My Bluebird
English Sonnet34 total reviews
Comment from kiwisteveh
Mikey, this is a beautiful and rather unusual sonnet and you would have a six if I had one left to give.
beautiful for the word choice, the slightly archaic tone and the imagery of caged bird and music which swells through the piece.
Unusual because of the subject - the caged bird is an important symbol and may well have extra metaphorical meaning, an intriguing thought.
There are echoes of ;if you lve something, set it free' and also maya Angelou's 'I know why the caged bird sings'
The ending is gorgeous and the whole thing a wonderful entry for the contest, hard to beat.
Steve
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Mikey, this is a beautiful and rather unusual sonnet and you would have a six if I had one left to give.
beautiful for the word choice, the slightly archaic tone and the imagery of caged bird and music which swells through the piece.
Unusual because of the subject - the caged bird is an important symbol and may well have extra metaphorical meaning, an intriguing thought.
There are echoes of ;if you lve something, set it free' and also maya Angelou's 'I know why the caged bird sings'
The ending is gorgeous and the whole thing a wonderful entry for the contest, hard to beat.
Steve
Comment Written 24-Sep-2014
Comment from royowen
This is an excellent entry in this contest, I think I know who it is! Beautifully written, with the right amount of seasoning to make it work! The words in the first stanza, "iron bars does not a prison make" beautifully designed and crafted work, the ababcdcdefefgg rhyming was good, + proximate, I would fix that! But all round good work, blessings, Roy.
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This is an excellent entry in this contest, I think I know who it is! Beautifully written, with the right amount of seasoning to make it work! The words in the first stanza, "iron bars does not a prison make" beautifully designed and crafted work, the ababcdcdefefgg rhyming was good, + proximate, I would fix that! But all round good work, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2014
Comment from Nosha17
A sweet lament about a bird and lost romance. You have made good use of metaphorical and descriptive language. Excellent rhyming and smooth flow. Most enjoyable and good luck in the contest. Faye
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A sweet lament about a bird and lost romance. You have made good use of metaphorical and descriptive language. Excellent rhyming and smooth flow. Most enjoyable and good luck in the contest. Faye
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Comment Written 24-Sep-2014
Comment from Keith Argyle
An excellent poem that achieves it goal and a built in story that is a little sad. The metaphor within it would be a lesson to those thinking of negative actions. The sonnet part of this poem is well determined and works very well. I would like to see more of this kind of thing. A well executed poem/sonnet. Keith. :)
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An excellent poem that achieves it goal and a built in story that is a little sad. The metaphor within it would be a lesson to those thinking of negative actions. The sonnet part of this poem is well determined and works very well. I would like to see more of this kind of thing. A well executed poem/sonnet. Keith. :)
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Comment Written 24-Sep-2014
