Silence
Naani90 total reviews
Comment from GracieAnn
Steve, this is a simple, yet precisioned write that conveys a universal plea, as it were, to ease and solve the pervading issue of loneliness. It is structurally a perfect
Naani Poetry contest entry. Well done with effective picture. All the best in the contest. :0 GracieAnn
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Steve, this is a simple, yet precisioned write that conveys a universal plea, as it were, to ease and solve the pervading issue of loneliness. It is structurally a perfect
Naani Poetry contest entry. Well done with effective picture. All the best in the contest. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 19-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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Thanks for the generous review.
Steve
Comment from Louise Michelle
I like how you use the word silent. That poor man on the bench is asking for help without saying the words. The people who pass by in silence just ignore his plight. Well done. Hugs, Lou
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I like how you use the word silent. That poor man on the bench is asking for help without saying the words. The people who pass by in silence just ignore his plight. Well done. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 19-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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Thanks, Lou.
Steve
Comment from ravenblack
This says so much about silence- the silence of those who walk on by; the silence of his story, the noise in his head that he can only communicate in a silent smile, a desperate plea.
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This says so much about silence- the silence of those who walk on by; the silence of his story, the noise in his head that he can only communicate in a silent smile, a desperate plea.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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Thanks, rb.
Funny how a single word can evoke all sorts of emotions.
Steve
Comment from c_lucas
Sometimes a silent person is one seeking company, but doesn't know how to go about it, This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
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Sometimes a silent person is one seeking company, but doesn't know how to go about it, This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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Thanks, Charlie.
Steve
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You're welcome, Steve. Charlie
Comment from acerisestory
A sad and well-written naani, kiwisteveh. I can imagine a lonely man wanting some human interaction, hoping someone will, perhaps, just say hello.
You've made very good use of alliteration with silent, sits and smiles. Your accompanying artwork (in black and white) enhances your words very nicely.
This is a strong entry for the contest, I believe. Good luck! Alana
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A sad and well-written naani, kiwisteveh. I can imagine a lonely man wanting some human interaction, hoping someone will, perhaps, just say hello.
You've made very good use of alliteration with silent, sits and smiles. Your accompanying artwork (in black and white) enhances your words very nicely.
This is a strong entry for the contest, I believe. Good luck! Alana
Comment Written 19-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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Thanks, Alana - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
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You are welcome! Alana
Comment from patcelaw
I can see this man sitting ever so silent, maybe deaf, maybe mute because of physical problems, whatever the cause, he still has the ability to make someone's day with a smile.
Good writing and the best to you in the contest.
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I can see this man sitting ever so silent, maybe deaf, maybe mute because of physical problems, whatever the cause, he still has the ability to make someone's day with a smile.
Good writing and the best to you in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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Thank you.
I deliberately wanted to leave the back-story very open so that the reader could bring his/her own interpretation to the piece.
Steve
Comment from Dawny53
I thought this entry deserved a five star rating because it is such an interesting little piece.. has a sort of mystery appeal to it, and I love the photo. It leaves the reader wondering what his smile of desperate plea is all about
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I thought this entry deserved a five star rating because it is such an interesting little piece.. has a sort of mystery appeal to it, and I love the photo. It leaves the reader wondering what his smile of desperate plea is all about
Comment Written 19-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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Thank you.
I deliberately wanted to leave the back-story very open so that the reader could bring his/her own interpretation to the piece.
Steve
Comment from livelylinda
kiwisteveh: this got my attention. Why is he sitting there and why is he desperate. Is he contemplating suicide or possibly murder? Has he been recently told that he is dying of some disease? Has he lost his true love and is stuck in a void? What are his feelings: fear, anger, sadness, loneliness? Is he a serial killer who knows it is wrong but can't resist the urge and has to keep killing? The message is 'help me' and this is a creative, fresh theme for the contest of which you are a contender. livelylinda
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kiwisteveh: this got my attention. Why is he sitting there and why is he desperate. Is he contemplating suicide or possibly murder? Has he been recently told that he is dying of some disease? Has he lost his true love and is stuck in a void? What are his feelings: fear, anger, sadness, loneliness? Is he a serial killer who knows it is wrong but can't resist the urge and has to keep killing? The message is 'help me' and this is a creative, fresh theme for the contest of which you are a contender. livelylinda
Comment Written 19-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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Thank you, Linda
I deliberately wanted to leave the back-story very open so that the reader could bring his/her own interpretation to the piece.
Steve
Comment from Adri7enne
I would rather be sitting on that park bench, totally at peace, accepting what is, living in the moment. But there are many interpretations of silence. Some people equate it with loneliness. Well done, Steve. Good luck in the contest.
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I would rather be sitting on that park bench, totally at peace, accepting what is, living in the moment. But there are many interpretations of silence. Some people equate it with loneliness. Well done, Steve. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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Thank you.
I deliberately wanted to leave the back-story very open so that the reader could bring his/her own interpretation to the piece.
Steve
Comment from mauial
Is his silent plea, "please stop and sit with me and we'll be silent together, or is his plea that they sit and talk with him? That is the unanswered question.
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Is his silent plea, "please stop and sit with me and we'll be silent together, or is his plea that they sit and talk with him? That is the unanswered question.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014
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Thank you.
I deliberately wanted to leave the back-story very open so that the reader could bring his/her own interpretation to the piece.
Steve
