Comment from Permelia

Excellent

I have never read an echo poem before, but I bet in the next few days, there will be at least 4 or 5 of them appear. It is very cleverly written.

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2005

Comment from jkhudson

Excellent

Oh!!! A echo poem! This is very good, I find my whole body swaying as if this poem is music. I don't have the knowledge to judge an echo poem, only what I have read from desb, but to me it worked. Good job at this new( to me) form of poetry.

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2005

Comment from Always_Hope

Excellent

Pili! Your first try?? This better not be the last echo verse I see from you!
My goodness, woman, you've got talent. I must become a fan and NOW!
I love it. I love it. I want more of it!! :)

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2005

Comment from Jon Kuntz

Excellent

I'm something a little different here. I find people that review often times pick out something I overlooked. So I have a few suggestions, but if you don't like you won't use naturally.

and our two shadows moving slow
glow
of love inspired in our gazes tonight
light
of romantic dreams divine we fing grace
embrace

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2005

Comment from Sallyo

Excellent

I'm not sure if that last line is "correct" but since I know very little about this form it gets the benefit of the doubt. It's amazing how stylish these are; I liked the dance theme in this, because dancing with a partner is lead/follow, which really suits the echo format.

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2005

Comment from fly4hi

Excellent

Beautiful echo poem, Pili. I love the
artwork and your poem fits perfectly.
I guess he did start something didn't
he. Nicely done. fly

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2005

Comment from Srinivasan

Excellent

I admire the technical excellece of the poem which cannot be easily mastered and applied.

The poem has got a beautiful subject which is romantic in aspect and the echo is presented without any flaw.

I've a problem with the last line. Do you really need "our?"

"the essence of our souls our hearts
Our arts"

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2005

Comment from Anti-Theist

Good

This was certainly something different. I can't say that it had the desired effect on me, as my mind just couldn't cope with the echoes. It read very nice when I left the echoes out. Nevertheless I admire you greatly for taking the risk and experimenting by flexing your poetic muscles.

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 Comment Written 09-Sep-2005

Comment from amaranthblue

Excellent

I loved this echo poem... I have never heard of that before... At fist I thought it sounded like a love song before I read the notes... It really held such a hauntingly beautiful quality my friend...

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2005

Comment from lerkun

Excellent

hello pili, This is very clever...it does detract from the imagery but am so glad to see something different that I am full of praise....great stuff...lerk

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2005