Texas Dream Catcher
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Comment from drivenbackward
I'm not completely familiar with the story, but I found this chapter to be a quick read with a lot of interesting education for the reader. In other words: you informed the reader without being boring. That's a win!
Alex continued on to his room. -- No need for 'on'
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I'm not completely familiar with the story, but I found this chapter to be a quick read with a lot of interesting education for the reader. In other words: you informed the reader without being boring. That's a win!
Alex continued on to his room. -- No need for 'on'
Comment Written 29-Sep-2014
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Comment from Writingfundimension
Hi, Barbara. What a great ending to this chapter. The inner dialogue deepens the POV and brings the reader in very nicely. Lots of action in this excellent chapter.
:) Bev
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Hi, Barbara. What a great ending to this chapter. The inner dialogue deepens the POV and brings the reader in very nicely. Lots of action in this excellent chapter.
:) Bev
Comment Written 29-Sep-2014
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You're very welcome, Barbara. :)
Comment from rmj09
Excellently written chapter.
The focus is on what caused the Bison,Longhorns and Brahmans to stampede. The development shows how fires all set at the same time was the cause. A letter for Soni telling her to leave as they wouldn't have a woman let alone a half-breed squaw.
The dialogue was clear and expressed what they were feeling. The narration showed the action and the personal reactions.
The emotions I felt was anger that someone started the fires and disgust with the letter sent to Soni.
I am interested to see how Soni will handle this.
Keep on writing
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Excellently written chapter.
The focus is on what caused the Bison,Longhorns and Brahmans to stampede. The development shows how fires all set at the same time was the cause. A letter for Soni telling her to leave as they wouldn't have a woman let alone a half-breed squaw.
The dialogue was clear and expressed what they were feeling. The narration showed the action and the personal reactions.
The emotions I felt was anger that someone started the fires and disgust with the letter sent to Soni.
I am interested to see how Soni will handle this.
Keep on writing
Comment Written 29-Sep-2014
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Comment from Cumbrianlass
Wow, someone really has it in for Soni. Good post, Barbara. I enjoyed the information about the bison. I've heard it said that way back when, a man could stand for three days while one of the herds passed by, there were so many. We do so much harm to this planet.
Enjoyable read, and a good hook at the end.
Av
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Wow, someone really has it in for Soni. Good post, Barbara. I enjoyed the information about the bison. I've heard it said that way back when, a man could stand for three days while one of the herds passed by, there were so many. We do so much harm to this planet.
Enjoyable read, and a good hook at the end.
Av
Comment Written 29-Sep-2014
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Comment from kiwijenny
Barbara this is another great chapter....there is excitement brewing with this letter..and these dangerous people mean business.
Soni set beside Tatiana....I would say ..Soni sat beside Tatiana
Loved this chapter
God bless
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Barbara this is another great chapter....there is excitement brewing with this letter..and these dangerous people mean business.
Soni set beside Tatiana....I would say ..Soni sat beside Tatiana
Loved this chapter
God bless
Comment Written 29-Sep-2014
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Comment from elgone
Racism rears its ugly head and sexism as well. I didn't see any errors. Maybe you've caught all of them before i got around to reading it. The story seems to be progressing well.
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Racism rears its ugly head and sexism as well. I didn't see any errors. Maybe you've caught all of them before i got around to reading it. The story seems to be progressing well.
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Comment Written 29-Sep-2014
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Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh, this is really good! I wonder if the fires were set intentionally as another means of frightening Soni into leaving, as Alex says?
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Oh, this is really good! I wonder if the fires were set intentionally as another means of frightening Soni into leaving, as Alex says?
Comment Written 29-Sep-2014
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Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Very interesting and I can hear the tension in Soni's voice by her actions! I think you're leading the story in a great direction. The American bison is an imposing animal, and I just found out on Google we have domestic and feral buffalo in Australia. Giddy
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Very interesting and I can hear the tension in Soni's voice by her actions! I think you're leading the story in a great direction. The American bison is an imposing animal, and I just found out on Google we have domestic and feral buffalo in Australia. Giddy
Comment Written 29-Sep-2014
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Comment from jaeladarling
Ooh, an official warning. Not good! Wonder how Soni will deal with that. And how will the ranch turn out? Guess I'll have to tune in next time. :)
A few little nits:
"watched the dust rise, before stepping inside." (No comma)
"out for us or at least" (Comma after "us")
"to North America, and then" (No comma)
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Ooh, an official warning. Not good! Wonder how Soni will deal with that. And how will the ranch turn out? Guess I'll have to tune in next time. :)
A few little nits:
"watched the dust rise, before stepping inside." (No comma)
"out for us or at least" (Comma after "us")
"to North America, and then" (No comma)
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2014
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Comment from Phyllis Stewart
So someone has a bad case of prejudice, so bad that they'd go to all that trouble to stampede her herd? Hard to believe. Must be something from the drug runners... or have to do with Jim. We still don't know who he really is. Hmmm... INteresting chapter, to say the least. :)
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So someone has a bad case of prejudice, so bad that they'd go to all that trouble to stampede her herd? Hard to believe. Must be something from the drug runners... or have to do with Jim. We still don't know who he really is. Hmmm... INteresting chapter, to say the least. :)
Comment Written 28-Sep-2014
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