Dark Covenant
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Comment from Joan E.
I'm not into the supernatural genre, but you tell a good story. Your descriptions are compelling and your dialog, realistic. Your notes show how well thought out this project is. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2016
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I'm not into the supernatural genre, but you tell a good story. Your descriptions are compelling and your dialog, realistic. Your notes show how well thought out this project is. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 07-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2016
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Thank you, but.why did you read the one for two cents when you could have gotten $1.20 for the one that's posted?
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I was attracted by the picture and thought I was reading your most current post... Smiles- Joan
Comment from walbc
I am totally stunned by your writing talents. Never have I seen such imagination as this. It is not the type of story that would usually pull me in, but I was fascinated and could not stop reading until I reached the end. You are amazing, amahra! Your prose is so beautifully constructed, your dialogue so real. I am truly impressed. Warm Regards, Wendy.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2015
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I am totally stunned by your writing talents. Never have I seen such imagination as this. It is not the type of story that would usually pull me in, but I was fascinated and could not stop reading until I reached the end. You are amazing, amahra! Your prose is so beautifully constructed, your dialogue so real. I am truly impressed. Warm Regards, Wendy.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2015
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Wow! Thank you, thank you. I'm so flattered for this review and I don't mean just the stars. I labor for this kind of reaction from readers. You have just made all of my tedious editing worth while. Blessings to you, walbc.
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you are more than welcome!! Wendy.
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Wendy, something strange just happened. Your review just disappeared. I contacted Tom to see what happened. I'll check my post again to see if it there.
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Thank you so much.
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I'm replying again, because something is wrong with this site.
Comment from FJTrickster
This looks like fun. I like the narrative in this prologue. It explains everything and sets everything up for the story to follow. I can't wait to read more.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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This looks like fun. I like the narrative in this prologue. It explains everything and sets everything up for the story to follow. I can't wait to read more.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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I really don't like reading prologues, and I tried not to write one, but the back story was just too long to keep weaving it in and out of my story. Thank you for reading and liking it.
Comment from NicciFaye
Amahra - fantastically creative. I love it. I love the descriptions throughout the story. Specially, her eyes rolling back like small boiled eyes..what a sight to imagine. I am def looking forward to future writings on this.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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Amahra - fantastically creative. I love it. I love the descriptions throughout the story. Specially, her eyes rolling back like small boiled eyes..what a sight to imagine. I am def looking forward to future writings on this.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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Thank you again, Faye.
Comment from PatVallesMangan
This Supernatural Fiction piece is well written. It grabs the readers attention quickly. I like the idea that their protector is a spider which is a the whole tale behind the web in the Dream Catchers of Native Americans. The descriptive language was definitely a big plus to making this so easy to see in our minds! Great for a prologue!
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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This Supernatural Fiction piece is well written. It grabs the readers attention quickly. I like the idea that their protector is a spider which is a the whole tale behind the web in the Dream Catchers of Native Americans. The descriptive language was definitely a big plus to making this so easy to see in our minds! Great for a prologue!
Comment Written 16-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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Well thank you so much, Pat. I didn't know about tr fine review.he spider or the dream catcher. Thanks for the education. And thanks for you
Comment from Green Lake Girl
A very sinister tale indeed. A great set-up chapter for what's to come. You do a good job explaining that real witchcraft shouldn't be evil, but supportive of Mother Nature. I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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A very sinister tale indeed. A great set-up chapter for what's to come. You do a good job explaining that real witchcraft shouldn't be evil, but supportive of Mother Nature. I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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Thank you very much for reading.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Long and involved with many names and places to remember... maybe too much? You've clearly identified the villain and hinted at the coming trouble in store for the Covenant from Corina and her gang. History complete up to the 21st century... so... now what evil plans does she have? Mwahahaaaa..... :)
and named it, New Berwick. << Remove comma.
They named it, Falcon Haven << Remove comma.
pot that lingered a few inches off the floor in mid-air << Remove "in mid-air" since that's several feet off the floor, and you said "a few inches off the floor" here.. it can't be both.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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Long and involved with many names and places to remember... maybe too much? You've clearly identified the villain and hinted at the coming trouble in store for the Covenant from Corina and her gang. History complete up to the 21st century... so... now what evil plans does she have? Mwahahaaaa..... :)
and named it, New Berwick. << Remove comma.
They named it, Falcon Haven << Remove comma.
pot that lingered a few inches off the floor in mid-air << Remove "in mid-air" since that's several feet off the floor, and you said "a few inches off the floor" here.. it can't be both.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2014
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Thank you, Phyllis.
Comment from SentimentalSeany
I think this story has so much potential, and I cannot wait to read more of it!
I feel like it could be better! I loved the setting and the storyline, but want more out of the prologue! It felt too much like a summary. If you change up the structure I feel like it would flow nicer, and would keep my attention. For example start the prologue off with dialogue, (maybe the trial) and then give the readers more information.
It was an awesome prologue overall. I loved the scene where her ex slices his own throat - added just a touch of creepiness.
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reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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I think this story has so much potential, and I cannot wait to read more of it!
I feel like it could be better! I loved the setting and the storyline, but want more out of the prologue! It felt too much like a summary. If you change up the structure I feel like it would flow nicer, and would keep my attention. For example start the prologue off with dialogue, (maybe the trial) and then give the readers more information.
It was an awesome prologue overall. I loved the scene where her ex slices his own throat - added just a touch of creepiness.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Thank you, Sentimental.
Comment from PrincessinPurple
This is a good chapter. When I read the words I can see an image in my mind. I like how the story is going. Good for the author's note. I do like the picture that goes among with the first chapter.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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This is a good chapter. When I read the words I can see an image in my mind. I like how the story is going. Good for the author's note. I do like the picture that goes among with the first chapter.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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thank you very much.
Comment from padumachitta
Hi. This is a good read. That bad one, she is some scary. Slitting his own throat, now that is some bad blood, and no one could finger her. I guess she is going to make a real mess of things before this story plays out.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Hi. This is a good read. That bad one, she is some scary. Slitting his own throat, now that is some bad blood, and no one could finger her. I guess she is going to make a real mess of things before this story plays out.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much.
