Comment from sengwriter

Excellent

So cool, so calm. A night of romance so serene, the whole poem is a subtle realization and the backdrop of nature painted has naturally helped our understanding of the mood sublime.

Another new experiment - another new experience for me to read and learn ECHO poem. It really suited the picture too.

You've stated this poem is without any punctuation, then drop that stop (.) from the last but one line.

Throughly enjoyable poem and you deserve all my praises for it.

Gautam :o)

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2005

Comment from Lisloh

Excellent

Excellent.

This reverbs with the song of a soul in the depths of love.
Not only love for another, but a love for Spirit.

That's all

Thank you for creating this and sharing.
Take care & be safe
Lisloh

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2005

Comment from desb

Excellent

A great first effort.
no errors that I can see
Welcome to the echo verse
Keep writing
Des

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2005

Comment from bayley

Excellent

Yes, I love this style and I'm so glad more people are giving it a go. I'm tempted to have a go but I think I'll leave it to the experts at the moment. The echo effect adds so much to the poem. The slight change in word is also very effective.Well done ~Sean

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2005

Comment from Seancuig

Excellent

Desb has started a revolution here...LOL
This is worked very well Pili. I particularly like the last rhmye.
Our arts - very nice way to end :-)

Congrats on a great write
Sean

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2005

Comment from patsjsu

Excellent

in a night of rapture Dancing

I think the first line turned me off, in what context are you stating this? Although I loved the imagry and the subtle textures of the rest of the poem, I think the first line just doesn't really make sense. I mean I can probably guess what you mean, but never really sure because of how out-ofplace it seems. Other than that, I loved it. Hope this helps.

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2005

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

oooh this was pretty cool
so you put only one word on every other line?
and a sentence on the lines between?
gotta try this hehe

thanx for sharing :-)

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2005

Comment from AuroraSky

Excellent

Brilliant poem Pili...love the descriptions throughout this...magical.

You have written a fantastic echo poem--I knew a trend of these would start on the site...I used to write them ages ago--a lot of fun back then.

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2005

Comment from CYRANOGATOR

Excellent

The essence of a real dance between two souls. Like you are floating on air. No cares. No worries. Simply caught up in the moment. Ahh the splendor of romance between two who know it! Well done poem. I liked the thoughts and it did stimulate me to want to go dancin in the moonlight....

Wally III

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2005

Comment from Black Wren

Excellent

Trying that echo style, huh?
It seems like a great poem for a first attempt.
I think you caught the style just right.
Great job, this poem was an enjoyable read.

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2005