Sun on World tour!
This is Sun's world tour - beginning to end.3 total reviews
Comment from Neonewman
Great style of poetry the 5-7-5, you definitely said it all in such a short theme. Did you meet the 7th syllable in the second line? Doesn't matter to me if you didn't, I love the poem. God Bless!
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014
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Great style of poetry the 5-7-5, you definitely said it all in such a short theme. Did you meet the 7th syllable in the second line? Doesn't matter to me if you didn't, I love the poem. God Bless!
Comment Written 27-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014
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thanx, I think i have , Correct me if there is any mistake .
Comment from sibhus
I like this, it has such a beautiful image to it. I hadn't thought of the Earth's trip around the sun as the sun's world tour, but that is an interesting and amusing thought. This is a great image that you have created with this few words. A very good poem.
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I like this, it has such a beautiful image to it. I hadn't thought of the Earth's trip around the sun as the sun's world tour, but that is an interesting and amusing thought. This is a great image that you have created with this few words. A very good poem.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2014
Comment from adewpearl
Excellent 5/7/5 syllable count
rises form mount - I assume you mean from mount
I like the personification of the sun
and the cheerful way you present its typical day
Brooke
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Excellent 5/7/5 syllable count
rises form mount - I assume you mean from mount
I like the personification of the sun
and the cheerful way you present its typical day
Brooke
Comment Written 27-Sep-2014
