lasting and fun-filled days of summer.
Good proximate rhyming- blue/view; shore/roar
Alliteration- perfect place
Charlene
Comment Written 30-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you Charlene for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Janet
Comment from Nosha17
A lovely poem, nice to have a taste of summer again. My kids had one of those and did they have fun in our garden. Good use of rhyming and imagery to convey your thoughts. Just a suggestion, you could change verse 3, line 3, to boulder, rock and beam, then it would rhyme with stream better. Most enjoyable. Faye
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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A lovely poem, nice to have a taste of summer again. My kids had one of those and did they have fun in our garden. Good use of rhyming and imagery to convey your thoughts. Just a suggestion, you could change verse 3, line 3, to boulder, rock and beam, then it would rhyme with stream better. Most enjoyable. Faye
Comment Written 30-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you Faye for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Janet
Comment from jmdg1954
We had many a slip-n-slide as my kids grew up. Hours of fun and coolness it did provide.
I like the journey of your poem. It did refresh my mind back to summer although it wasn't to long ago (can't tell by the Jersey weather).
Nicely done. John
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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We had many a slip-n-slide as my kids grew up. Hours of fun and coolness it did provide.
I like the journey of your poem. It did refresh my mind back to summer although it wasn't to long ago (can't tell by the Jersey weather).
Nicely done. John
Comment Written 30-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you John for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Janet
Comment from L.M.Mullins
Cute lighthearted piece. The poem read easily from start to finish with a good choice of rhymes that flowed unforced. I enjoyed reading your work.
LM
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Cute lighthearted piece. The poem read easily from start to finish with a good choice of rhymes that flowed unforced. I enjoyed reading your work.
LM
Comment Written 30-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you LM for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Janet
Comment from jaeladarling
I remember when Slip 'n Slides first came out - all the rage! We had one, and I think my dad used it more than we did. LOL Love this easygoing, fun poem. Enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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I remember when Slip 'n Slides first came out - all the rage! We had one, and I think my dad used it more than we did. LOL Love this easygoing, fun poem. Enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 30-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Janet
Comment from royowen
A beautiful, bliss filled photo of a youngster enjoying the thrill of water play that most children enjoy, great poem, I enjoyed the sheer exhilaration of the beautifully worded work, capturing the moment of joy in verse. Great abab rhyming, a fluidity to the poem makes it evenly metered, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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A beautiful, bliss filled photo of a youngster enjoying the thrill of water play that most children enjoy, great poem, I enjoyed the sheer exhilaration of the beautifully worded work, capturing the moment of joy in verse. Great abab rhyming, a fluidity to the poem makes it evenly metered, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you Roy for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Janet
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You're welcome Janet
Comment from lancellot
Very nice, and a fitting poem for the end of warm temperatures. I can't say I agree a slip -n- slide will do me, but for the little one, it's just fine. Well done.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Very nice, and a fitting poem for the end of warm temperatures. I can't say I agree a slip -n- slide will do me, but for the little one, it's just fine. Well done.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Janet
Comment from varialette
This is a nice poem. The rhyming flows, and the imagery is great. Simple but really childlike and innocent. Reminds me that the simple things are the best in life.
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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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This is a nice poem. The rhyming flows, and the imagery is great. Simple but really childlike and innocent. Reminds me that the simple things are the best in life.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you for your thoughtful review.
Janet
Comment from Drew Delaney
This is nicely written. It makes me think of my grandchildren using the slip'n slip this summer as well. They had a good time, but a hole developed and the water that was inside the slip drained out, but they slid anyway.
It's so much fun watching kids having a good time. I loved reading this poem as I could relate so well. Great job!
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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This is nicely written. It makes me think of my grandchildren using the slip'n slip this summer as well. They had a good time, but a hole developed and the water that was inside the slip drained out, but they slid anyway.
It's so much fun watching kids having a good time. I loved reading this poem as I could relate so well. Great job!
Comment Written 30-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you Drew for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Janet
