Gloom Soon Passes
trochaic meter in 7/8/7/8122 total reviews
Comment from kittykatnoel
Excellent writing. The lines, "Meadows once as white as milk, then will thrive with gold aglowing.", seems to be off slightly in rhythm. It is probably just me, when I read it out loud I tripped a little in that area. Thank you for sharing a beautiful poem.
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Excellent writing. The lines, "Meadows once as white as milk, then will thrive with gold aglowing.", seems to be off slightly in rhythm. It is probably just me, when I read it out loud I tripped a little in that area. Thank you for sharing a beautiful poem.
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Comment Written 25-Sep-2014
Comment from drivenbackward
Another high-quality poem, Brooke. At first, I thought this was really dark, but then I read it again and realized that it's about the change of season. At least I think so. The wording is just about perfect.
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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014
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Another high-quality poem, Brooke. At first, I thought this was really dark, but then I read it again and realized that it's about the change of season. At least I think so. The wording is just about perfect.
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Comment Written 25-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much for your thoughtful review :-) The first two stanzas are dark, but I certainly hope it's clear that the second two stanzas totally shift the mood :-) Brooke
