Meeting Her
I knew there would come a day...32 total reviews
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
LoannaLois, you have told a true and harrowing story and told it very well - you have managed to say all you needed to. to make your story complete yet have not lost the easy flow which you have achieved so perfectly. You have no choice than to let it go - so sad and my heart goes out to you. Good Luck and warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014
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LoannaLois, you have told a true and harrowing story and told it very well - you have managed to say all you needed to. to make your story complete yet have not lost the easy flow which you have achieved so perfectly. You have no choice than to let it go - so sad and my heart goes out to you. Good Luck and warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 24-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014
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Blessings...I am going to be fine. I have my peace of mind now. Thanks so very much.
Comment from Nosha17
In the grand scheme of things, maybe the balance was kept. I admire your courage for writing about this and feel much sympathy for you. When one has a true relationship it is foolish to throw it all up for an inferior one, and with devastating consequences for all. Good use of rhyming and well written. Keep being positive. Faye
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014
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In the grand scheme of things, maybe the balance was kept. I admire your courage for writing about this and feel much sympathy for you. When one has a true relationship it is foolish to throw it all up for an inferior one, and with devastating consequences for all. Good use of rhyming and well written. Keep being positive. Faye
Comment Written 24-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014
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Thank you Faye. You are right...the balance gives me my peace and no regrets.
Comment from Dom G Robles
Lady, this is one of the triangle love story that is very common most husbands and wives. If this is real and not fiction, it is something that grieves your your. A lady you met after all, the love light of your husband who contracted cancer and left you and her girlfriend. I like the way you expressed your feelings. The poem with its rhyme and rhythm My sincerest congratulations. Dom
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014
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Lady, this is one of the triangle love story that is very common most husbands and wives. If this is real and not fiction, it is something that grieves your your. A lady you met after all, the love light of your husband who contracted cancer and left you and her girlfriend. I like the way you expressed your feelings. The poem with its rhyme and rhythm My sincerest congratulations. Dom
Comment Written 24-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much, Dom...I am feeling peaceful and happy, now.
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Good for you, Dom
Comment from Eric1
Hi Loanna, this is a superbly written poem about something you just had to get off your chest, this is how I deal with my grief and my woes, I put pen to paper! This woman has been very accurately described in your poem, as has you angst and your feelings, I hope dear friend that life will gradually become better and that you will get what you truly deserve, Happiness!
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014
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Hi Loanna, this is a superbly written poem about something you just had to get off your chest, this is how I deal with my grief and my woes, I put pen to paper! This woman has been very accurately described in your poem, as has you angst and your feelings, I hope dear friend that life will gradually become better and that you will get what you truly deserve, Happiness!
Comment Written 24-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014
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Bless you dear Eric. I am grateful for your kind words and understanding. ( Thank you, I am happy and at peace).
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You are very welcome Loanna, so glad to hear that things are better.
Comment from Jackarrie
Hi Loanna,
You are some woman, this poem is really heartbreaking, what you have gone through would make a person bitter, but no not you, you are a lady. Your express yourself in this poem so well, you managed to get the whole sad situation so clearly, with great rhyme and well chosen words. I commend you. A well deserved six.
I am so pleased you have put it behind you and are moving on with your life a wise woman.
Mary
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Hi Loanna,
You are some woman, this poem is really heartbreaking, what you have gone through would make a person bitter, but no not you, you are a lady. Your express yourself in this poem so well, you managed to get the whole sad situation so clearly, with great rhyme and well chosen words. I commend you. A well deserved six.
I am so pleased you have put it behind you and are moving on with your life a wise woman.
Mary
Comment Written 24-Sep-2014
Comment from Delahay
What a sad, terrible thing to happen. It sounds as if everyone lost in this situation. The one who cause all of the heartache suffered himself but left so much more behind.
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What a sad, terrible thing to happen. It sounds as if everyone lost in this situation. The one who cause all of the heartache suffered himself but left so much more behind.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2014
Comment from Spitfire
What a bitch! I'm so sorry you had to go through this. Wonderful work of characterization of the husband-stealer-snobbish, selfish, cold-hearted. I felt your courage as well as bitterness overrode by resignation. I take he went back to you for what remained of his life?
stop this hateful dance -great oxymoron.
You get my six for the day. A touching story in a poem --difficult to do.
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What a bitch! I'm so sorry you had to go through this. Wonderful work of characterization of the husband-stealer-snobbish, selfish, cold-hearted. I felt your courage as well as bitterness overrode by resignation. I take he went back to you for what remained of his life?
stop this hateful dance -great oxymoron.
You get my six for the day. A touching story in a poem --difficult to do.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
Comment from emrpoems
The use of enjambment is excellent allowing the poem to be read smoothly like a story.
Very emotional piece which seems to be personal.
time heals all wounds and it is good to know you let it go.
Good use of alliteration
Good use of abcb rhymes
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The use of enjambment is excellent allowing the poem to be read smoothly like a story.
Very emotional piece which seems to be personal.
time heals all wounds and it is good to know you let it go.
Good use of alliteration
Good use of abcb rhymes
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
Comment from ann marie mazz
hello
wow
I am sorry for all these circumstances
life has a way of being cruel
you seem to be handling this all very well
your wrote with dignity and grace
you never wrote with anger or disrespect
that is a tribute to you yourself and your writing
be proud of that
may the days ahead be kind to you and your soul
may you heal may your husband heal and fight as well
thank you for sharing your poetic talent and story
ann marie
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hello
wow
I am sorry for all these circumstances
life has a way of being cruel
you seem to be handling this all very well
your wrote with dignity and grace
you never wrote with anger or disrespect
that is a tribute to you yourself and your writing
be proud of that
may the days ahead be kind to you and your soul
may you heal may your husband heal and fight as well
thank you for sharing your poetic talent and story
ann marie
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
Comment from krys123
LoannaLois;
What an enjoyable story with in a poem that I enjoyed reading very much for it was excellently done. You achieved getting your story across Very well and what an enjoyable story it is.
One suggestion though in your last line of your third verse To make it more clear. I suggest writing something like this: "no way this made me pleasant." It has the same syllable content.
Your rhyming helped with your rhythmic flow which flowed smoothly throughout your writing is your rhyming was neither forced nor labored.
I found your imagery to be dramatically descriptive and aesthetically expressive throughout: "She left him to me at last so cold-those words she said. I simply could not feel a thing the fight me was dead." Now this is a very touching line that shows how misgiving can and would feel like.
Thank you for sharing and posting this for everyone to read and may the sun always shine on your shoulders.
Alex
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LoannaLois;
What an enjoyable story with in a poem that I enjoyed reading very much for it was excellently done. You achieved getting your story across Very well and what an enjoyable story it is.
One suggestion though in your last line of your third verse To make it more clear. I suggest writing something like this: "no way this made me pleasant." It has the same syllable content.
Your rhyming helped with your rhythmic flow which flowed smoothly throughout your writing is your rhyming was neither forced nor labored.
I found your imagery to be dramatically descriptive and aesthetically expressive throughout: "She left him to me at last so cold-those words she said. I simply could not feel a thing the fight me was dead." Now this is a very touching line that shows how misgiving can and would feel like.
Thank you for sharing and posting this for everyone to read and may the sun always shine on your shoulders.
Alex
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
