My Backyard
Home Sweet Home74 total reviews
Comment from Jackarrie
I can see why this photo inspired your to write a great poem. All the places of enjoyment you mention are beautiful places to be, but we can also have a ball in our own back yard.
Very well written
Mary
The photo is just fabulous.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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I can see why this photo inspired your to write a great poem. All the places of enjoyment you mention are beautiful places to be, but we can also have a ball in our own back yard.
Very well written
Mary
The photo is just fabulous.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review. So pleased you liked this one.
Janet
Comment from Dom G Robles
I see varied images in this poem. The rhyme and rhythm is good. While the poem talks about places he/she had gone, the ocean, the lake, the stream, but today, he/she had chosen the backyard, "just riding on my slip'n slide."
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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I see varied images in this poem. The rhyme and rhythm is good. While the poem talks about places he/she had gone, the ocean, the lake, the stream, but today, he/she had chosen the backyard, "just riding on my slip'n slide."
Comment Written 01-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you Dom for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Janet
Comment from Christine B.
Fun for a child, reflective for an adult. You've done well with not allowing this write's potential to fall. It travels through its message without losing the view it is portraying. Ah, summer's parting is bittersweet.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Fun for a child, reflective for an adult. You've done well with not allowing this write's potential to fall. It travels through its message without losing the view it is portraying. Ah, summer's parting is bittersweet.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you Christine for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Janet
Comment from Emily George
It's spring here in aussieland and that is a poem for me.
Excellent rhyming, with a lovely jaunty flow to it.
Great happy picture. Your poem made me think how simple life's pleasures can be
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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It's spring here in aussieland and that is a poem for me.
Excellent rhyming, with a lovely jaunty flow to it.
Great happy picture. Your poem made me think how simple life's pleasures can be
Comment Written 30-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you Emily for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Janet
Comment from crystal brandon
hi im crystal Brandon,.im an new member on fanstory I read your poem tonite called the back yard I really liked and loved your poem I enjoyed reading your poem and reviewing it on fanstory your poem id=s very awesome and heartwarming so im giving you five stras ok,.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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hi im crystal Brandon,.im an new member on fanstory I read your poem tonite called the back yard I really liked and loved your poem I enjoyed reading your poem and reviewing it on fanstory your poem id=s very awesome and heartwarming so im giving you five stras ok,.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you Crystal for your thoughtful and encouraging review. Also, welcome to FanStory. I look forward to reading your work.
Janet
Comment from Dawn Munro
What a charming and adorable poem (and picture, too)! The meter gives it a cheerful cadence, and the rhyme is spot-on, regardless of the change between stanzas. I enjoyed it VERY much!
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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What a charming and adorable poem (and picture, too)! The meter gives it a cheerful cadence, and the rhyme is spot-on, regardless of the change between stanzas. I enjoyed it VERY much!
Comment Written 30-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Janet
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You're very welcome.
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Jmf
What a treat and thanks for sharing this lovely shot of your great-nephew having such summer fun.
A pacey, jaunty read which 'sang' as cresting waves splashed all over my keyboard. All the resplendent watery moments you express in this delightful, energising poem are at my backdoor. Well minutes away - :)) How I loved those backyard water slides .. one of the better inventions for play, and ideal for an Aussie summer, especially when it was hot and no chance of going to the beach.
Excellent rhyme and rhythm and use of enjambment ... you bring delight to this lovely day, a little cooler after an early spring two day heatwave.... with more expected this week.
Home sweet home for sure. A charming read. Brings a huge smile to my face. Warm regards - Lovinia xoxo
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Hi Jmf
What a treat and thanks for sharing this lovely shot of your great-nephew having such summer fun.
A pacey, jaunty read which 'sang' as cresting waves splashed all over my keyboard. All the resplendent watery moments you express in this delightful, energising poem are at my backdoor. Well minutes away - :)) How I loved those backyard water slides .. one of the better inventions for play, and ideal for an Aussie summer, especially when it was hot and no chance of going to the beach.
Excellent rhyme and rhythm and use of enjambment ... you bring delight to this lovely day, a little cooler after an early spring two day heatwave.... with more expected this week.
Home sweet home for sure. A charming read. Brings a huge smile to my face. Warm regards - Lovinia xoxo
Comment Written 30-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you Lovinia for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Janet
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Hi Janet
My pleasure ... children and laughter are a great combination. Even moreso when it's personal. :))) Hugs - Lovinia xoxo
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Janet
This is an excellent poem for the end of summer. I truly enjoyed it. It reads so smoothly. Your rhymes and meter are perfect.
I like the repetition of "I'd love to..."
You cover ocean, lake and stream... that's enough to make anybody wet. But you are quite happy with your slip'n-slide.
I especially like this line,
"watch the waves caress the shore"
And now, I need a towel!
Thanks for sharing this, as Autumn fast approaches.
Nicely penned!
cheers
Kimbob
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Hi Janet
This is an excellent poem for the end of summer. I truly enjoyed it. It reads so smoothly. Your rhymes and meter are perfect.
I like the repetition of "I'd love to..."
You cover ocean, lake and stream... that's enough to make anybody wet. But you are quite happy with your slip'n-slide.
I especially like this line,
"watch the waves caress the shore"
And now, I need a towel!
Thanks for sharing this, as Autumn fast approaches.
Nicely penned!
cheers
Kimbob
Comment Written 30-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you Kimbob for your thoughtful and fun review.
Janet
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi Janet,
This is such a great photo. It was snapped just right. My guys are 43 & 45 and I remember them having a slip-n-slide!
Enjoyed the carefree poem. Nicely done.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*.*)
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Hi Janet,
This is such a great photo. It was snapped just right. My guys are 43 & 45 and I remember them having a slip-n-slide!
Enjoyed the carefree poem. Nicely done.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*.*)
Comment Written 30-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you Jax for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Janet
Comment from l.raven
HI Janet, I love watching my grandkids when they play on their slip'n slid...you can have just as much fun at home...kids do that for you...I love your poem...makes me smile...very nicely written...and a wonderful picture...luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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HI Janet, I love watching my grandkids when they play on their slip'n slid...you can have just as much fun at home...kids do that for you...I love your poem...makes me smile...very nicely written...and a wonderful picture...luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 30-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you Linda for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Janet
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you are so welcome Janet....luff
