Neighbor Problem
Money does not buy happiness4 total reviews
Comment from honeytree
Money does not buy happiness but can feed us and clothe us.
Money can create evil within our world greed becomes quite
prevalent within our society.
honey tree
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Money does not buy happiness but can feed us and clothe us.
Money can create evil within our world greed becomes quite
prevalent within our society.
honey tree
Comment Written 28-Sep-2014
Comment from Jay Squires
Your poetry seems to leave me feeling like I caught the gist of it but may be guessing the major thrust.
Here the persona leaves home [kisses wife goodbye?]
goes to town, where he has a beer, steak and his lover.
Somehow, as the night wears on he flattens the pimp that rules his daughter and takes her home.
The "once more" at the end is what gives the poem its essence. It's what keeps me trying again to crack the nut of a Walter L Jones poem.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014
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Your poetry seems to leave me feeling like I caught the gist of it but may be guessing the major thrust.
Here the persona leaves home [kisses wife goodbye?]
goes to town, where he has a beer, steak and his lover.
Somehow, as the night wears on he flattens the pimp that rules his daughter and takes her home.
The "once more" at the end is what gives the poem its essence. It's what keeps me trying again to crack the nut of a Walter L Jones poem.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014
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You add a smile every day, Daddy is a bit over the edge, Walt
Comment from stroncoso1
Wow this is intense. I like your poem. It is gritty, cutting and poignant in its message. I would only add an 's' to the word "princess." Other than that, your poem is to the point and tells a story well. Good job!
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Wow this is intense. I like your poem. It is gritty, cutting and poignant in its message. I would only add an 's' to the word "princess." Other than that, your poem is to the point and tells a story well. Good job!
Comment Written 27-Sep-2014
Comment from Leigh Ann
Interesting poem. I am guessing it is about a man who seeks and finds his daughter, who has been selling her body for money? I could be reading it wrong but good use of colors, and imagery.
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Interesting poem. I am guessing it is about a man who seeks and finds his daughter, who has been selling her body for money? I could be reading it wrong but good use of colors, and imagery.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2014
