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Life, Love, and Other Disasters

Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Spring Refrain"
A collection of poems on these themes

52 total reviews 
Comment from LIJ Red
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once again, I do not stand openmouthed before trick poetry so I judge your post by it's rhymes and it's wit and the
correct spelling, etc. Excellent.

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014
    Thank you!
Comment from acerisestory
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I know absolutely nothing about the rondeau redouble poem, but I do know what I like! This is a really nicely-written poem and has a funny message about putting off 'til tomorrow what we can do today, especially exercising and dieting!

Your meter is perfect, and your rhyming is very well done. Your use of enjambment and alliteration make for a great flow.

Seems this is a really good entry for the contest. Best of luck! Alana

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014
    Alana, thank you very much for the generous review.
reply by acerisestory on 25-Sep-2014
    You are welcome! Alana
Comment from drivenbackward
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Good stuff. It reminds me of the song from Annie: "I'll love you tomorrow." But if it's sang every day, then tomorrow never arrives. Back to exercise, the only way for people to increase their potential to get moving is to say to themselves: "The future is now."

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014
    In my case, the future is next week - yes, it really is!

    Thanks for stopping by.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
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This is such an amusing Rondeau Redouble, correct in form and s
uch a good read. The easiest things to break are good intentions. LOL. I'll exercise tomorrow' - I wanted to add 'Yes I will, Yes I will'. It bounced along so well, that I was adding little bits like that as I read. A good entry for the contest. Good Luck. By the way ha anyone told you tomorrow never comes. LOL. Warm regards Dorothy

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014
    Thanks, Dorothy. i appreciate your kind words.
Comment from James Dooney
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Hehehe indeed it is nice to think such a thing ! Its before things happen though ! Just wait for it to come ! good luck in the prompt !

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014
    Thanks, James
Comment from Eric1
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This is a wonderful entry for this particular competition my friend, it is wonderfully rhymed and has a great rhythm to it, beautifully descriptive with a lovely smooth flow, good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 25-Sep-2014
    Thanks, Eric!
reply by Eric1 on 25-Sep-2014
    You are very welcome my friend.
Comment from harmony13
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Excellent poem! The poem made the reader smile! The author's words are descriptive, clear and creative. The poem is thought provoking. And the artwork is perfect and compliments the theme of this poem.

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
    Thanks for the great review.
Comment from misscookie
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On how I can relate to your poem
Every word you said was true
I did a few excise sometime last month.
I look in the mirror and wonder why I'm always invited out to lunch.
Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
    Thank you Miss Cookie - too many lunches for me too!
reply by misscookie on 23-Sep-2014
    You are very welcome.Have a blessed day, until next time.
    cookie
Comment from mikemagine
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I relate strongly to this. Clearly seeing the importance of diet and exercise, yet knowing how tough it is to get going. I've got a belly that's probably seven inches over...

Thanks for sharing!

Mike

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
    Thanks for the great review.
reply by mikemagine on 23-Sep-2014
    You bet!
Comment from MAB
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Oh Wow this is good. I love the personification in fixation imagery of the turtle and the poem. Great alliteration and lots of creativity my friend.

Best wishes in the contest


SAM

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2014


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
    Thanks, Sam - glad you enjoyed.