If Joy Were Measured by the Smile
a poem in rhyming couplets140 total reviews
Comment from Lulube
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So many descriptive verses that create great imagery for the reader. Fun to read and great rhyming
I love the last two lines
]If joy is measured by the smile
this task will take a long, long while.
Good to ponder over. Yes a long time.
lulube
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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and a
SOMO
So many descriptive verses that create great imagery for the reader. Fun to read and great rhyming
I love the last two lines
]If joy is measured by the smile
this task will take a long, long while.
Good to ponder over. Yes a long time.
lulube
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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thanks so much, lulube :-) Brooke
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welcome
lulube
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Aah, so sweet and delightfully perfect for the book of children's verse. I can see myself reading this one to a little child like Sawyer. Very pleasant reading, Giddy
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Aah, so sweet and delightfully perfect for the book of children's verse. I can see myself reading this one to a little child like Sawyer. Very pleasant reading, Giddy
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much, Giddy :-) Brooke
Comment from Trybuck
No six to give for the smile
So please, enjoy this five
It's given in my own style
Call it Buck-a-roo jive
Enough for now... Enjoyed your joy measured by smiles, Buck
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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No six to give for the smile
So please, enjoy this five
It's given in my own style
Call it Buck-a-roo jive
Enough for now... Enjoyed your joy measured by smiles, Buck
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Buck, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Spitfire
This is why watching children at play is such a delight. They get pleasure out of things we take for granted. A wealth of details to show not tell. My favorite line:
sun as bright as lemon jello,
I love the picture. Is there anyway to stop Sawyer from growing up?
Shari
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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This is why watching children at play is such a delight. They get pleasure out of things we take for granted. A wealth of details to show not tell. My favorite line:
sun as bright as lemon jello,
I love the picture. Is there anyway to stop Sawyer from growing up?
Shari
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Spitfire, if you find anyone selling a potion that would do that, send the info on to me :-) Thanks so much, my friend. Brooke
Comment from GeraldS
This is excellent as usual. And it makes the reader smile when reading it. It is definitely a 'feel good' piece. And the artwork with Sawyer's smiles is a perfect accompaniment.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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This is excellent as usual. And it makes the reader smile when reading it. It is definitely a 'feel good' piece. And the artwork with Sawyer's smiles is a perfect accompaniment.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Gerald, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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sorry, I forgot to mention that I appreciate your generous rating :-)
Comment from Aussie
Did you know that it takes more muscles to frown than it does to smile? Children are smiling more these days than adults - children don't fuss and bother over the state of the world, we do. Best stanza - Drums that beat and birds that sing, waves that roar and bells that ring (loved it)trucks that line the toy store aisle, placed on shelves to make me smile." Maybe we would smile more if we had some toys instead of wars?
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Did you know that it takes more muscles to frown than it does to smile? Children are smiling more these days than adults - children don't fuss and bother over the state of the world, we do. Best stanza - Drums that beat and birds that sing, waves that roar and bells that ring (loved it)trucks that line the toy store aisle, placed on shelves to make me smile." Maybe we would smile more if we had some toys instead of wars?
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much, Kay - yep, Sawyer is at that blissful age when the only battles he knows about involve who gets to control trampoline time at My Gym LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from jaeladarling
Such a sweet poem! And I love the cute pics! :) :) "sun as bright as lemon jello," Mmm...jello. LOL Very nice, and I needed a "smiley" poem after a long day at work. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Such a sweet poem! And I love the cute pics! :) :) "sun as bright as lemon jello," Mmm...jello. LOL Very nice, and I needed a "smiley" poem after a long day at work. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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jaeladarling, thanks for the laugh and the review :-) Brooke
Comment from LIJ Red
A british friend, long gone, said the largest number you can express with three digits is "nine to the ninth to the ninth." The burst of couplets is rhyming, vivid and young at heart. Excellent.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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A british friend, long gone, said the largest number you can express with three digits is "nine to the ninth to the ninth." The burst of couplets is rhyming, vivid and young at heart. Excellent.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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LIJ, thank you - I will take the Brit's word for it as calculating numbers tends to make me queasy :-) Brooke
Comment from MizKat
Hi Brooke,
Another wonderfully written poem. Oh, and the pictures of Sawyer are darling. He is a little doll for sure. I haven't seen little Dylan for ages and now he went to Wisc. with his grandma and grandpa. I really need to write more poems about him.
Kat
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Hi Brooke,
Another wonderfully written poem. Oh, and the pictures of Sawyer are darling. He is a little doll for sure. I haven't seen little Dylan for ages and now he went to Wisc. with his grandma and grandpa. I really need to write more poems about him.
Kat
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Kat, thank you so much :-) It is hard to miss them, isn't it? Brooke
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Yes, and I think their vacation will be a week long.
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Brooke: I think that Sawyer's world is expanding with all the sights, sounds and shopping trips. So many things to do and see with family. Joy is a terrific feeling and a smile can brighten your day. Awesome visuals of the world of a child. We should all be childlike. Are you going to publish this story as a children's book? I like the colors, sounds, and items a child can touch. Well written.
flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Brooke: I think that Sawyer's world is expanding with all the sights, sounds and shopping trips. So many things to do and see with family. Joy is a terrific feeling and a smile can brighten your day. Awesome visuals of the world of a child. We should all be childlike. Are you going to publish this story as a children's book? I like the colors, sounds, and items a child can touch. Well written.
flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much, flylikeaneagle, for your thoughtful comments and encouragement. Working on publishing is a task I need to tackle. Brooke :-)
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Brooke: Maybe, FanStory has connections with artists and publishers to have a collection of children story books and poetry to be published and sold for real. This can be in the hands of children at librarys and laps of families reading stories. I love to read your poetry!
flylikeaneagle
