Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

I read your poetry to feast on the wonderful rhyme, rhythm and metre, Brooke ... love the alliteration sparkling through the lines - Ghoulies grumble, goblins growl.. see what I mean? :)

Sonali





do it loud (do you need a comma here?) but do it now

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014

thanks so much, Sonali - I'll take a look at that line

Comment from boxergirl

Excellent

Good job with your Halloween poem about Goblins and Ghoulies. Great alliteration of G's and the AABB rhyme scheme works well also. "Raise a toast to blackest doom, pour each goblet full of gloom" were my favorite lines. 8-)

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014

thanks so much, boxergirl :-) Brooke

Comment from LateBloomer

Excellent

Hello adewpearl, I enjoyed reading your Halloween Poem, and I could feel the spooky awe and whimsical magic of Halloween Night. I especially liked:

Ghoulies grumble, ghosties groan,
goblins growl and monsters moan.
Gather round to douse the light --
Rouse the rulers of the night.

(Lots of black magic power and imagery within - very good.)

A fun and timely poem that made me smile. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014

LateBloomer, so glad you enjoyed :-) Thank you, my friend. Brooke

Comment from Jackarrie

Excellent

Hi Brooke, I cannot believe it is that time again, how time flies, I like your poem not too grim, but yet a very good description of Halloween.

Ghoulies grumble, ghosties groan,
goblins growl and monsters moan.
Gather round to douse the light --
Rouse the rulers of the night.

Well written
Mary

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014

Mary, thanks so much - my Halloween poems used to be grimmer, but now I have Sawyer to consider :-) Brooke

Comment from Jeanie Mercer

Excellent

I like the way you treat this "goulish" subject so lightheartedly that it's only fun rather than goulish. It is fresh and creative throughout, and it uses all the delightful images of Halloween. I usually dread the month of October because the theme is carried so far on TV, and truly horrible images pop up on the screen. Love, Jeanie

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014

Jeanie, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from evilynne

Exceptional

Halloween is coming and the spooks are about to come out! What a great little spooky but not too scary poem. The accompanying picture and the color scheme are a nice touch. Evi

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014

Evi, thank you so very much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke

Comment from Just2Write

Excellent

Now you're swinging with the meter, Brooke - An excellent write using Trochaic tetrameter with a Catalexis on the forth Trochee. (Whew - say that fast four times!)
Trochee is one of the best meters for children's poems, because the poem just comes alive with that sing-song beat. Many, many of our favourite nursery rhymes are written in it. This is a fun Halloween poem, Brooke.
Rose.

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014

Thanks so very much, Rose :-) Brooke

Comment from madhatter1977

Exceptional

This is very funny, Brooke! LOL! A scary poem indeed with wonderful Halloween imagery. You should try to get it published in time for the night itself. Great writing! Best wishes, Pete :)

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014

Madhatter, thanks so much for your encouragement and generous sixth star :-) Brooke

Comment from fastdigits

Excellent

You have hit all my childhood
memories of ghouls and goblins
that I hid under the blanket
in bed so they could not get
to me in this rhyming adventure
of Halloween days with these
creatures that come out once
each year.
Well done

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014

Thanks so much, fastdigits :-) Brooke

Comment from Cumbrianlass

Excellent

Excellent, Brooke. There's some wonderful alliteration in this poem and your skill with rhymes is beautifully presented. Very spooky! LOL!

I take it you're a fan of Halloween? I love seeing all the little ones dressed up. :) I bet Sawyer will really enjoy it this year.

A pleasure to read.

Av

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014

Av, yes, a huge fan. It is my daughter's favorite holiday, and that is saying something because she is a huge Christmas fan. Thanks so much :-) Brooke