I Couldn't See the Moon
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Comment from thee-name
Good verse. Could understand it. Rhymes.
I COULDN'T SEE THE MOON TONIGHT
BUT I DID NOT DESPAIR
FOR WAVES KEPT ROLLING WITH THE TIDES
TO PROVE THE MOON WAS THERE
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Good verse. Could understand it. Rhymes.
I COULDN'T SEE THE MOON TONIGHT
BUT I DID NOT DESPAIR
FOR WAVES KEPT ROLLING WITH THE TIDES
TO PROVE THE MOON WAS THERE
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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thee-name, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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THANK YOU!
Comment from patcelaw
Very nice. I love the way you explained the pull of the moon on the tides and the way you express how even though we can't see the moon or sun at times because of weather conditions, they are both still there.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Very nice. I love the way you explained the pull of the moon on the tides and the way you express how even though we can't see the moon or sun at times because of weather conditions, they are both still there.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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patcelaw, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Capricorn30
A pleasure to read a well-crafted poem of moon's unique effect coupled with the mystery of fog;
Indeed, beneath this chilly mist there lies beauty;
"still felt old Luna's pull"--this line really caught my eye, as midnight tides are the only indication of life within clouds;
Good alliteration: "buds burst into bloom".
Excellent! Thank you for sharing, Brooke.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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A pleasure to read a well-crafted poem of moon's unique effect coupled with the mystery of fog;
Indeed, beneath this chilly mist there lies beauty;
"still felt old Luna's pull"--this line really caught my eye, as midnight tides are the only indication of life within clouds;
Good alliteration: "buds burst into bloom".
Excellent! Thank you for sharing, Brooke.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014
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Capricorn, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from humpwhistle
I like the way one comes full circle, Brooke.
And the neat little piece of science woven into
your poem. The moon and the tides. A good relationship for the kids to catch onto.
Then unseen moon because the object lesson,
reassuring faith in the presence of other things unseen.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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I like the way one comes full circle, Brooke.
And the neat little piece of science woven into
your poem. The moon and the tides. A good relationship for the kids to catch onto.
Then unseen moon because the object lesson,
reassuring faith in the presence of other things unseen.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Lee, thank you so much, my generous and insightful friend :-) Brooke
Comment from c_lucas
The full moon is a catalyst for Love, but so is a blackout. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Have Sawyer climb up and change the moon's bulb.
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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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The full moon is a catalyst for Love, but so is a blackout. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Have Sawyer climb up and change the moon's bulb.
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Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014
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Charlie, thank you so much, my friend :-) Brooke
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You're welcome, Brook. Charlie
Comment from TAB_that's me
I never think about the moon and its effect on the tide as I don't live near the ocean but we do know that even when hidden the sun and moon are always there. Wonderful poem with great imagery.
Teresa
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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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I never think about the moon and its effect on the tide as I don't live near the ocean but we do know that even when hidden the sun and moon are always there. Wonderful poem with great imagery.
Teresa
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Comment Written 16-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2014
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Teresa, thank you so much :-) Brooke
