Gloom Soon Passes
trochaic meter in 7/8/7/8122 total reviews
Comment from Kaila Mari
Such a beautiful poem. Its meter and rhyme lends to a refreshing cadence of lyrics which flow into each other. Nicely done as usual. An excellent poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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Such a beautiful poem. Its meter and rhyme lends to a refreshing cadence of lyrics which flow into each other. Nicely done as usual. An excellent poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much, Kaila :-) Brooke
Comment from krys123
Brooke;
A marvelous piece of poetry which I enjoyed reading very much and which shows your imagination, which is very inventive and ingeniously creative in your artistic poetry and your formulation of poetic style.
The rhyming being neither forced nor labored even helped with your rhythmic flow which seem to flow smoothly throughout your writing with an excellent tempo and meter they made it so easy to read.
The picture represented the blowing of bubbles that flowed to the wind just like dandelion seeds. The imagery was very descriptive, as well as eloquently expressive throughout: "Dandelion seeds of cell can hitch a ride on breeze is blowing. Meadows once as white as milk then will thrive with gold aglowing." A beautiful portrayal of dandelion seeds blowing in the wind.
Thank you for sharing and posting this for everyone to read and may the good Lord be with you always, Brooke.
Alex
PS: Good luck in the contest for this is a sensational piece of writing.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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Brooke;
A marvelous piece of poetry which I enjoyed reading very much and which shows your imagination, which is very inventive and ingeniously creative in your artistic poetry and your formulation of poetic style.
The rhyming being neither forced nor labored even helped with your rhythmic flow which seem to flow smoothly throughout your writing with an excellent tempo and meter they made it so easy to read.
The picture represented the blowing of bubbles that flowed to the wind just like dandelion seeds. The imagery was very descriptive, as well as eloquently expressive throughout: "Dandelion seeds of cell can hitch a ride on breeze is blowing. Meadows once as white as milk then will thrive with gold aglowing." A beautiful portrayal of dandelion seeds blowing in the wind.
Thank you for sharing and posting this for everyone to read and may the good Lord be with you always, Brooke.
Alex
PS: Good luck in the contest for this is a sensational piece of writing.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2014
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Thank you so very much, Alex, for your thoughtful review and kind contest wishes :-) Brooke
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You are so sincerely welcome my friend.
Alex
Comment from GWHARGIS
I wish I had a six left. Blowing bubbles and watching them float is one of my favorite activities. I used to do it for my children, then my grandchildren, and now my dogs get excited when I blow them. Great imagery of the grass being swords. Wonderful poem. Gretchen
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014
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I wish I had a six left. Blowing bubbles and watching them float is one of my favorite activities. I used to do it for my children, then my grandchildren, and now my dogs get excited when I blow them. Great imagery of the grass being swords. Wonderful poem. Gretchen
Comment Written 25-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014
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Gretchen, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Loren (7)
Very visual and winding into a philosophical observation of life in metaphors. Life, dying and renewing itself, both dependent on other things than themselves. Best of luck in the contest, it would get my vote for sure. Loren
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Very visual and winding into a philosophical observation of life in metaphors. Life, dying and renewing itself, both dependent on other things than themselves. Best of luck in the contest, it would get my vote for sure. Loren
Comment Written 25-Sep-2014
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hello Brooke,
This was a wonderful read. Loved the alliterations of, "Bubbles burst" and "seeds of silk". I also appreciated the comparison of dandelion seeds to bubbles on the wind, with the promise of a new tomorrow.
Nice work...my best wishes for your entry, Bill
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Hello Brooke,
This was a wonderful read. Loved the alliterations of, "Bubbles burst" and "seeds of silk". I also appreciated the comparison of dandelion seeds to bubbles on the wind, with the promise of a new tomorrow.
Nice work...my best wishes for your entry, Bill
Comment Written 25-Sep-2014
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh WOW, this is so wonderful! Brooke, you know this is another one I'm going to have to save to read again. And darn it! No sixes left. SHEESH!!! I can picture this so easily, and it's LOVELY! Gloom that cheers me up! LOL.
add on - oops, looks like I can't save it yet - remind me?
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Oh WOW, this is so wonderful! Brooke, you know this is another one I'm going to have to save to read again. And darn it! No sixes left. SHEESH!!! I can picture this so easily, and it's LOVELY! Gloom that cheers me up! LOL.
add on - oops, looks like I can't save it yet - remind me?
Comment Written 25-Sep-2014
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is yet another interesting and beautiful poem that the author has created with this piece of work. Children at play are so wonderful. They bring light into our lives.
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This is yet another interesting and beautiful poem that the author has created with this piece of work. Children at play are so wonderful. They bring light into our lives.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2014
Comment from Nosha17
All the things a child could ask questions about that is so enchanting in Nature. It has a nice rhythm and great rhyming. Good use of descriptive language and thoroughly charming. Good luck in the contest. Faye
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All the things a child could ask questions about that is so enchanting in Nature. It has a nice rhythm and great rhyming. Good use of descriptive language and thoroughly charming. Good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 25-Sep-2014
Comment from jaeladarling
"Children, raise your magic wands"
Love this line! Like a command from the fantasy world to go forth and conquer with the power of floating rainbows. :)
Such a great read. Thanks for sharing!
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"Children, raise your magic wands"
Love this line! Like a command from the fantasy world to go forth and conquer with the power of floating rainbows. :)
Such a great read. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 25-Sep-2014
Comment from gypsycaravan
Such a cutie with his lollipop.
Love the visuals these lines produced for me.
1. Lonely stems are left to grieve,
colorless, in need of cheering.
2. Bubbles burst as they are slashed
by the blades of grass that pierce them.
You painted another great canvas. It was hard to believe there was ever any gloom. Lovely poem.
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Such a cutie with his lollipop.
Love the visuals these lines produced for me.
1. Lonely stems are left to grieve,
colorless, in need of cheering.
2. Bubbles burst as they are slashed
by the blades of grass that pierce them.
You painted another great canvas. It was hard to believe there was ever any gloom. Lovely poem.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2014
