Brought Together.
Haiku 5-7-52 total reviews
Comment from rjuselius
This is a good piece of poetry! However it is not a haiku. Or a 5-7-5. The goal of a 5-7-5 entry is to write five syllables in the first line, seven syllables on second line and five syllables in the last line. Syllables, not words! Like in lion. It is one word but two syllables: li-on.
anyhoo, thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014
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This is a good piece of poetry! However it is not a haiku. Or a 5-7-5. The goal of a 5-7-5 entry is to write five syllables in the first line, seven syllables on second line and five syllables in the last line. Syllables, not words! Like in lion. It is one word but two syllables: li-on.
anyhoo, thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
Comment Written 24-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014
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ooh ok! thank you, will not make that mistake again hopefully! thanks for helping out...! im confused though... whats a haiku?
Comment from DSMalott
I was not sure of the intended theme.
Title and content seemed somewhat unmatched.
Your 5/7/5 structure was based on words per line. Haiku structure is based on syllable count per line. Your syllable count was actually 9/7/12??
Hope this is helpful and not seen as critical.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014
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I was not sure of the intended theme.
Title and content seemed somewhat unmatched.
Your 5/7/5 structure was based on words per line. Haiku structure is based on syllable count per line. Your syllable count was actually 9/7/12??
Hope this is helpful and not seen as critical.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014
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Oh no i seem to have done it the wrong way! will remember next time, hopefully! the theme was that she was brought to death, and they're together now. thanks for the help!
