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I Couldn't See the Moon

quatrains in 8/6/8/6

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Comment from Rdfrdmom2
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Brooke:

This is a beautiful poem made up of five quatrains
which reminds me of the theme of Bette Midler's,
The Rose. Nature has a way of showing us there is
always light after the darkness.

Thanks for sharing. Love, Jan

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2014

reply by the author on 18-Sep-2014
    Thank you, Jan, for your thoughtful response to this poem. I love that song. The first time I heard it was in my car radio at a time of great turmoil in my marriage. I was so moved by it that I had to pull over to the side of the road. Brooke
Comment from Charlene0513
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To adewpearl,
There is a lot to be said for lunar eclipses.
As the darkness of the night overcomes our thoughts we always have the privilege of looking forward to a better tomorrow.
Enjambments with alliteration:buds burst into bloom
Clean flow and smooth cadence to make for an enjoyable read.
Charlene

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2014

reply by the author on 18-Sep-2014
    Charlene, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Oatmeal
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adewpearl,

All things are moving effectively, nice and full of flashy impressions. Atmosphere is full of vivid and delightful descriptions.

I saw no SPAG and no typos. Everything looked in place.

I look forward to seeing you again.

Love you,

Oatmeal

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2014

reply by the author on 18-Sep-2014
    Thank you, Oatmeal, for your review :-) Brooke
Comment from lancellot
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A very well crafted piece. There many things we can't see with our eyes but the world lets us know they are there in many other wonderful ways. Well done.

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2014

reply by the author on 18-Sep-2014
    lancellot, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from L.M.Mullins
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Hi Brooke,
I think this is an excellent job on this foggy piece that is filled with imagery. I Love your use of enjambment throughout.
Len

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2014

reply by the author on 18-Sep-2014
    Len, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from mfowler
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This is one of your blending natural science with fantasy poems that I like so much. How cleverly you used 'cultural knowledge' of the natural world to paint such a beautiful word picture. My favourite:
waves kept rolling with the tides
to prove the moon was there.

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2014

reply by the author on 18-Sep-2014
    Mark, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Jay Squires
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Wow, Brooke, that is one of your more profound poems. It is the unseen that quietly keeps our world in balance.

Then there are the lunar tides affecting the women's menstrual cycle, and more and more, the evidence mounts that man's brain's activity is also closely connected with the moon.

Thank you for your poem's power in its simplicity.

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2014

reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
    Jay, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from acerisestory
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This is a beautiful poem, Brooke! I love the message of your lines, which, I believe, is to have faith in what is there, even if we can't see it.

Your meter is well done, and your wonderful use of enjambment and alliteration make your lines flow with a great rhythm. The accompanying artwork perfectly enhances your words.

A six for you, my friend! Alana

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2014

reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
    Alana, thank you so much :-) I so appreciate your insight and generosity :-) Brooke
reply by acerisestory on 17-Sep-2014
    You are welcome, Brooke! Alana
Comment from bard owl
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That lunar effect on earth's humans is always with us, whether or not we see it or not. And it brought to mind the fact that our lives are so dependent on the moon. As always, your poem is flawless and your words quite jaunty in describing your faith in luna. A very upbeat read. Blessinsg, Linda

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2014

reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
    Linda, thank you for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Kingsland
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We are mostly water. The moon affects water greatly, so it affects us. I enjoyed reading this well written poetic voice. It reads smoothly and has a good cadence within its thoughts... John

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2014

reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
    John, thank you so much :-) Brooke