Contagious Human Suffering
Suffering usually includes an avalanch of people.145 total reviews
Comment from Delahay
This is such a stark, and so true, condemnation of what humans are far too capable of doing to each other and themselves. We create so much suffering in so many ways.
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This is such a stark, and so true, condemnation of what humans are far too capable of doing to each other and themselves. We create so much suffering in so many ways.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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Thank you for reading.
Comment from RGstar
So many reSons, so many heartaches, and it never seems to stop.
A curse on the human race woven by its own hands.
Formidable image and realistic approach to a human disease.
Best wishes,
RGstar
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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So many reSons, so many heartaches, and it never seems to stop.
A curse on the human race woven by its own hands.
Formidable image and realistic approach to a human disease.
Best wishes,
RGstar
Comment Written 17-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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Thank you for reading.
Comment from ronnie k
Wonderful entry, it shows that every hurt does not accompany pain, one may take being hurt from so many directions, every hurt has the same pain.
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Wonderful entry, it shows that every hurt does not accompany pain, one may take being hurt from so many directions, every hurt has the same pain.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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Thank you for reading.
Comment from Carlylrkn5
I think that the subject of this poem is a very important one, and I also think you expressed it quite well. However, I would suggest maybe just a few minor structure changes in the first three lines. perhaps something like
"we don't want to sit and listen
but they need to tell us;
both parties suffer"
overall I think you wrote a great poem! thanks for sharing!
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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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I think that the subject of this poem is a very important one, and I also think you expressed it quite well. However, I would suggest maybe just a few minor structure changes in the first three lines. perhaps something like
"we don't want to sit and listen
but they need to tell us;
both parties suffer"
overall I think you wrote a great poem! thanks for sharing!
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Comment Written 17-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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Carlylrkn5: I wonder if you have read this site's policy on rating someones work. A three means that the piece needs many serious changes to be decent; a rewrite. My first two lines have nothing wrong with them, just might not be how you would write them and the poem does not need a rewrite. You must be new around here. Please read the policies and act accordingly.
Comment from James Dooney
You are so right here on this. We need to allow this people to have the time to have their stories aired. We need to give them that chance.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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You are so right here on this. We need to allow this people to have the time to have their stories aired. We need to give them that chance.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2014
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Thanks for reading.
Comment from nomi338
Human suffering hurts the God who created humans to be perfect and happy individuals the most. A once perfect and happy angel allowd himself to become overwhelmed with jealousy and so he turned himself into a rebellous resistor of God's way and so he introduced the spirit of rebellion to the human family and man has known human suffering every since.
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Human suffering hurts the God who created humans to be perfect and happy individuals the most. A once perfect and happy angel allowd himself to become overwhelmed with jealousy and so he turned himself into a rebellous resistor of God's way and so he introduced the spirit of rebellion to the human family and man has known human suffering every since.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2014
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Thanks for reading.
Comment from Janet Foor
Truly, Suffering usually includes an avalanche of people.
This is a very well written piece on the human condition. I especially that the following stanza was significant.
human suffering
domino effect
worldwide, everywhere
one person begins chain of events
Well done
Janet
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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Truly, Suffering usually includes an avalanche of people.
This is a very well written piece on the human condition. I especially that the following stanza was significant.
human suffering
domino effect
worldwide, everywhere
one person begins chain of events
Well done
Janet
Comment Written 17-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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Thank you for reading.
Comment from Sloegin
WOW! This one shook me up. No verbiage here, every word counts.
You hit several human suffering points and did well with each. Those of us who don't suffer sometimes forget how tough life can be.
Good job.
sloegin
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WOW! This one shook me up. No verbiage here, every word counts.
You hit several human suffering points and did well with each. Those of us who don't suffer sometimes forget how tough life can be.
Good job.
sloegin
Comment Written 17-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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Thank you for reading.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi the author,
Suffering is a universal affliction, and as your poem so rightly says, injury is not always confined to the injured only. The impact is always far wider.
Nicely stated, good luck.
Patrick
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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Hi the author,
Suffering is a universal affliction, and as your poem so rightly says, injury is not always confined to the injured only. The impact is always far wider.
Nicely stated, good luck.
Patrick
Comment Written 17-Sep-2014
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Thank you for reading.
Comment from godlucifer
we all gather,gather our ceremony. we all suffer,suffer to a ceremony. the ceremony of suffering is the ceremony of pain. no matter how much we suffer our ceremony is our prize,prize of enjoyment. your poem was a influence on life and it read with verses that was invincible. i enjoyed n reading your poem. thanks for the read. "your so vein" means mood or humor.
your so vein
godlucifer
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we all gather,gather our ceremony. we all suffer,suffer to a ceremony. the ceremony of suffering is the ceremony of pain. no matter how much we suffer our ceremony is our prize,prize of enjoyment. your poem was a influence on life and it read with verses that was invincible. i enjoyed n reading your poem. thanks for the read. "your so vein" means mood or humor.
your so vein
godlucifer
Comment Written 17-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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Thank you for reading.
