Silence
Naani90 total reviews
Comment from Kenneth Schaal
Hm. He definitely needs a haircut, and judging by, what appear to be jeans and white sneakers, his clothing, he must be a young man. And probably broke. Best of luck. Kenny
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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Hm. He definitely needs a haircut, and judging by, what appear to be jeans and white sneakers, his clothing, he must be a young man. And probably broke. Best of luck. Kenny
Comment Written 19-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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You can tell more than I can from the back view!
Thanks for the review.
Steve
Comment from kwyattman
The Naani usually seems to lean more toward broken sentence structure in separate lines and more complex words. Usually because you are trying to convey a lot in a little space. This flowing complete sentence, however, captures the situation and emotion so well that it has the power to move us to compassion and action when we might "pass by" without notice. Good job.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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The Naani usually seems to lean more toward broken sentence structure in separate lines and more complex words. Usually because you are trying to convey a lot in a little space. This flowing complete sentence, however, captures the situation and emotion so well that it has the power to move us to compassion and action when we might "pass by" without notice. Good job.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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Thanks for the thoughtful review.
Steve
Comment from mikemagine
So very much said in very few words. These people need LOTS of prayer! So very few try to help them...We need to pray and see what God wants us to do for them.
Thank you for sharing!
Mike
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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So very much said in very few words. These people need LOTS of prayer! So very few try to help them...We need to pray and see what God wants us to do for them.
Thank you for sharing!
Mike
Comment Written 19-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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Thanks, Mike!
Steve
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Gladly, Steve!! Peace:)
Mike
Comment from lynglyng
This poem is very well written. The story is told with good decriptive words. The picture is a perfect match and you had goid rhyme and flow throughout the poem.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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This poem is very well written. The story is told with good decriptive words. The picture is a perfect match and you had goid rhyme and flow throughout the poem.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from gypsymoth
Excellent! The reader can feel his desperation for a friend.
Great job. The picture perfectly compliments your words.
Good Luck Gypsymoth
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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Excellent! The reader can feel his desperation for a friend.
Great job. The picture perfectly compliments your words.
Good Luck Gypsymoth
Comment Written 19-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from rjuselius
"The silent man who sits
alone on a faded park bench
smiles a desperate plea
at all who pass by"
loneliness can be a desperate cry for company. it's hard to survive alone, without friends or family. you can go out of your mind of left alone for too many days.
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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"The silent man who sits
alone on a faded park bench
smiles a desperate plea
at all who pass by"
loneliness can be a desperate cry for company. it's hard to survive alone, without friends or family. you can go out of your mind of left alone for too many days.
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!
rebekka x
Comment Written 19-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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Thanks, Rebekka!
Steve
Comment from Pyrrho
Except for a snapshot of a poor soul, I find nothing here but words, however, I guess the motivation for such a creaton can come from withing when in a weird mood.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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Except for a snapshot of a poor soul, I find nothing here but words, however, I guess the motivation for such a creaton can come from withing when in a weird mood.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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Thanks for reviewing.
Sorry you couldn't find anything meaningful here on this occasion.
Steve
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi Steve,
Love the photo with this naani. It really helps to make your poem pack a wallop.
He can be be a lonely man, one contemplating suicide, or getting over love gone wrong. The back of him sitting on a park bench with your words just draws the reader in.
Of course, he could be Dracula waiting to pounce as well!
Great presentation and entry. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*<*)
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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Hi Steve,
Love the photo with this naani. It really helps to make your poem pack a wallop.
He can be be a lonely man, one contemplating suicide, or getting over love gone wrong. The back of him sitting on a park bench with your words just draws the reader in.
Of course, he could be Dracula waiting to pounce as well!
Great presentation and entry. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*<*)
Comment Written 19-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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Thanks, Jax.
I deliberately left out any hint of a back-story so the reader could bring their own interpretation to this.
Steve
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent naani poem, kiwisteveh, you did an excellent job creating the emotion that the naani poem is supposed to produce when read. I love the picture. I give you my last six of the week
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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this is an excellent naani poem, kiwisteveh, you did an excellent job creating the emotion that the naani poem is supposed to produce when read. I love the picture. I give you my last six of the week
Comment Written 19-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much for reviewing and for the lst precious six - I appreciate it.
Steve
Comment from linsbm
In the quest of conquering our emotion, whatever it is, we just resort to silence, calm ourselves and smile. Just what this poem is all about. Good gesture.
Well written, Naani -{ exactly 25 syllables (max.count) and format}. Thanks for sharing.
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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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In the quest of conquering our emotion, whatever it is, we just resort to silence, calm ourselves and smile. Just what this poem is all about. Good gesture.
Well written, Naani -{ exactly 25 syllables (max.count) and format}. Thanks for sharing.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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Thank you!
Steve
