Comment from Permelia

Excellent

Your poetry is so beautiful, but it has certainly taken a turn for sadness- and nostalgia -

I observe
with certain
sadness,
old footprints
on the sand,
to slowly
evanesce
It is sad when footprints you loved slowly fade away

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2005

Comment from Aleksandramarie

Excellent

interesting bunch of images,

very lyrical, this winds and spins. and then
ends up in a field,

a tornado of sorts,

good one, thanks,mspotter

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2005

Comment from Bryana

Excellent

I'm sure this is written with emotion. You need to become detached
of the old feelings of the past and so, start anew, excellent description
of wisdom learned in the school of life.

Good luck to you Pili in everything and anything you decide to do in
your life.
Un abrazo, Ana

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2005

Comment from Seancuig

Excellent

Old footprints in the sand, slowly fading? Sounds a little sad to me Pili.
There is a tone of melancholy throughout the piece, but it is written with your usual subtle elegance.

I hope you have a smile on your face, and not too much melancholy
Cheers
Sean

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2005

Comment from ROCHELLE MOORE

Excellent

really love this one
it stands out from your other work to me ( just a personal choice)
a beautifully and intellectually written piece of work
a throughly enjoyable read
many thanks

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2005

Comment from jkhudson

Excellent

I crave
emptiness
with clarity,
freedom
within my heart,
detachment
from old shadows
of what once was
precious,
but it is no more

Oh if we could do this! How strange to me is it not, how once precious things are not now. I once had a friend tell me that some people are friends only for a time, for a specific reason. It is hard for me to detach myself from old shadows.

This is a very good poem that has a strength and longing in it. A certain wistfulness. Good job!

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2005

Comment from bayley

Excellent

I get a sense of sad reflection in this, Pili. I know you talk of freshness and new approaches but they seem to be tinged with painful, frustrated thoughts. The imagery is beautiful and stirs the soul to imagine the freshness of something new but I'm not sure that the overall tone is a happy one. I'm probably miles off the mark ~Sean

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2005

Comment from Wendyanne

Excellent

This poem has a very gentle edge to it. The imagery is wonderful, for example, "old footprints on the sand, slowly evanesce." A thought-provoking piece. Well done.

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2005

Comment from DySaintDrama

Excellent

Very captivating first stanza:
"I want
to unleash
intense winds
that agitate
my soul,
let them
blow far away
and dance
into open fields." and then ends with a strong stanza. Good work. Jeff

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2005

Comment from Mrs Jones

Excellent

"I want
to unleash
intense winds
that agitate
my soul,
let them"
Pili try ...
I want to unleash
the wind
that agitates
my soul
let it
blow far away.
Sounds more poetic and less like flatulence. Lol Sorry.
Further, great as always.
Cheers
Rose

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2005