My Bluebird
English Sonnet34 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
The English sonnet is one of my favorite forms, and having said that, I must also say this exquisite jewel is all that it should be, in my opinion - sweet, sorrowful romance. I LOVED it!
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The English sonnet is one of my favorite forms, and having said that, I must also say this exquisite jewel is all that it should be, in my opinion - sweet, sorrowful romance. I LOVED it!
Comment Written 24-Sep-2014
Comment from RGstar
Regardless of its form, this is beautifully thought of and delivered. This poem with its double meaning and mysterious image has strength and depth with a truly lyrical aura with a rhetoric that reaches out to be heard.
Well done and a wish of good luck in the competition; a deserving finalist.
Best wishes,
RGstar
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Regardless of its form, this is beautifully thought of and delivered. This poem with its double meaning and mysterious image has strength and depth with a truly lyrical aura with a rhetoric that reaches out to be heard.
Well done and a wish of good luck in the competition; a deserving finalist.
Best wishes,
RGstar
Comment Written 24-Sep-2014
Comment from emrpoems
This is so well penned that it deserves a six but I do not have one.
holding on to tightly to love or anything for that matter can suffocate it. there must be room for breath and growth or else all may be lost. love the entire poem but this was very impressive--
My lovely bluebird's song wells up 'till spilled.
I took her freedom, but 'twas love I killed.
Wish you all the best in the contest
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This is so well penned that it deserves a six but I do not have one.
holding on to tightly to love or anything for that matter can suffocate it. there must be room for breath and growth or else all may be lost. love the entire poem but this was very impressive--
My lovely bluebird's song wells up 'till spilled.
I took her freedom, but 'twas love I killed.
Wish you all the best in the contest
Comment Written 24-Sep-2014
Comment from l.raven
Hi Michael, I don't do the sonnets...but this is soooo well written...if you cage and hold them to tight....you take away their sprite...their song...very well done you...Love it!!! Luff Linda xxoo
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Hi Michael, I don't do the sonnets...but this is soooo well written...if you cage and hold them to tight....you take away their sprite...their song...very well done you...Love it!!! Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 24-Sep-2014
Comment from LIJ Red
This is all too serious and too much work for me. You obviously took pains to adhere to form and create a
respectable sonnet. Bully for you.
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This is all too serious and too much work for me. You obviously took pains to adhere to form and create a
respectable sonnet. Bully for you.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2014
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello michaelcahill, Your sonnet is beautifully sad and poignant. I especially liked:
My world confined to harmony for now-
to see what forms before my eyes closed tight,
to open them would break the spell somehow.
(Excellent imagery)
I also liked:
My lovely bluebird's song wells up 'till spilled.
I took her freedom, but 'twas love I killed.
(Those two lines got to me. I leave my tear upon your page.)
Silky rhyming - Excellent. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
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Hello michaelcahill, Your sonnet is beautifully sad and poignant. I especially liked:
My world confined to harmony for now-
to see what forms before my eyes closed tight,
to open them would break the spell somehow.
(Excellent imagery)
I also liked:
My lovely bluebird's song wells up 'till spilled.
I took her freedom, but 'twas love I killed.
(Those two lines got to me. I leave my tear upon your page.)
Silky rhyming - Excellent. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 24-Sep-2014
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Nicely done. I like the topic of your sonnet. You expressed yourself in a great way. I like the image and the blue text. As I was reading this, I could almost 'hear' it being read. I see no changes. I know from your many wins in contests that you are an experienced writer with many formats. Good luck in the contest. I really like your poem.
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Nicely done. I like the topic of your sonnet. You expressed yourself in a great way. I like the image and the blue text. As I was reading this, I could almost 'hear' it being read. I see no changes. I know from your many wins in contests that you are an experienced writer with many formats. Good luck in the contest. I really like your poem.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2014
Comment from Karen B.
A beautifully penned sad tale of love that holds on too tight, caging both the caged and the captor. Soulful with a picture to match that mood. Very well done, Michael, best wishes in the contest.
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A beautifully penned sad tale of love that holds on too tight, caging both the caged and the captor. Soulful with a picture to match that mood. Very well done, Michael, best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2014
Comment from Linda Engel
beautiful, sad sonnet. That is what happens when you cage a free soul, wanting only that person, selfish, binding yourself in moral duty, her songs become less cheerful, much more forlorn, slowly killing the one thing you wanted most.
well written and a good contest entry
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beautiful, sad sonnet. That is what happens when you cage a free soul, wanting only that person, selfish, binding yourself in moral duty, her songs become less cheerful, much more forlorn, slowly killing the one thing you wanted most.
well written and a good contest entry
Comment Written 24-Sep-2014
Comment from Sasha
I am completely lost when it come to rules for sonnets or any style of poetry, but I should get some credit for at least reading the...all the good it did me. I like the poem whether or not it adheres to the gibbely gish rules. Beautifully written, flowed so smoothly when read aloud, and told a sad story. Excellent entry (I am sure)for this contest and I sincerely wish you all the best.
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I am completely lost when it come to rules for sonnets or any style of poetry, but I should get some credit for at least reading the...all the good it did me. I like the poem whether or not it adheres to the gibbely gish rules. Beautifully written, flowed so smoothly when read aloud, and told a sad story. Excellent entry (I am sure)for this contest and I sincerely wish you all the best.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2014
