Those Who Watch and Wait
ABAB Poetry Contest59 total reviews
Comment from lalajovanoski
Very nicely written poem. I enjoyed reading it.
Well composed,all the stanzas blended
just the syllable count at times was not even to me.
Best of luck in the contest
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Very nicely written poem. I enjoyed reading it.
Well composed,all the stanzas blended
just the syllable count at times was not even to me.
Best of luck in the contest
Comment Written 21-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Thank you very much for your review, lalajovanoski. I appreciate your comment about the syllable count. The poem is written in iambic heptameter, a form much favoured by 16th century English poets. Which line(s) are you referring to? I have re-checked, and as far as I can see, each line has the required fourteen syllables.
Comment from Christine B.
So much truth in such a lovely array of words and astute parting thought. There is a taste of atmosphere holding unrelieved, enveloping grief. Hope is possibly the most cleansing feature one can strive to maintain; without hope, I do believe we perish alongside power.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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So much truth in such a lovely array of words and astute parting thought. There is a taste of atmosphere holding unrelieved, enveloping grief. Hope is possibly the most cleansing feature one can strive to maintain; without hope, I do believe we perish alongside power.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Many thanks for your very kind review, Christine.
Comment from Drew Delaney
Beautifully written, theresa. The rhyme is excellent, the cadence and rhythm smooth and not forced, and the verse, beautiful. What more can one ask of a poem? Brilliant in my books.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Beautifully written, theresa. The rhyme is excellent, the cadence and rhythm smooth and not forced, and the verse, beautiful. What more can one ask of a poem? Brilliant in my books.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Many thanks for your very kind review, Drew.
Comment from onebrit
This is such a powerful poem. My interest was caught by the first line and it just kept going from there. You can feel the despair and the grief for the ones who are lost....so well written
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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This is such a powerful poem. My interest was caught by the first line and it just kept going from there. You can feel the despair and the grief for the ones who are lost....so well written
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Many thanks for your very kind review, onebrit.
Comment from RGstar
A descriptive write, Tony.
Its amazing what one can do with the skyline or waterline where objects take form.
I remember another poem from you from a similar perspective. I enjoy these as it is good to see if one also see what you see.
Good delivery.
Best wishes,
RG
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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A descriptive write, Tony.
Its amazing what one can do with the skyline or waterline where objects take form.
I remember another poem from you from a similar perspective. I enjoy these as it is good to see if one also see what you see.
Good delivery.
Best wishes,
RG
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Many thanks for your very kind review, RG.
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Well written, hope and faith for loved ones to come home. I like the mother and child stand alone with dreams. Hope that carries us and faith for those we love. Congrats!
flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2014
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Well written, hope and faith for loved ones to come home. I like the mother and child stand alone with dreams. Hope that carries us and faith for those we love. Congrats!
flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much, flylikeaneagle, for this encouraging review and your gift of stars.
Comment from royowen
I've seen those rocks Tony, I frequently spend tim with a friend at Middlto beach, and they're not far away! Beautifully worded poem, articulate and absorbing, well designed and composed, nice fluid passage, good abab rhyming, even mete! Well done blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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I've seen those rocks Tony, I frequently spend tim with a friend at Middlto beach, and they're not far away! Beautifully worded poem, articulate and absorbing, well designed and composed, nice fluid passage, good abab rhyming, even mete! Well done blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Thanks, Roy! I've always been struck by them. It's a favourite walk of mine at any time of the year.
Comment from strandregs
If we keep faith with those we love, though they be far away,
I was thinking far away is not only physical distance but also mental distance of angst and anger and mistrust between couples and parents and children.
Paranoya as well and the medication
And the love and hope is what might bring back loved ones.Z.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2014
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If we keep faith with those we love, though they be far away,
I was thinking far away is not only physical distance but also mental distance of angst and anger and mistrust between couples and parents and children.
Paranoya as well and the medication
And the love and hope is what might bring back loved ones.Z.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much, strandregs , for this encouraging review and your gift of stars.
Comment from Eric1
Hi Tony, what a wonderfully constructed poem you have created for this ABAB competition, so full of imagery and description, i could almost hear the waves lapping at the shore, this beautifully rhyming poem is the best I have reviewed all week my friend, it is also the one I have been saving my last six for, Excellent!
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2014
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Hi Tony, what a wonderfully constructed poem you have created for this ABAB competition, so full of imagery and description, i could almost hear the waves lapping at the shore, this beautifully rhyming poem is the best I have reviewed all week my friend, it is also the one I have been saving my last six for, Excellent!
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much, Eric , for this encouraging review and your gift of stars.
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You are very welcome Tony, have a lovely weekend.
Comment from Dean Kuch
A wonderfully written, powerfully uplifting and positive message you have conveyed in perfect ABAB rhyme, Tony. A seafaring adventure, with carefully chosen, eloquent wording to showcase the powers of hope, and the allure of dreams.
Wonderfully composed, and beautifully presented.
You should do extremely well in the contest.
Good luck!
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2014
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A wonderfully written, powerfully uplifting and positive message you have conveyed in perfect ABAB rhyme, Tony. A seafaring adventure, with carefully chosen, eloquent wording to showcase the powers of hope, and the allure of dreams.
Wonderfully composed, and beautifully presented.
You should do extremely well in the contest.
Good luck!
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much, Dean , for this encouraging review and your gift of stars.
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Sure. Anytime, 'T'...
