Dark Covenant
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Comment from Joe_P
I have to give you 5 stars because you are a gifted storyteller and a good wordsmith. You tell an intriguing tale, and you tell it well. There is only one thing on which I must comment. I know this is a prologue, but it covers so many events, it could be the general summary of a book 1, and what follows, book 2. Just in the first three paragraphs, more than 100 years pass. Everything you have written in this prologue reads like a summary of an entire novel. So, why don't you begin with the tale you've so wittily crafted on this page?
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2014
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I have to give you 5 stars because you are a gifted storyteller and a good wordsmith. You tell an intriguing tale, and you tell it well. There is only one thing on which I must comment. I know this is a prologue, but it covers so many events, it could be the general summary of a book 1, and what follows, book 2. Just in the first three paragraphs, more than 100 years pass. Everything you have written in this prologue reads like a summary of an entire novel. So, why don't you begin with the tale you've so wittily crafted on this page?
Comment Written 13-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2014
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Thank you, Joe_P for the rating and your comment. I just sent you a personal email for further explanation.
Comment from Ric Myworld
I make it a point to never read prologues, but for some reason that I can't explain, I decided to read yours. And I'm glad that I did, as I wouldn't want to miss a book filled with evil. It sounds entertaining. :-)
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2014
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I make it a point to never read prologues, but for some reason that I can't explain, I decided to read yours. And I'm glad that I did, as I wouldn't want to miss a book filled with evil. It sounds entertaining. :-)
Comment Written 13-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2014
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Thank you. Ric. I'm glad you did.
Comment from Neonewman
I will patiently wait for more of this fantastic story. I do so love the witches and their covens, they rate right up there with the vampires in my books. God bless!
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2014
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I will patiently wait for more of this fantastic story. I do so love the witches and their covens, they rate right up there with the vampires in my books. God bless!
Comment Written 13-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2014
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Thank you.
Comment from Writingfundimension
I'm glad I'm getting in on this fascinating story early on. You've already drawn the lines very well between the white witches and the 'black' witches. The latter are truly chilling and formidable. Well done, Amahra. Looking forward to reading more.
Bev
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2014
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I'm glad I'm getting in on this fascinating story early on. You've already drawn the lines very well between the white witches and the 'black' witches. The latter are truly chilling and formidable. Well done, Amahra. Looking forward to reading more.
Bev
Comment Written 13-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2014
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Hey Bev, thank you. I'm glad you find it fascinating.
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You're very welcome!
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is an amazing prologue! You provide just the right amount of back story which sets the initial impressions of the characters nicely. I liked how you did not spend much time dwelling on the time in between the back story and the present - only providing what was needed which kept things moving along rather than mired down in too much detail. Nicely done and I thank you so much for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2014
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This is an amazing prologue! You provide just the right amount of back story which sets the initial impressions of the characters nicely. I liked how you did not spend much time dwelling on the time in between the back story and the present - only providing what was needed which kept things moving along rather than mired down in too much detail. Nicely done and I thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2014
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Thank you, Mystic. So glad you liked it.
Comment from chasennov
Prologue of the book Dark Covenant The Berwick Witches Series: Book One "Dark Covenant" This is a new beginning and I loved it so far. Liked your formulation, and the structure is good as well. Well done.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2014
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Prologue of the book Dark Covenant The Berwick Witches Series: Book One "Dark Covenant" This is a new beginning and I loved it so far. Liked your formulation, and the structure is good as well. Well done.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2014
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Thank you much.
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Welcome.
Comment from Ekim777
We are surely preoccupied with evil beings and fallen angels. Our traditions are full of it. The nature of our humanity is riddled by it. In the great works of Paradise Lost and Dante's Inferno those wicked creatures attract us more than that stern, judgmental, all pervasive God of creation. And what about those confusing Gods of the Romans and ancient Greeks? They swoop down to seduce humanity and confuse us. It seems that our author's witches pale in comparison. -Ekim777
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2014
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We are surely preoccupied with evil beings and fallen angels. Our traditions are full of it. The nature of our humanity is riddled by it. In the great works of Paradise Lost and Dante's Inferno those wicked creatures attract us more than that stern, judgmental, all pervasive God of creation. And what about those confusing Gods of the Romans and ancient Greeks? They swoop down to seduce humanity and confuse us. It seems that our author's witches pale in comparison. -Ekim777
Comment Written 13-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2014
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No, I just got finished my year-long romance novel, The Animal Doctor" remember. I haven't written supernatural in over a year. I took a break from it, and you didn't even notice. LOL
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Wow! This will definitely be on my "to read" list."
I'm not really a fan of supernatural fiction but you may well change that.
This cleverly plotted prologue has grabbed my attention, held it, and left me interested in reading more.
In short, this genre may become more popular on my reading list.
I will be very interested in the development of this story.
:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2014
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Wow! This will definitely be on my "to read" list."
I'm not really a fan of supernatural fiction but you may well change that.
This cleverly plotted prologue has grabbed my attention, held it, and left me interested in reading more.
In short, this genre may become more popular on my reading list.
I will be very interested in the development of this story.
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 13-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much, Shirley. I'm so glad you liked my prologue. And thank you for the stars. I'm really flattered.
Comment from adewpearl
You set the stage dramatically in your opening
vivid detail of setting
master piece - masterpiece
I love the back story
a thorn in the covens' side - coven's - singular possessive
good character development and dialogue
Brooke
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2014
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You set the stage dramatically in your opening
vivid detail of setting
master piece - masterpiece
I love the back story
a thorn in the covens' side - coven's - singular possessive
good character development and dialogue
Brooke
Comment Written 13-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2014
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Thank you, Brooke. I'll make those corrections.
Comment from marijmd
named it, New Berwick They named it, Falcon Haven,
too similar sentences right after each other - would think how to re-word one of them.
A new book? I'm looking forward to it - love supernatural and witchcraft - sound like a fun romp.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2014
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named it, New Berwick They named it, Falcon Haven,
too similar sentences right after each other - would think how to re-word one of them.
A new book? I'm looking forward to it - love supernatural and witchcraft - sound like a fun romp.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2014
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Thank you, marijmd. I'll take a look.
