Comment from tdragonfly

Excellent

It is always sad when we lose a loved one especially when they were our lover, our soul mate. We never see the world in quite the same light. The chosen photo was perfect for your poem.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014

Thanks for reviewing.

Steve

Comment from Christine B.

Excellent

Chilling quality, Steve. No breath's wind to disturb the silent art of the cemetery meets an account of the progression. Eerily it dazzles from beneath its shroud.

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2014

Thanks, Christine.

Steve

Comment from mikemagine

Excellent

Beautiful yet very sad poem. Very descriptive and well written. You capture the passion and scenery wonderfully!

Thanks for sharing!

Mike

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2014

Thanks, Mike!

Steve

reply by mikemagine on 25-Sep-2014

Sure thing, Steve:)

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

I like how the rhyme keeps your poem flowing well. I like the descriptive words you used to write about the valley is 'misty gown'. There are more too. The few alliteration spots are good too. Congrats on the awards. Good job and good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2014

Thank you!

Steve

Comment from Tonulak

Excellent

This poem mixes wonderfully beautiful images with a quiet melancholy. It traces a life of to beloved hearts to one heart's final rest. Beautiful job and best of luck in the contest--Ted

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2014

Thanks, Ted - glad you enjoyed.

Steve

Comment from Rmocruz

Exceptional

You have poetically presented free flowing verse in ABAB solid rhyming. Beautifully penned, would make an excellent
spiritual verse one might see on a card at a wake in a funeral parlor. Colorful natural imagery is effectively employed.
Exceptional writing overall.

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2014

Thanks so much for the fine review and the six stars.

Steve

reply by Rmocruz on 25-Sep-2014

You're very welcome Steve.
Rich.

Comment from LadyCosgrove

Excellent

I love the way this poem has two separate rhythms, each one correct in it's own right. It makes an interesting read on both counts and delivers the ambience of the environment too.
LC

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2014

Thank you!

Steve

Comment from DSMalott

Exceptional

6 it is!
Very very good.
The rhyme scheme was so strong and natural even with the pithy phrases and excellent word smithing. The quatrains flowed naturally as well and the whole expression had such depth of thought and meaning.
Well deserved.

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2014

Thanks so much for the fine review and the six stars.

Steve

Comment from Leineco

Excellent

I am torn between sorrow for the final imagery and reverence for the sentimentality of the opening three stanzas.

I guess that is the dichotomy of death - it fosters both keen loss and
cherished memories.

Your poem artfully melds these two into a psalm-like moment of heartbreaking
reverie that brings a lump to one's throat.

Beautifully written.

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2014

Loss and memories it is - nothing like that to tug on the old heart-strings.

Steve

Comment from Kenneth Schaal

Excellent

I like the imagery, love the alliteration and assonance, and am sure you've got a strong entry here. I've never seen one leave your port yet that needed correction. Kenny

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2014

Kenny, thanks for the kind words.

Steve