If Joy Were Measured by the Smile
a poem in rhyming couplets140 total reviews
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
Well, you certainly upped my smile count. I loved the thoughts and pictures that popped into my head as I read this - in particular, the stanza with kittens, green grass, red roses and kitten noses which are wonderful, no matter the color. It reminded me that, sometimes, when I am finding it hard to find joy anywhere, I just need to sit still, open my eyes and look around. Thank you for this simple but simply delightful poem. - Wendy
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Well, you certainly upped my smile count. I loved the thoughts and pictures that popped into my head as I read this - in particular, the stanza with kittens, green grass, red roses and kitten noses which are wonderful, no matter the color. It reminded me that, sometimes, when I am finding it hard to find joy anywhere, I just need to sit still, open my eyes and look around. Thank you for this simple but simply delightful poem. - Wendy
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Wendy, thank you so much for your gracious comments and generous six stars :-) Brooke
Comment from sibhus
This is so cute. I loved the sounds of the rhymes, they are so bright and happy, ticking off all the wonders that a child beholds. Oh, only if we could capture that once again. This is some really good stuff there, Brooke.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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This is so cute. I loved the sounds of the rhymes, they are so bright and happy, ticking off all the wonders that a child beholds. Oh, only if we could capture that once again. This is some really good stuff there, Brooke.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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sibhus, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from fastdigits
Ah, you place your words of wisdom under
the category of children's poems, yet it is
really a lesson in life, the power of a simple
smile, the joys it brings, the inner feelings
of warmth that change the entire day; if only
the world took time to stop and smile.
Your rhyming words on the power of a simple
smile belong in a book of knowledge for
all to read.
Well done
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Ah, you place your words of wisdom under
the category of children's poems, yet it is
really a lesson in life, the power of a simple
smile, the joys it brings, the inner feelings
of warmth that change the entire day; if only
the world took time to stop and smile.
Your rhyming words on the power of a simple
smile belong in a book of knowledge for
all to read.
Well done
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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fastdigits, thank you so very much for your generous six stars and your warm comments :-) Brooke
Comment from Fridayauthor
This beautiful little poem is a delight! The pictures with it are marvelous as well.
The poem reads so easily and the choice of words paint a great visual.
Thank you for this great posting!
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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This beautiful little poem is a delight! The pictures with it are marvelous as well.
The poem reads so easily and the choice of words paint a great visual.
Thank you for this great posting!
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Fridayauthor, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from krys123
Brooke;
what a most delightful reading which I enjoyed reading this so much for its rhythmic tempo and meter made it not only easier to read but so much fun.
The rhyming being neither force nor labored helped with the rhythmic flow.
The mastery of your writing is shown in your imagery which is so well described and expressed in lines like these: "Drums that beat and birds that sing, waves that roar and bells that ring, trucks that line the toy store aisle, placed on shelves to make me smile." When my wife worked for a toy store in Carmel California, I noticed the children in the aisles smiling at all the toys and that would make my wife so happy including myself. So much written richness in these lines that it can be plainly seen in one's vision.
Thank you for sharing and posting this Brooke and may the sun always shine on your shoulders.
Alex
PS: I want this thank you again for having taught me much about my grammar for I really believe that you are an excellent teacher for the short while we had together.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Brooke;
what a most delightful reading which I enjoyed reading this so much for its rhythmic tempo and meter made it not only easier to read but so much fun.
The rhyming being neither force nor labored helped with the rhythmic flow.
The mastery of your writing is shown in your imagery which is so well described and expressed in lines like these: "Drums that beat and birds that sing, waves that roar and bells that ring, trucks that line the toy store aisle, placed on shelves to make me smile." When my wife worked for a toy store in Carmel California, I noticed the children in the aisles smiling at all the toys and that would make my wife so happy including myself. So much written richness in these lines that it can be plainly seen in one's vision.
Thank you for sharing and posting this Brooke and may the sun always shine on your shoulders.
Alex
PS: I want this thank you again for having taught me much about my grammar for I really believe that you are an excellent teacher for the short while we had together.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much, Alex, for your thoughtful reading of this poem and your thoughtful appreciation for our class :-) Brooke
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You are entirely and sincerely welcome Brooke.
Alex
Comment from Goodauthor
This is so true and so well said. The flow is smooth and the message is clear. All we are ever told is: One, A smile is just a frown turned upside down; and two, it more facial muscles to frown than to smile. This however, does not change the face that some of us like STs Spock, were taught to suppress their emotions, but that's not the way I was taught. Good write.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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This is so true and so well said. The flow is smooth and the message is clear. All we are ever told is: One, A smile is just a frown turned upside down; and two, it more facial muscles to frown than to smile. This however, does not change the face that some of us like STs Spock, were taught to suppress their emotions, but that's not the way I was taught. Good write.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Goodauthor, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Bina1
The joys of childhood are measured in smiles, and he has a whole load of them to share! What a delightful poem, and picture to accent your work!
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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The joys of childhood are measured in smiles, and he has a whole load of them to share! What a delightful poem, and picture to accent your work!
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Thank you, Bina, for your gracious review :-) Brooke
Comment from Dom G Robles
I love this poem. Its rhyme and rhythm (of 8 stresses) are perfect. If you read it aloud it is magically musical.
The images are varied. And the pictures of the kids equally are beautiful competing the lines presented. If I had the six, I would rate this 6, but I ran out of it. Thanks for sharing, Dom. The rhyming scheme, AAAA.... is perfect. Is this what we call octameter?
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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I love this poem. Its rhyme and rhythm (of 8 stresses) are perfect. If you read it aloud it is magically musical.
The images are varied. And the pictures of the kids equally are beautiful competing the lines presented. If I had the six, I would rate this 6, but I ran out of it. Thanks for sharing, Dom. The rhyming scheme, AAAA.... is perfect. Is this what we call octameter?
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much, Dom. The rhyme scheme of the octogram is aBabccbB ababddbB, and the syllable count is 8/4/8/4/8/8/8/4 in both octets :-) Brooke
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Thank you for the info. Dom
Comment from Gargantuan2
Very nice, and this time my nephew was here to see the poem as well. He agrees with me that this writing is one of the better reads he's had today. :)
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Very nice, and this time my nephew was here to see the poem as well. He agrees with me that this writing is one of the better reads he's had today. :)
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Gargantuan, thank you so much :-) Please thank your nephew too. Brooke
Comment from smudge
A beautiful poem. I wish I had six to award. A natural flowing poem of a true poet. The rhythm rhyme and alliteration is perfect. Absolutely lovely.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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A beautiful poem. I wish I had six to award. A natural flowing poem of a true poet. The rhythm rhyme and alliteration is perfect. Absolutely lovely.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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smudge, thank you so much :-) Brooke
