Contagious Human Suffering
Suffering usually includes an avalanch of people.145 total reviews
Comment from G.B. Smith
Your free style poem reeks of disaster and brutality at home. I hope this is not you, if so get out. Your poem hits on a lot of issues due to abusive behavior. I made me sad to read because it was so strong. Best wishes in the contest
Bear
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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Your free style poem reeks of disaster and brutality at home. I hope this is not you, if so get out. Your poem hits on a lot of issues due to abusive behavior. I made me sad to read because it was so strong. Best wishes in the contest
Bear
Comment Written 17-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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No, it's not me. Just responding to the contest prompt. Thanks for reading.
Comment from Carole Rosa
To the author of Human Suffering. This is an amazing piece of work. I'm sure that you are the winner of this contest! You have written the very most touching prose within a poem. Suffering is everywhere, whether it is verbal abuse, loneliness, beatings or illness. This is such a thoughtful and provoking piece. Thank you for sharing these concerns with all of us on FanStory. Carole
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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To the author of Human Suffering. This is an amazing piece of work. I'm sure that you are the winner of this contest! You have written the very most touching prose within a poem. Suffering is everywhere, whether it is verbal abuse, loneliness, beatings or illness. This is such a thoughtful and provoking piece. Thank you for sharing these concerns with all of us on FanStory. Carole
Comment Written 17-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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Thank you for reading and deeming this poem six star worthy.
Comment from GeorgieBoy
There is such a powerful message in this free style poem. It flows well. I like the end line in each stanza. Everyone suffers, both parties suffer, etc. It brings the poem full circle.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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There is such a powerful message in this free style poem. It flows well. I like the end line in each stanza. Everyone suffers, both parties suffer, etc. It brings the poem full circle.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much for reading and for the six stars.
Comment from GracieAnn
This Free-style poem: human suffering writing prompt entry accomplishes the mission of the prompt with good examples of scenarios of suffering. The conclusion is fitting and powerful. Well done. All the best in the contest. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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This Free-style poem: human suffering writing prompt entry accomplishes the mission of the prompt with good examples of scenarios of suffering. The conclusion is fitting and powerful. Well done. All the best in the contest. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 17-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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Thank you for reading.
Comment from c_lucas
Most of the time, the abuser is known by the abused. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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Most of the time, the abuser is known by the abused. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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Thank you for reading.
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You're welcome
Comment from pbroussard209
This was great and so true, I preach this often to my children. It only takes one act, good or bad to start a chain reaction.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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This was great and so true, I preach this often to my children. It only takes one act, good or bad to start a chain reaction.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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Thank you for reading.
Comment from Genya
This was an amazing piece of work with such a powerful message, I visualised every word, every sentence, every stanza. Every word belonged there telling about the suffering people endure and the domino effect. From a football team, a wife beater, an I curable illness to someone who drinks too much. You brought each story into the front of our thinking and told of the human suffering. A well deserved six. Thank you for sharing. Genya
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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This was an amazing piece of work with such a powerful message, I visualised every word, every sentence, every stanza. Every word belonged there telling about the suffering people endure and the domino effect. From a football team, a wife beater, an I curable illness to someone who drinks too much. You brought each story into the front of our thinking and told of the human suffering. A well deserved six. Thank you for sharing. Genya
Comment Written 17-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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Thank you for reading.
Comment from Linda England Bonam
You did an excellent job of writing about human suffering. Each and every stanza holds the truth about this.
I was amazed how many you came up with!
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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You did an excellent job of writing about human suffering. Each and every stanza holds the truth about this.
I was amazed how many you came up with!
Comment Written 17-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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Thanks for reading. There were more scenarios but I had to cut it short.
Comment from TKField
I once knew a guy who drank anti freeze. Not to kill himself, just to winterize. badump!
Yeah to be human is to suffer, that's what flesh is heir to. No disputing that. This sure ain't the feel good poem of the year, or even the day, but your litany of woe gets the job doe, well enough, I don't think that humans are suffering any more or less than they ever have. I swear, I would take out that Biblical reference at the end. Your suffering will end when your dead and not a second before. In my opinion, it mars and uplifts an otherwise excellent, bummer poem.
Man, I started suffering the minute I looked at that chick with the broken nose.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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I once knew a guy who drank anti freeze. Not to kill himself, just to winterize. badump!
Yeah to be human is to suffer, that's what flesh is heir to. No disputing that. This sure ain't the feel good poem of the year, or even the day, but your litany of woe gets the job doe, well enough, I don't think that humans are suffering any more or less than they ever have. I swear, I would take out that Biblical reference at the end. Your suffering will end when your dead and not a second before. In my opinion, it mars and uplifts an otherwise excellent, bummer poem.
Man, I started suffering the minute I looked at that chick with the broken nose.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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Thanks for reading.
Comment from mikemagine
Some say suffering is a good thing. Hmmm. "What doesn't kill you makes you stronger." I don't fully agree. A drunk continually getting hammered keeps getting hammered. I don't see him necessarily getting stronger. Suffering IS. To me, it's just there. I'm not saying there is no justice. There is. I've seen it many times in my life. The old saying "The wheels of Justice turn slowly..."
Very well-written this. Very clear. I can relate to it very well.
Thanks!
Mike
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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Some say suffering is a good thing. Hmmm. "What doesn't kill you makes you stronger." I don't fully agree. A drunk continually getting hammered keeps getting hammered. I don't see him necessarily getting stronger. Suffering IS. To me, it's just there. I'm not saying there is no justice. There is. I've seen it many times in my life. The old saying "The wheels of Justice turn slowly..."
Very well-written this. Very clear. I can relate to it very well.
Thanks!
Mike
Comment Written 17-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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Thanks for reading.
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Sure thing!
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Yep.
