The All-New Elevator 2059
Short Story8 total reviews
Comment from w.j.debi
So everyone is so happy no one cares. Will we all starve to death with happy grins on our faces because we are all too happy to work? Oh, well, we died deliriously happy.
This is a unique take on the contest prompt. Excellent job with the descriptions, the consequences and the mood you create. It must be difficult to finally reach the goal of world domination and have no one acknowledge it with jeolousy. No completion, no fun.
Good luck in the contest. This should do well.
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So everyone is so happy no one cares. Will we all starve to death with happy grins on our faces because we are all too happy to work? Oh, well, we died deliriously happy.
This is a unique take on the contest prompt. Excellent job with the descriptions, the consequences and the mood you create. It must be difficult to finally reach the goal of world domination and have no one acknowledge it with jeolousy. No completion, no fun.
Good luck in the contest. This should do well.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
Comment from adewpearl
I absolutely love your description of the elevator and the purpose it serves - effective choice of how to open the story from the point of view of someone silly with happiness because of being put in the elevator - love the poo poem LOL
great paragraph with all the pop culture allusions
I want Elevator's installed - drop the apostrophe
owned everything on earth - Earth
I just love the ironic closing with the elevator's unintended consequences :-) Brooke
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I absolutely love your description of the elevator and the purpose it serves - effective choice of how to open the story from the point of view of someone silly with happiness because of being put in the elevator - love the poo poem LOL
great paragraph with all the pop culture allusions
I want Elevator's installed - drop the apostrophe
owned everything on earth - Earth
I just love the ironic closing with the elevator's unintended consequences :-) Brooke
Comment Written 30-Sep-2014
Comment from onebrit
It's his is a very strange piece.....not at all what I was expecting given the title. It was so different and therefore held my interest from start to finish. Good luck in the competition.
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It's his is a very strange piece.....not at all what I was expecting given the title. It was so different and therefore held my interest from start to finish. Good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Hmmm, didn't know Seemore was a poet. A hilarious plot. Yep, I believe that this is the second contest, elevator contest. Believe, your other one was about a fat man in an elevator and they were trapped inside it. A different take on this one;looks like a winner. Comical and penned well. I wish you the spoils... wackydo, count your doubloon.
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Hmmm, didn't know Seemore was a poet. A hilarious plot. Yep, I believe that this is the second contest, elevator contest. Believe, your other one was about a fat man in an elevator and they were trapped inside it. A different take on this one;looks like a winner. Comical and penned well. I wish you the spoils... wackydo, count your doubloon.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2014
Comment from Michaelk
Yeah, when I saw the 'Stuck in an elevator' prompt (again) I did a groan, facepalm. You did a great job of turning it on its ear though. This is the most creative and silly story I've read in a long time. It was like a breath of fresh air. Too many times we get so caught up in posting, reviewing, and watching ratings to just let loose and have some fun. That's why I posted my 'Halloween game show' contest. To get people writing something silly every now and then.
Your story was brilliantly funny. I loved your characters and the interactions they had with each other. You even managed to make it semi-believable. I want to buy one of your elevators and throw all the world leaders in it together. :)
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Yeah, when I saw the 'Stuck in an elevator' prompt (again) I did a groan, facepalm. You did a great job of turning it on its ear though. This is the most creative and silly story I've read in a long time. It was like a breath of fresh air. Too many times we get so caught up in posting, reviewing, and watching ratings to just let loose and have some fun. That's why I posted my 'Halloween game show' contest. To get people writing something silly every now and then.
Your story was brilliantly funny. I loved your characters and the interactions they had with each other. You even managed to make it semi-believable. I want to buy one of your elevators and throw all the world leaders in it together. :)
Comment Written 30-Sep-2014
Comment from mikemagine
Ingenious:) This is IT! You've destroyed the proverbial box! From now on, EVERYONE will write with wild originality and hellish humor. Had I only a sixer to give ya...
CLASSIC! You take readers to the next phase!
Mike
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Ingenious:) This is IT! You've destroyed the proverbial box! From now on, EVERYONE will write with wild originality and hellish humor. Had I only a sixer to give ya...
CLASSIC! You take readers to the next phase!
Mike
Comment Written 29-Sep-2014
Comment from Neonewman
I thoroughly enjoyed this quite creative piece, I think the opportunity is there for a win. Good Luck in the contest, I will have to go and read them all. God Bless!
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I thoroughly enjoyed this quite creative piece, I think the opportunity is there for a win. Good Luck in the contest, I will have to go and read them all. God Bless!
Comment Written 29-Sep-2014
Comment from Eric1
Well this certainly is different my friend, whereon earth did you get all those crazy names from? great piece of writing though, love your sense of humor, good luck in the contest to you and the parrot!
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Well this certainly is different my friend, whereon earth did you get all those crazy names from? great piece of writing though, love your sense of humor, good luck in the contest to you and the parrot!
Comment Written 29-Sep-2014
