I Couldn't See the Moon
quatrains in 8/6/8/6166 total reviews
Comment from Curly Girly
This is a delightful poem. This is my favourite verse:
While I saw but a shroud of fog
that cast its pall of gloom,
the creatures of the wood still woke
as buds burst into bloom.
It sounds so cheerful!
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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This is a delightful poem. This is my favourite verse:
While I saw but a shroud of fog
that cast its pall of gloom,
the creatures of the wood still woke
as buds burst into bloom.
It sounds so cheerful!
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Thank you, Curly Girly, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from ann marie mazz
hi brooke
this entry is poetry in the truest sense and fashion
tone flow language and more
allow me to say
it is an entry to be read out loud
with passion and emphasis
truly
thank you for sharing your poetic talent
and yes
your presentation is marvelous as well
enjoy the night
ann marie
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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hi brooke
this entry is poetry in the truest sense and fashion
tone flow language and more
allow me to say
it is an entry to be read out loud
with passion and emphasis
truly
thank you for sharing your poetic talent
and yes
your presentation is marvelous as well
enjoy the night
ann marie
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much, Ann Marie - I think all poetry should be read aloud, so I appreciate that comment :-) Brooke
Comment from Dom G Robles
I am rating this poem with all the beauty of words and mastery of the English language. I see very strong and powerful words. But I am lost on imagery which, we happen not to cover in my second class with you. But there is one thing that I want to clear with you. The first line, lady, and its impact it has on the second line. "I couldn't see the moon tonight. But I did not despair..." And I got lost. The reason being that you speak of a future happening, but you said, "I did not despair..." From my own thinking and there seems to some kind of inconsistency here. Thank you, But forgive my dust. Dom
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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I am rating this poem with all the beauty of words and mastery of the English language. I see very strong and powerful words. But I am lost on imagery which, we happen not to cover in my second class with you. But there is one thing that I want to clear with you. The first line, lady, and its impact it has on the second line. "I couldn't see the moon tonight. But I did not despair..." And I got lost. The reason being that you speak of a future happening, but you said, "I did not despair..." From my own thinking and there seems to some kind of inconsistency here. Thank you, But forgive my dust. Dom
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Thank you, Dom, for your thoughtful observations. I appreciate your generous rating :-) Brooke
Comment from krys123
Brooke;
What an enjoyable gift to be able to read such a writing such as yours. This poem is written so lovely and in many ways picturesque. The pictures grand and complements your writing very much.
Your rhyming complements your rhythm and helps with the rhythmic flow is your rhythm also flows smoothly throughout your writing.
The imagery is most beautiful and very delicately descriptive as it is also exquisitely expressive throughout: "I couldn't see the sun today when fog invaded dawn, but hidden rays sent down there warmth to wake the sleeping fawn." A well rhymed and very visual piece of poetry.
Thank you so much for sharing and posting this for everyone to read and make the good Lord be with you always Brooke.
Alex
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Brooke;
What an enjoyable gift to be able to read such a writing such as yours. This poem is written so lovely and in many ways picturesque. The pictures grand and complements your writing very much.
Your rhyming complements your rhythm and helps with the rhythmic flow is your rhythm also flows smoothly throughout your writing.
The imagery is most beautiful and very delicately descriptive as it is also exquisitely expressive throughout: "I couldn't see the sun today when fog invaded dawn, but hidden rays sent down there warmth to wake the sleeping fawn." A well rhymed and very visual piece of poetry.
Thank you so much for sharing and posting this for everyone to read and make the good Lord be with you always Brooke.
Alex
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Alex, thank you so much. I agree, this is one stunning picture :-) Brooke
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You are so sincerely welcome Brooke.
Alex
Comment from Pyrrho
I love it; tides proving the moon is still there on a cloudy night ... great line.
When I lived in West Virginia I used to imagine children asking their parents, "What is that blue stuff up there."
If you flew a lot as I did for years, you know the top of the clouds are bathed in sunlight.
Nice Poly Anna poem.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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I love it; tides proving the moon is still there on a cloudy night ... great line.
When I lived in West Virginia I used to imagine children asking their parents, "What is that blue stuff up there."
If you flew a lot as I did for years, you know the top of the clouds are bathed in sunlight.
Nice Poly Anna poem.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much, Pyrrho :-) Brooke
Comment from misscookie
The artwork that you choose capture my attention from the start.
I could vision myself there by the water in the heavy fog,
thank you for sharing the peaceful poem.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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The artwork that you choose capture my attention from the start.
I could vision myself there by the water in the heavy fog,
thank you for sharing the peaceful poem.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Miss Cookie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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you're very welcome. Have a blessed day, until next time.
Cookie
Comment from Drew Delaney
Yes, indeed the painting is so very beautiful. I loved this form with 8/6/8/6 quatrains. I seem to be having writer's block or whatever, because it seems I can't even think how to write a simple poem anymore. It used to come much easier, but I do have some pressing things on my mind. Maybe, well all is a bit more settled, my muse will reappear. You handles this poem like an artist. So lovely and with a consistent flow. Well done, my poet friend.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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Yes, indeed the painting is so very beautiful. I loved this form with 8/6/8/6 quatrains. I seem to be having writer's block or whatever, because it seems I can't even think how to write a simple poem anymore. It used to come much easier, but I do have some pressing things on my mind. Maybe, well all is a bit more settled, my muse will reappear. You handles this poem like an artist. So lovely and with a consistent flow. Well done, my poet friend.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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Drew, thank you so much :-) I hope to see new work from you soon :-) Brooke
Comment from Ben Colder
But you knew it it was there and that is all that mattered. Excellent poem with strong wording. Good rhythm and easy to follow. Blessings Brooke.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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But you knew it it was there and that is all that mattered. Excellent poem with strong wording. Good rhythm and easy to follow. Blessings Brooke.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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Ben, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from nomi338
Beautiful. Just as no man has ever seen the fce of God and lived to tell about it, we see and feel his wonderful, wondorus works all about us. The power and wonder of His miraclous works are all about us and seen in the flowers, the mountains, grass,animals and beautiful people of the earth.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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Beautiful. Just as no man has ever seen the fce of God and lived to tell about it, we see and feel his wonderful, wondorus works all about us. The power and wonder of His miraclous works are all about us and seen in the flowers, the mountains, grass,animals and beautiful people of the earth.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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nomi, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from baustian64
You are right the picture is perfect for this poem. I like it very much. Very much like having faith in something. Just because you can't see it doesn't mean it isn't there.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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You are right the picture is perfect for this poem. I like it very much. Very much like having faith in something. Just because you can't see it doesn't mean it isn't there.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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Baustian, thank you so much :-) Brooke
